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Dec. 19, 2024

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The Mind

The mental health discussion has been doing society a lot of good. It's in its infancy so reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet. However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often, the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts. Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called mind.

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read. Whatever was happening in my mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading. I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible. I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things. I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal. I ascribe my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely. It/them (?) gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach. I could use a hybrid approach.

This might obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

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The Mind

TheDiscussion of mental health discussion has been doing society a lot of good.

It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often,: the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

Had to google what happenstances means lol it does sound a bit out of place here but I'm not sure what it would be replaced with

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendously high and it's still taking me a lot of diggingreflection to learn how to tame this beast called the mind.

I think you can say tremendous but my brain clocks this as incomplete lmao

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read.

Whatever was happening in my mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.

I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things.

I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal.

I ascribe my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

It/them (?)

gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked the best for me, there best,ing no need for a one or the otherstrict approach.

I could use a hybrid approach.

This might be/sound obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us that we need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

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Beleza! I agree a lot, I think our advanced capitalist nations are very hostile to our human nature (despite claiming to be in line with them lol) and thus we have a mental health crisis like today. I think its going to take a lot more than pills and therapy (though those things are extremely helpful) to address such a systemic issue like mental health

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loominglumes

Dec. 20, 2024

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Thank you, I'm trying to write texts that make people learn new words. <3 qué ilusión

Perhaps saying just "tremendous" is an American thing? I really don't know. I have very little experience with British English. I started listening to No Such a Thing as Fish recently aI still can't pinpoint a lot of differences when it comes to usage but, let's give it some time

A lot of people are confused about the digging part. I tried to use it to signify "looking for information", I probably should've clarified that.

Right? I think so, too. Also, I hope people understand that just taking the pills is not enough. Therapy is a huge part of the process. I'll keep trying to do my part by encouraging people and showing them the tools that I know. Hopefully, they will influence someone else, too <3

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judar

Dec. 20, 2024

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We use tremendous alot here but in most contexts the phrase is "tremendously high". But you can definitely use it on its own as an adjective.

"Digging" is correct but "reflection" sounds more natural when talking about mental health imo

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loominglumes

Dec. 21, 2024

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What would you say if you wanted to convey the message of "there's too much information out there, enough to make you confused, no clear cut path, a lot of crappy information, and it takes a lot of time an effort for you to find something that works for you"?

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judar

Dec. 21, 2024

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Overwhelming sounds like the right term to me

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loominglumes

Dec. 21, 2024

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True! Should have thought of that, thank you

The mental health discussion has been doing society a lot of good.

It's in its infancy so reckonearly stages, so it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

"It's in its infancy" is technically correct, as the meaning is easily inferred. However, it sounds more natural to use "early stages" as it fits the connotation of developing ideas more than opposed to child development.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often,: the mind.

When you phrase sentences like this, as in use a clause to introduce a subject, you should use a colon. This is just one way to make this sentence better.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand that I am not my thoughts.

The subject "me" does not need to be included twice. Also a conjunction for a relative clause is needed because the sentence "I am not my thoughts" depends on the previous clause.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous, and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called mind.

"and" is used as a conjunction in this sentence. Therefore, a comma is needed

One of my biggest tormentstruggles was that I couldn't read.

the sentence is grammatically correct, but "torments" is not usually used this way. "struggles", "challenges", "problems" etc. would all suffice.

I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation, and Ccognitive Bbehavioral Ttherapy, and t. They all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were makingmade my life impossible.

a comma after "meditation" is needed.

"and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things-" having "and" and "but" in the same sentence creates a run-on sentence. The place where "and" or "but" starts could be a new sentence instead.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for thingsadvice.

I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal.

I ascttribute my progress to themy decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

"ascribe" is technically correct, but most English speakers would use the word "attribute"

"the decision I took of" can simplified to "my decision" or "the decision I made".

It/them (?)

ChatGPT is a "thing" so it is correct to use "It"

gave a lot of different options, and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best,; no need for a one -or -the -other approach.

"and" is used as a conjunction in this sentence, therefore a comma is needed before it.

"no need for a one-or-the-other" is closely related to the previous sentence and serves as an additional clause even though it is also independent. A semi colon can be used here.

when you write "one or the other", all four of those words together are used like an adjective so it is better to hyphenate them as one-or-the-other.

I could use a hybrid approach.

This might obvious to a lot of people, but it(therapy?) was not for me and. Also, if society is not helping us that(fulfill) our need to learn certain things consciously, then I think it's failing us.

The subject was missing and made the sentence difficult to understand. Judging from the context of this post "therapy" seemed to be what you were referring to.

"fulfill" is the correct word to use in this context.

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I notice how put effort into being resourceful when constructing complex sentences or using new vocabulary. Very good!

One main flaw I notice is your comma placement at conjunctions. To remedy this make note of where a clause ends and begins AND how many clauses you are joining together with conjunctions. Note that too many independent clauses could make a sentence difficult to understand so be mindful of when to use a period or a conjunction.

Good luck and keep writing! :)

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loominglumes

Dec. 19, 2024

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Thanks a lot. You made me think that perhaps it's time for me to pick up a grammar and punctuation book and learn how to be more palatable.

The Mind

The mental health discussion has been dobenefitting society a lot of goods a whole.

It's in its infancy so reckonearly stages, so it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often, which is the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand that I am not my thoughts.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous, and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called, also known as my mind.

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read.

Whatever was happening in mMy mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.

I already knew about things, such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all (CBT). While all these techniques taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for thingsadvice.

I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal.

It/them (?)'m unsure whether to refer to ChatGPT as it or them.

ChatGPT/It/They gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

I could also use a hybrid approach.

This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and i. If society is not helping us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

What is the thing that society is failing to teach us?

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loominglumes

Dec. 19, 2024

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Anything that doesn't come natural to you and it does for a lot of people. Thanks for the correction, great phrasing, indeed

The Mind

The discussion around mental health discussion has been doing society a lot of good.

It'sBut, it's still in its infancy, so reckon it's not yet ideal to have high expectations about thefor it's dialogue yet.

Usually: Expectations ( for / of ) ...

However, there's a verymore important topic that I think should be talked about more often, the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for mexperience to understand that I am not my thoughts.

Happenstance is kind of a weird word in English, but it doesn't really fit here.

Even when I finallyonce I had learnedt that, the pain was still tremendous and it's still has taking me a lot of digg( thinking / soul-searching ) to learn how to tame this beast called the mind.

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read well.

Whatever was happening in my mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.

I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.

I finally "caved in" and startedwas asking ChatGPT for things.

I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal.

I ascribecredit my progress to the decision I tookmade of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

1. Ascribe is maybe too formal sounding?

2. 'take' implies that you had a set of options to choose from. But since you just made it up in your head, you 'made' the decision.

It gave a lots of different options and I could choose the onesose that worked best for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

a lot of -> lots of
the ones -> those
for me the best -> best for me

I could use a hybrid approach.

This might be obvious to a lot of peopleyou, but it was not for me and i. If society is not helping us that need to learn certain thingslearn consciously, I think it's failing us.

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loominglumes

Dec. 19, 2024

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I am trying to sound weird and too formal, for humor. So, I gather this is something Anglophones don't find humorous?

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Dec. 20, 2024

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Oh right I see! In that case, what you wrote should be fine then :)

I think because of the nature of Langcorrect, sometimes it's difficult to know what is old-fashioned word use on purpose and mistakenly!

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loominglumes

Dec. 20, 2024

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Ah, I see. You might be right, I guess someone whose level is C2, perhaps should be taking their writing to a professional editor lol

It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

"reckon -> I reckon": You need a actor for reckon here

Not related to the correction as such, but this kind of contradicts the first sentence but you don't really acknowledge that.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstaexperiences for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

I agree with the other poster, experiences is better than happenstances.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things.

caved in is a common enough piece of language to not need the scare quotes

I ascribecredit my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

ascribe is a pretty uncommon word and it's better to use a more common option here. I picked credit here which is more casual, another option is attribute which is a little more formal but still more common than ascribe.

It/them (?)

Them is plural and also used in a different part of speech. If you wanted to use a plural here you'd use they, but also chatgpt is singular, not plural.

This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping those of us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

This might <...> needs a verb, so if you're going to use it with an adjective you need to use be here.

"Not helping us that" -> "not helping those of us that". You might hear people say the first one in casual speech, I think if you're going to have the "that ..." clause on the end you need to use "those of us" and not simply "us".

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loominglumes

Dec. 19, 2024

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Awesome, thanks.

The Mind

The mental health discussion has been doing society a lot of good.

It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often, the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

I would say "experiences" instead of "happenstances" here. They don't seem like happenstances/coincidences to me but things that simply occurred in your life.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called mind.

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read.

Whatever was happening in my mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.

I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things.

I explained my situation and the advice it gave me was phenomenal.

I definitely ascribe my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

It/them (?)

gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

I could use a hybrid approach.

This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us thatwho need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

There was no verb in the clause before the comma.

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Awesome! You definitely have a very good grasp on English. Very few corrections and pretty complicated sentences. Congrats.

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loominglumes

Dec. 19, 2024

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Thanks a lot! I've been trying to play with different types of sentences to make the text less boring lately

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It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

"reckon -> I reckon": You need a actor for reckon here Not related to the correction as such, but this kind of contradicts the first sentence but you don't really acknowledge that.

It'sBut, it's still in its infancy, so reckon it's not yet ideal to have high expectations about thefor it's dialogue yet.

Usually: Expectations ( for / of ) ...

It's in its infancy so reckonearly stages, so it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

It's in its infancy so reckonearly stages, so it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

"It's in its infancy" is technically correct, as the meaning is easily inferred. However, it sounds more natural to use "early stages" as it fits the connotation of developing ideas more than opposed to child development.

It's in its infancy so I reckon it's not ideal to have high expectations about the dialogue yet.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often, the mind.


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However, there's a verymore important topic that I think should be talked about more often, the mind.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often, which is the mind.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often,: the mind.

When you phrase sentences like this, as in use a clause to introduce a subject, you should use a colon. This is just one way to make this sentence better.

However, there's a very important topic I think should be talked about more often,: the mind.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts.


It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

I would say "experiences" instead of "happenstances" here. They don't seem like happenstances/coincidences to me but things that simply occurred in your life.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstaexperiences for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

I agree with the other poster, experiences is better than happenstances.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for mexperience to understand that I am not my thoughts.

Happenstance is kind of a weird word in English, but it doesn't really fit here.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand that I am not my thoughts.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand that I am not my thoughts.

The subject "me" does not need to be included twice. Also a conjunction for a relative clause is needed because the sentence "I am not my thoughts" depends on the previous clause.

It took me a lot of pain and happenstances for me to understand I am not my thoughts.

Had to google what happenstances means lol it does sound a bit out of place here but I'm not sure what it would be replaced with

gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.


gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

It gave a lots of different options and I could choose the onesose that worked best for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

a lot of -> lots of the ones -> those for me the best -> best for me

ChatGPT/It/They gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best, no need for a one or the other approach.

gave a lot of different options, and I could choose the ones that worked for me the best,; no need for a one -or -the -other approach.

"and" is used as a conjunction in this sentence, therefore a comma is needed before it. "no need for a one-or-the-other" is closely related to the previous sentence and serves as an additional clause even though it is also independent. A semi colon can be used here. when you write "one or the other", all four of those words together are used like an adjective so it is better to hyphenate them as one-or-the-other.

gave a lot of different options and I could choose the ones that worked the best for me, there best,ing no need for a one or the otherstrict approach.

I could use a hybrid approach.


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This might obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.


This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us thatwho need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

There was no verb in the clause before the comma.

This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping those of us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

This might <...> needs a verb, so if you're going to use it with an adjective you need to use be here. "Not helping us that" -> "not helping those of us that". You might hear people say the first one in casual speech, I think if you're going to have the "that ..." clause on the end you need to use "those of us" and not simply "us".

This might be obvious to a lot of peopleyou, but it was not for me and i. If society is not helping us that need to learn certain thingslearn consciously, I think it's failing us.

This might be obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and i. If society is not helping us that need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

What is the thing that society is failing to teach us?

This might obvious to a lot of people, but it(therapy?) was not for me and. Also, if society is not helping us that(fulfill) our need to learn certain things consciously, then I think it's failing us.

The subject was missing and made the sentence difficult to understand. Judging from the context of this post "therapy" seemed to be what you were referring to. "fulfill" is the correct word to use in this context.

This might be/sound obvious to a lot of people, but it was not for me and if society is not helping us that we need to learn certain things consciously, I think it's failing us.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called mind.


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Even when I finallyonce I had learnedt that, the pain was still tremendous and it's still has taking me a lot of digg( thinking / soul-searching ) to learn how to tame this beast called the mind.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous, and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called, also known as my mind.

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendous, and it's still taking me a lot of digging to learn how to tame this beast called mind.

"and" is used as a conjunction in this sentence. Therefore, a comma is needed

Even when I finally learned that, the pain was still tremendously high and it's still taking me a lot of diggingreflection to learn how to tame this beast called the mind.

I think you can say tremendous but my brain clocks this as incomplete lmao

One of my biggest torments was that I couldn't read.


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One of my biggest tormentstruggles was that I couldn't read.

the sentence is grammatically correct, but "torments" is not usually used this way. "struggles", "challenges", "problems" etc. would all suffice.

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Whatever was happening in my mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.


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Whatever was happening in mMy mind kept distracting me from reading, which in turn conditioned me to have this fear of getting distracted while reading.

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I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things.


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I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for things.

caved in is a common enough piece of language to not need the scare quotes

I finally "caved in" and startedwas asking ChatGPT for things.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for thingsadvice.

I finally "caved in" and started asking ChatGPT for thingsadvice.

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I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.


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I already knew about things, such as mindfulness, meditation and Cognitive Behavioral Therapy, and they all (CBT). While all these techniques taught me a lot, but there were still things that were making my life impossible.

I already knew about things such as mindfulness, meditation, and Ccognitive Bbehavioral Ttherapy, and t. They all taught me a lot, but there were still things that were makingmade my life impossible.

a comma after "meditation" is needed. "and they all taught me a lot, but there were still things-" having "and" and "but" in the same sentence creates a run-on sentence. The place where "and" or "but" starts could be a new sentence instead.

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I ascribe my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.


I definitely ascribe my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

I ascribecredit my progress to the decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

ascribe is a pretty uncommon word and it's better to use a more common option here. I picked credit here which is more casual, another option is attribute which is a little more formal but still more common than ascribe.

I ascribecredit my progress to the decision I tookmade of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

1. Ascribe is maybe too formal sounding? 2. 'take' implies that you had a set of options to choose from. But since you just made it up in your head, you 'made' the decision.

I ascttribute my progress to themy decision I took of asking ChatGPT for help, definitely.

"ascribe" is technically correct, but most English speakers would use the word "attribute" "the decision I took of" can simplified to "my decision" or "the decision I made".

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It/them (?)

Them is plural and also used in a different part of speech. If you wanted to use a plural here you'd use they, but also chatgpt is singular, not plural.

It/them (?)'m unsure whether to refer to ChatGPT as it or them.

It/them (?)

ChatGPT is a "thing" so it is correct to use "It"

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