May 23, 2021
Writing: Sports
One important effect of sports on society is the fact that they draw people together. Whether it is members of a team, or fans rooting for a certain team, sports have always bonded people of different backgrounds together with a common goal. Second, all positive traits for a healthy mind and a healthy body can be gained from sports. People who do sports remain physically fit. Healthy people make a healthy society. People's work efficiency also increases and so it benefits the society as a whole. Sports also teach us how to handle failures with dignity, while enjoying victories to the maximum. Also, it trains people to handle crunch situations, where stress can try and pull them down.
Writing: Sports
One important effect of sports on society is the fact that they draw people together.
Whether it isbe members of a team, or fans rooting for a certain team, sports have always bondunited people of different backgrounds together with a common goal.
"United" sounds better to me.
"Be it" or "whether it be" is the correct formulation.
Second, all positive traits for a healthy mind and a healthy body can be gained from sports.
People who do sports remain physically fit.
Healthy people make a healthy society.
People's work efficiency also increases and, so it benefits the society as a whole.
"And so" isn't strictly wrong, but it sounds unnecessary here.
Also, ithey trains people to handle crunchhigh pressure situations, where stress can try and pull them down.
"Crunch" can't be used as an adjective.
"Can try to pull" would also be fine, but it sounds a little redundant to me since "can" also indicates that it's a possibility and not a certainty.
June 1, 2021
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Writing: Sports This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One important effect of sports on society is the fact that they draw people together. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Whether it is members of a team, or fans rooting for a certain team, sports have always bonded people of different backgrounds together with a common goal. Whether it "United" sounds better to me. "Be it" or "whether it be" is the correct formulation. |
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Second, all positive traits for a healthy mind and a healthy body can be gained from sports. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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People who do sports remain physically fit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Healthy people make a healthy society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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People's work efficiency also increases and so it benefits the society as a whole. People's work efficiency also increases "And so" isn't strictly wrong, but it sounds unnecessary here. |
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Sports also teach us how to handle failures with dignity, while enjoying victories to the maximum. |
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Also, it trains people to handle crunch situations, where stress can try and pull them down. Also, "Crunch" can't be used as an adjective. "Can try to pull" would also be fine, but it sounds a little redundant to me since "can" also indicates that it's a possibility and not a certainty. |
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