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mantekhan

May 13, 2025

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This image invite us to a deep reflection about current...

This image invite us to a deep reflection about current society.

We can see a crowd in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed in the bright screens that buried them in a virtual world.
They looks like immersed in a cold earth, the weather suggest disconnection with the reality that is around them.
In contrast, in the surface we can see an alone character pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a buried heads field, with only their faces revealed.

(I don't know how can i put an image in the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )

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This image invites us to a deep reflection about currthe present...

(1) It should be "invites" not "invite", since "[t]his image" is singular.
(2) "Current" is an adjective. "The present" is the noun.

This image invites us to a deep reflection about current society.

Again, "[t]his image" is singular.

We can see a crowd engrossed in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed into the bright screens that buriedy them in a virtual world.

(1) "a crowd in their smartphones" implies a crowd physically inside their smartphones, which is obviously not what you meant.
(2) "in" is the wrong preposition to use here. You should use "to" or "on".

They looks like immersed inthey inhabit a cold earth, the weather suggesting a disconnection with the reality that is around them.

(1) It should be "look" not "looks", since "they" is plural.
(2) immerse: involve oneself deeply in a particular activity. "immersed" doesn't strike me as very appropriate in this context. Allow me to suggest "inhabit".
(3) It's a subtle difference, but "disconnection" and "disconnect" are different. "Disconnection" refers to the state of being disconnected, or the act of disconnecting something. On the other hand, "disconnect" refers to the actual discrepancy or lack of connection.

In contrast, ion the surface we can see an a lone character pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a field of buried heads field, with only their faces revealed.

(1) You can't ever be "in" the surface; you can only stand "on" it.
(2) lone: having no companions; solitary or single.
(3) "buried heads field" is understandable, but "field of buried heads" is much more natural.

(I don't know how I can i punsert an image in the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )

(1) "Can I" is used in questions ("Can I insert an image?"), while "I can" is used in statements ("I don't know if I can insert an image."), though in very casual speech, both are considered acceptable, because people mix them up frequently enough.
(2) "put" is okay, but "insert" is more appropriate, or, as someone else has suggested "attach". By the way, you need to purchase Premium to insert images.
(3) The comma may be omitted.

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mantekhan

May 15, 2025

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Thanks for the corrections and time sir!!

This image invites us to take a deep reflection about current times...

This image invites us to take a deep reflection about current society.

We can see a crowd in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed into the bright screens that buriedy them into a virtual world.

They looks like they are immersed in athe cold earth, t. The weather suggests that there is a disconnection with the reality that is asurrounds them.

In contrast, ion the surface, we can see an alone character alone, pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a buried heads field, with only their faces being revealed.

(I don't know how can i putI attach an image into the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )

Put also makes perfect sense, but attach sounds better.

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Good job!

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mantekhan

May 15, 2025

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Thx for your time sir!!

This image invite us to a deep reflection about current...


This image invites us to take a deep reflection about current times...

This image invites us to a deep reflection about currthe present...

(1) It should be "invites" not "invite", since "[t]his image" is singular. (2) "Current" is an adjective. "The present" is the noun.

This image invite us to a deep reflection about current society.


This image invites us to take a deep reflection about current society.

This image invites us to a deep reflection about current society.

Again, "[t]his image" is singular.

We can see a crowd in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed in the bright screens that buried them in a virtual world.


We can see a crowd in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed into the bright screens that buriedy them into a virtual world.

We can see a crowd engrossed in their smartphones, with their eyes fixed into the bright screens that buriedy them in a virtual world.

(1) "a crowd in their smartphones" implies a crowd physically inside their smartphones, which is obviously not what you meant. (2) "in" is the wrong preposition to use here. You should use "to" or "on".

They looks like immersed in a cold earth, the weather suggest disconnection with the reality that is around them.


They looks like they are immersed in athe cold earth, t. The weather suggests that there is a disconnection with the reality that is asurrounds them.

They looks like immersed inthey inhabit a cold earth, the weather suggesting a disconnection with the reality that is around them.

(1) It should be "look" not "looks", since "they" is plural. (2) immerse: involve oneself deeply in a particular activity. "immersed" doesn't strike me as very appropriate in this context. Allow me to suggest "inhabit". (3) It's a subtle difference, but "disconnection" and "disconnect" are different. "Disconnection" refers to the state of being disconnected, or the act of disconnecting something. On the other hand, "disconnect" refers to the actual discrepancy or lack of connection.

In contrast, in the surface we can see an alone character pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a buried heads field, with only their faces revealed.


In contrast, ion the surface, we can see an alone character alone, pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a buried heads field, with only their faces being revealed.

In contrast, ion the surface we can see an a lone character pushing a lawn mower over something that looks like a field of buried heads field, with only their faces revealed.

(1) You can't ever be "in" the surface; you can only stand "on" it. (2) lone: having no companions; solitary or single. (3) "buried heads field" is understandable, but "field of buried heads" is much more natural.

(I don't know how can i put an image in the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )


(I don't know how can i putI attach an image into the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )

Put also makes perfect sense, but attach sounds better.

(I don't know how I can i punsert an image in the post, so, here is the link: ( https://i.ibb.co/ksXTrXGq/495935971-1039220718273691-8809786197781849979-n.jpg )

(1) "Can I" is used in questions ("Can I insert an image?"), while "I can" is used in statements ("I don't know if I can insert an image."), though in very casual speech, both are considered acceptable, because people mix them up frequently enough. (2) "put" is okay, but "insert" is more appropriate, or, as someone else has suggested "attach". By the way, you need to purchase Premium to insert images. (3) The comma may be omitted.

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