April 26, 2021
There was upon a time a fearful guy
There was upon a time a fearful guy. He was scared of the dark, the woods, the wind, the sounds of the night, and much more. Everything was so threatening for him that simple tasks, such as going to the market or collecting wood for the winter, were an absolute nightmare to his eyes. Their parents found that exasperating. They got furious every time he trembled and cried when being asked to take out the trash.
"What's the matter with you, faint-hearted coward little rabbit?" they said to him, "The world is outside this house and you must face it! What are you gonna do when we perished? Let yourself die from starvation and cold because you're too afraid of going out our door? But he just stared at them perplexedly and kept on crying. That's why one day their parents made a plan to help him learn the hard way: on Market Day the three of them were shopping together, but it wouldn't be like previous Market Days.
He was ecstatic about seeing the stalls overflowing with fruits, meat, and bread (he was shy but glutton). When he turned around to tell his mother that he fancied a delicious-looking watermelon, he discovered petrified that neither his mother nor his father were nowhere to be seen. He was alone and far from home.
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There wasOnce upon a time there was a fearful guy.
Everything was so threatening forto him that simple tasks, such as going to the market or collecting wood for the winter, wereas an absolute nightmare to his eyes.
TheirHis parents found thait exasperating.
They got furious every time he trembled and cried when being asked to take out the trash.
"What's the matter with you, faint-hearted, coward, little rabbit?"
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What are you gonna do when we perishedare gone?
"perish" means to be destroyed, it is a violent meaning. "gone" is a more polite and casual way to say "die."
Let yourself die from starvation and cold because you're too afraid of going outside our door?
But he just stared at them perplexedly and kept on crying.
That's why one day theirhis parents made a plan to help him learn the hard way: on Market Day the three of them werent shopping together, but it wouldn't be like previous Market Days.
He was ecstatic about seeing the stalls overflowing with fruits, meat, and bread (he was shy but gluttonous).
When he turned around to tell his mother that he fancied a delicious-looking watermelon, he discovered petrifiedwas petrified to discover that neither his mother nor his father were nowhere to be seen.
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April 29, 2021
Thank you!
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There was upon a time a fearful guy
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There was upon a time a fearful guy.
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He was scared of the dark, the woods, the wind, the sounds of the night, and much more. |
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Everything was so threatening for him that simple tasks, such as going to the market or collecting wood for the winter, were an absolute nightmare to his eyes. Everything was so threatening |
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Their parents found that exasperating.
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They got furious every time he trembled and cried when being asked to take out the trash. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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"What's the matter with you, faint-hearted coward little rabbit?" "What's the matter with you, faint-hearted, coward, little rabbit?" |
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they said to him, "The world is outside this house and you must face it!
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What are you gonna do when we perished? What are you gonna do when we "perish" means to be destroyed, it is a violent meaning. "gone" is a more polite and casual way to say "die." |
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Let yourself die from starvation and cold because you're too afraid of going out our door? Let yourself die from starvation and cold because you're too afraid of going outside our door? |
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But he just stared at them perplexedly and kept on crying. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That's why one day their parents made a plan to help him learn the hard way: on Market Day the three of them were shopping together, but it wouldn't be like previous Market Days. That's why one day |
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He was ecstatic about seeing the stalls overflowing with fruits, meat, and bread (he was shy but glutton). He was ecstatic about seeing the stalls overflowing with fruits, meat, and bread (he was shy but gluttonous). |
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When he turned around to tell his mother that he fancied a delicious-looking watermelon, he discovered petrified that neither his mother nor his father were nowhere to be seen. When he turned around to tell his mother that he fancied a delicious-looking watermelon, he |
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He was alone and far from home. |
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