June 5, 2025
The post-apocalyptic city
The dry leaves scattered on the ground rustled, and the dust whirled around as our car whirred through the muted streets of the abandoned town. What once were buildings were now piles of broken brick and wood; some structures remained, though barely intact, their walls leaning like tired ghosts. The skeleton-like trees hovered over our jeep, their branches stretching into the air like the gaunt hands of death. The tarmac was worn and uneven; our bodies jolted and our heads bumped against the ceiling as the car bounced over cracks and bumps, tossing us around like balls in a shaking box.
Whizzing past the bank, we caught glimpses of a river through the leafless trees. The water was already drying up; the sandy riverbed was beginning to show, looking like a miniature desert. Quite a distressing sight. What could have happened here for this place to become so haunting and uninhabitable?
The post-apocalyptic city
You might want to observe title capitalisation rules: "The Post-apocalyptic city". I don't think it's too big of a deal, though I do still have to bring it up.
The dry leaves scattered on the ground rustled, and the dust whirled around as our car whirred through the muted streets of the abandoned town.
What once were buildings were now piles of broken brick and wood; some structures remained, though barely intact, their walls leaning like tired ghosts.
The skeleton-like trees hovered over our jeep, their branches stretching into the air like the gaunt hands of death.
The tarmac was worn and uneven; our bodies jolted and our heads bumped against the ceiling as the car bounced over cracks and bumps, tossing us around like balls in a shaking box.
Whizzing past the bank, we caught glimpses of a river through the leafless trees.
The water was already drying up; the sandy riverbed was beginning to show, looking like a miniature desert.
Quite a distressing sight.
What could have happened here for this place to become so haunting and uninhabitable?
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Good command of the language, evident from the generous use of simile. Good work!
The post-apocalyptic city
The dry leaves scattered on the ground rustled, and the dust whirled around, as our car whirred through the muted streets of the abandoned town.
The water was already drying up; the sandy riverbed was beginning to show, looking like a miniature desert.
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Excellent work!
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The post-apocalyptic city The post-apocalyptic city The post-apocalyptic city You might want to observe title capitalisation rules: "The Post-apocalyptic city". I don't think it's too big of a deal, though I do still have to bring it up. |
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The dry leaves scattered on the ground rustled, and the dust whirled around as our car whirred through the muted streets of the abandoned town. The dry leaves scattered on the ground rustled, and the dust whirled around, as our car whirred through the muted streets of the abandoned town. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What once were buildings were now piles of broken brick and wood; some structures remained, though barely intact, their walls leaning like tired ghosts. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The skeleton-like trees hovered over our jeep, their branches stretching into the air like the gaunt hands of death. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The tarmac was worn and uneven; our bodies jolted and our heads bumped against the ceiling as the car bounced over cracks and bumps, tossing us around like balls in a shaking box. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Whizzing past the bank, we caught glimpses of a river through the leafless trees. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The water was already drying up; the sandy riverbed was beginning to show, looking like a miniature desert. The water was already drying up; the sandy riverbed was beginning to show, looking like a miniature desert. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Quite a distressing sight. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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What could have happened here for this place to become so haunting and uninhabitable? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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