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Gandhi
Aujourd'hui j'aimerais écrire sur Gandhi. Je suis sûr que vous avez déjà entendu le nom. Il est fameux pour son lutte contre L'impérialisme notamment dans son pays natal, l'Inde.
Mais il ya une autre chose qui est, à mon avis, bien plus intéressant et imposant sur l'affaire du Gandhi : Son façon de négocier, son façon de parler.
Ce que je trouve étonnant sur Gandhi c'est qu'il a souvent essayé de collaborer avec ses ennemis. Son leitmotiv était d'essayer de montre l'autre son propre façon de la situation. C'est à dire d'essayer de le montrer ses arguments. Ce n'était pas pour détruire l'ennemi afin de se moquer de lui. Il a traité ses ennemis comme des amis, en fait.
Ses essais de plutôt convaincre que ridiculiser ses ennemis ont une sorte de noblesse et de coopération.
Cependant il a lutté très dur pour obtenir ses objectifs. Un autre détail que je trouve vraiment cool est sa non-violence. J'ai l'avis que tout violence juste provoque plus de violence. Pour cela je crois qu'il a fait son travail très bien
April 12, 2021
Bicycle tour in Jeju Island
Jeju Island is the biggest island in Korea.
Because of beautiful scenery and delicious foods, not only Korean but also Chinese and Japanese are like to visit the island.
Ten years ago, my college friends and I visited the island for traveling around the island by bicycle.
The distance around there is more than 240 km and many people used to complete to ride during a week.
However, we only had 3 days and available time is only 48 hours excepting taking a plane.
So we had to ride from dawn till midnight.
I was very tired by the overface, but I could have many interesting memories.
The tangerines were more delicious during riding, I had a Horse Meat Bulgoji very first time.
And the most impressed moment was when I saw shooting stars riding midnight.
If I will have a change, I will go there to ride once again.
April 12, 2021
Q&A about Space
Q1. Why have we proceeded with the space development?
I think during the Cold War the US and USSR proceeded with it in order to display their technology and more capable to the other. It's more political reason than a scientific one. However now, countries try to find discoveries about space or extraterrestrial life. Therefore, the reasons seem to be curiosity and its utilization for human beings. At the same time, I don't deny the development is connected with weapon developments that lead to international advantage.
Q2. What are the main (final) purposes of space development?
The final purpose is to find another habitable zone except for the Earth and being able to migrate there. It means expanding the habitat of human beings in the universe.
These answers are just my opinions, and there's no only one correct answer. If you have different ones, please comment!
April 12, 2021
Трудности русского языка
Люди часто говорят, что русский язык- труден, но я не согласен. Ну, конечно русский язык не лёгкий, но я думаю, что существуют более трудные языки.
Когда я начал изучать русский язык, я уже говорил неплохо по-польски. Это очень мне помогло, потому что я уже был знаком с правилами грамматики.
Хотя грамматика это не великая проблема, конечно я делаю ошибки. Для меня самое трудное в русской грамматике это глаголы движения и числа. Хотя я понимаю разницу между "ехать" а "ездить", я часто не умею использовать правильный глагол. А числа просто - кошмар: слишком много перемен, а кроме того слишком много видов чисел.
Так как я говорю гораздо лучше по-польски чем по-русски, я часто думаю по-польски, когда я говорю по-русски и два языки мешаются. Это трудно запомнить новые слова, потому что я помню лучше польские слова. Например я часто говорю "неделя" вместо "воскресенье", потому что по-польски "воскресенье" говорят "niedziela" и мне так стыдно, когда я говорю "так" вместо "да"...
April 12, 2021
修正をもらって実力をよくなること
LangCorrectはとっても有用なウェブサイトだと思います。私は日本語を一人で勉強しているので先生がありません。ですから何かを書く時、私が書いたのは正しいかどうかわかりません。でも、私の文章をLangCorrectに載せるのならネイティブから手伝ってもらうことができます。
修正をもらうと印刷します。そして時間がある時あの修正を見ながら文章をもう一度バインダー書きます。書く時、正しい部分を黒いボールペンで書きます。修正もらった部分を青いボールペンで書きます。色が違いのでもっと勉強することがよく見えます。このサイトを通じて私を手伝った人のおかげで私の日本語がよくになっていると思います！
April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
私にとっての日本語の問題
日本語はスウェーデン語の文法より全く違うです。以前の日誌そうと書いたけど、今日は私にとっての日本語問題をね練ろうと思います！
日本人はよく「漢字を覚えることは一番難しいだろう？」と聞かれます。漢字を覚えるのは土大丈夫と思いますよ。私の一番難しい問題は助詞です。助詞と動詞の活用形のは難しいと思います。スウェーデン語で助詞がないから、助詞の使いは私にとって新しい考え方です。または日本語を話すとき、「この会話は誰についてですか？」と思うときがありますよ（笑）。スウェーデン語では毎文章でいつも誰についての話していると言いますよ。
「が」と「に」と「は」と「には」の助詞は難しいと思います。使い方の指示があれば、私に教えてくださいね！
April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
¿Qué países hablan su idioma objectivo?
El español es uno de los idiomas más populares en el mundo y es lengua oficial de veinte países, incluyendo España, México y Argentina. He visito España dos veces y lo quiero visitar otra vez. Todavia no he estado en Sudamérica que es muy lejos de Asia. Probé la comida mexicana y la comida Sudamérica en Inglasterra y las me gustan. Si tengo el tiempo, me gustaría ir a Peru y México, pero me preocupa la seguridad.
April 12, 2021
GRE Argument 'Restricting the Water Flow'
I'm preparing for the GRE analytical writing session which will happen in 5 days. My target score is 4.5. Please review my practice essay and make feedback. Thanks a lot!
Prompt
The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
My Essay
In the letter, the owner of the Sunnyside Towers complex introduced his plan of restricting the water flow of showerheads in all twelve buildings to one-third of the current degree. The owner argued that this will be dramatically lucrative since it will save a lot of expanses of water and only a few complaints appeared yet. However, on three specific points, his or her argument doesn't hold water.
First, the total water consumption may stay still despite the decreased water flow since the owner hasn't checked the actual readings yet. A reduced water flow will probably damage a person's shower experience. For instance, one will notice that it's harder to wash off the dirt on the body. Thus, it is possible that the residents will spend more time on the shower and cost more water. This may counteract the savings from cutting down water flow and result in unchanged water consumption.
Second, although current complaints the owner received aren't very much, their number may increase in the future. For instance, the limited number of complaints may due to the cozy weather of this time. If the temperature increase after a few months, people would spend more time taking showers and then suffer more from the reduced water flow. In that case, they will make more complaints. Some tenants may even decide to end the lease, which is extremely harmful to the owner's profits.
Moreover, restricting maximum water flow to one-third of the current degree may damage the assets of apartments. For instance, the water pipes would probably rust faster because there would be more stagnant water in them. Also, flowers in the garden might be in great danger due to the decreased water for irrigating them. Therefore, the owner couldn't assess the profits simply based on the water consumption. The changes in upkeep also matter.
In conclusion, the owner of the Sunnyside Towers complex failed to give a convincing argument. The owner couldn't assure the water consumption is reduced as a whole, the number of complaints wouldn't increase in the future, and no extra damages would occur due to the low water pressure. If any of these three weaknesses remain, his or her evidence doesn't hold water.
April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
Diary 0412
Today is not a good day. I was woken up 4 times last night by my roommates, who woke me up by going to bed very loudly and closing the balcony door very loudly. They always claim to be doing "academic work" - a 6,000 word paper they've spent almost a year on and haven't finished! The last time was close to 5am and I got up in a huff. Then I skipped school for the day. I've been preparing for NEEP (the national entrance examination for postgraduate), and if I go to school classes, I won't be able to keep up with the online classes I bought. The quality of teaching in online classes is much better than in schools. But I will probably go to the evening class because that course only has two sessions a semester.
April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
English Lesson for International Exchange Parties
I have ever joined a workshop about how to use English for international exchange parties.
A party organizer held the workshop, and also held an international exchange party after that. I was able to get to the party with buddies who learned and enjoy the party-English lesson together.
It was a great chance and a nice experience for me.
Through the kind of lessons, I learned that I need to practice speaking English in person for conversation skills in the language.
April 12, 2021
Sentences 076: Acting On, Appalled, Reasoning Out
This virus only acts on animals which have wounded are are weakened already.
The jogger was very appalled when she spotted a dead corpse in a hedgerow.
He read all the articles on the illness and reasoned out that the symptoms he's been having don't match it.
April 12, 2021
I sell theme park goods as store staff.
I work at a theme park as a store crew.
The shop has a lot of goods and confections. I like these pretty and charming goods.
Guests looking and picking up the goods look fun and enjoy. I enjoy seeing these guests.
I moved into this venue last August. I didn't think I could so enjoy the work here at that time.
I feel I'm lucky.
April 12, 2021
Las correcciones en español
Me gusta que me hagan correcciones en mi español para ver cómo puedo mejorar. Se puede ayudar mucho para que pueda sonar más como un nativo. A veces es difícil porque hay muchos dialectos españoles. Quiero centrarme en el español mexicano y, a veces, alguien de un dialecto diferente me puede corregir cuando no es incorrecto. Es muy interesante cómo el español puede ser tan diferente.
April 12, 2021
Что для большинства людей самое важное в работе? (5)
Судя по следствиям опроса SHRM, возможность применять свои специальные навыки и способности на работе, — это еще один важный фактор в выборе долгосрочной работы. 55% опрошенных SHRM в 2009 году считали, что у них гарантия занятости будет больше в таких должностях, в которых их специальные навыки и способности применимые к своим рабочим обязанностям. Как правило такая обстановка вносит вклад в уровень успех и прогресс в карьере. Это тоже предоставляет рабочим возможности повышать квалификацию и приводит к высшему уровню заработной платы.
April 12, 2021
Dag 11 (av 30) - Mina korrigeringar
Jag har inte riktigt använt mina korrigeringar för att studera. Mitt mål för den här månaden är att bara bygga en vana att skriva på både spanska och svenska varje dag, tack vare utmaningen. Kanske nästa månad kommer jag att granska alla korrigeringar jag fick på månadens poster och svara på samma frågor på ett bättre sätt.
April 12, 2021
Día 11 (de 30) - Mis correcciones
Realmente no he estado usando mis correcciones para estudiar. Mi objetivo para este mes es simplemente desarrollar el hábito de escribir en español y en sueco todos los días, gracias al desafío. Quizás el próximo mes revise todas las correcciones que recibí en las entradas de este mes y responda a las mismas preguntas de una mejor manera.
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April 12, 2021
April 12, 2021
Vorstellung
Hallo, ich heiße Christopher. Ich komme aus der Vereinigte Staaten und wohne in New York City. Hier spricht man Englisch. Ich auch spreche gut Spanisch und ein bisschen Deutsch. Ich war schon mal in Deutschland, in München, und in Österreich, in Wien. Auch meine Urgroßmutter war von Österreich. Ich war noch nie in der Schweiz, aber ich möchte fahren.
April 12, 2021
Als ich noch an Liebe geglaubt habe
Es ist nicht so, dass ich jetzt nicht mehr an Liebe glaube, aber jetzt weiß ich aus eigener Erfahrung, wie schwierig eine Beziehung sein kann. Als ich jünger war, haben ein paar Sachen mich nicht gestört. Vielleicht war es so, weil ich eine Beziehung irgendwie erleben wollte. Ich wollte einfach einen Freund haben, ihn lieben und von ihm geliebt werden. Ich wollte einiges zusammen unternehmen: Ins Kino gehen, kochen, reisen, schlaffen... Ich würde diese Sachen nicht ablehnen, aber es ist schwer, mir einzubilden, dass ich in eine Beziehung einspringen werde, nach allem, was mir schon passiert ist. Aber ich hoffe, dass ich mich dabei gewaltig irre.