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jubernal05

June 17, 2025

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Walking with my Dog

I have a Dog his name is Toby, every day we going to the park, two times at day, in the first time walking in the park and he doing their necessities, it's a short route in the second one, he plays with other dogs, he is more friendly, and he like run around the park, when he is tired do their necessities and we walking back to the house

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I have a Ddog, and his name is Toby, every day w. We going to the park, two timesice at day, in the first time. We go for a walking in the park athe first time around, he doing their necessities, it's ahis business. It's a pretty short route in t. The second onetime around, he plays with other dogs, h. He is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he igets tired do their necessities, he does his business, and we walking back to the house.

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Cute dog!

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Walking wWith mMy Dog

All capitals for titles except 'and' plus a few more

I have a Ddog his name is Toby, e. Every day we going to the park, two times at day, in t. The first time, we walking in the park and he doing theires his necessities, it's a short route in t. The second ontime, he plays with other dogs,; he is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he is tired do theirof doing his necessities and we walking back to the house.

This sentence is a run-on, so that means it is too long. Try making them short and simple to start. Try to group individual pieces of information together that are related into a sentence. Like in the correction, 1 sentence is saying his name is Toby, 1 is talking about the first walk and 1 the second walk. The last one is because it shows a transition back to the house.

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Great job! Just work on punctuation and grammar tenses and you'll keep improving!

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meech

June 19, 2025

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Also duties would be better than necessities here but it is understood what you mean.

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I have a Ddog his name isd Toby, every. Twice a day we going to thea park, two times at day, in the first time walking in the park and he doing their necessities, it's a short route in the second one. During his morning walk, Toby urinates and defecates. During his afternoon stroll, he plays with other dogs. During that time, he is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he is tired do their necessitiesand answers the call of nature, and we walking back to the house.

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I have a Dog his name isd Toby. Twice a day, every day we going to the park, two times at day, in t. The first time walking in the park and heToby doing their necessities, it'his business. The second trip is a short route in the second one, he. Toby plays with other dogs, he is and more friendly, and h. He likes to run around the park, and when he igets tired do their necessitihe does his business and we walking back to the house.

Need to break this into multiple sentences. We might say in US English "business" in place of necessities or simply say he goes to the bathroom.

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In the US a "park" and "dog park" are different. So depending where you are in the world / if you are going to a "dog park" then might want to say, "Twice a day, everyday we go to the dog park." A dog park is a park for dogs and a park is a park for people. A lot of public parks for people dogs aren't allowed (here in the US).

Walking with my Dog

Walking wWith mMy Dog

All capitals for titles except 'and' plus a few more

I have a Dog his name is Toby, every day we going to the park, two times at day, in the first time walking in the park and he doing their necessities, it's a short route in the second one, he plays with other dogs, he is more friendly, and he like run around the park, when he is tired do their necessities and we walking back to the house

I have a Dog his name isd Toby. Twice a day, every day we going to the park, two times at day, in t. The first time walking in the park and heToby doing their necessities, it'his business. The second trip is a short route in the second one, he. Toby plays with other dogs, he is and more friendly, and h. He likes to run around the park, and when he igets tired do their necessitihe does his business and we walking back to the house.

Need to break this into multiple sentences. We might say in US English "business" in place of necessities or simply say he goes to the bathroom.

I have a Ddog his name isd Toby, every. Twice a day we going to thea park, two times at day, in the first time walking in the park and he doing their necessities, it's a short route in the second one. During his morning walk, Toby urinates and defecates. During his afternoon stroll, he plays with other dogs. During that time, he is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he is tired do their necessitiesand answers the call of nature, and we walking back to the house.

I have a Ddog his name is Toby, e. Every day we going to the park, two times at day, in t. The first time, we walking in the park and he doing theires his necessities, it's a short route in t. The second ontime, he plays with other dogs,; he is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he is tired do theirof doing his necessities and we walking back to the house.

This sentence is a run-on, so that means it is too long. Try making them short and simple to start. Try to group individual pieces of information together that are related into a sentence. Like in the correction, 1 sentence is saying his name is Toby, 1 is talking about the first walk and 1 the second walk. The last one is because it shows a transition back to the house.

I have a Ddog, and his name is Toby, every day w. We going to the park, two timesice at day, in the first time. We go for a walking in the park athe first time around, he doing their necessities, it's ahis business. It's a pretty short route in t. The second onetime around, he plays with other dogs, h. He is more friendly, and he likes to run around the park, w. When he igets tired do their necessities, he does his business, and we walking back to the house.

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