June 8, 2021
The Day in The Beach
Yesterday, the temperature was around 90 degrees. A friend of mine, my roommate and I went Brighton Beach in Brooklyn. It was the first time to go to there for me, but I have already been to Cony Island a long time ago with other two friends. So I thought that both scenery were a quite similar.
There were so many people sitting or lied on their stomachs to get suntan on their backs. I was wondering how they could lie down under strong sun for an hour or two hours. Even such a nice weather, I didn't see many peoples swimming in the sea. Most people on the beach were just enjoying a hot summer day with their friends or families on the beach. Maybe swimming in the sea wasn't their purpose to come to there.
I sew some business people who were selling sliced mongo, in a pouch of sangria and ice cream on the beach. Also, I looked there were light aircrafts, which had big advertisements. One was " We support governor Cuomo" and the other was Insurance company named Geico. I haven't seen those advertisements in the beach before, but according to friend of mine, it was appeared so often in the beach in the summer time. I understood it because there were around 3,000 people in the beach( my guess), people look at and recognized it quickly.
Also, many women were wearing daring bikinis without bashful. That is beach magic. Everybody love summer in the beach.
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Yesterday, the temperature was around 90 degrees.
A friend of mine, my roommate, and I went to Brighton Beach in Brooklyn.
It was the first time to go to there for mhat I went there, but I have'd already been to Cony Island a long time ago with other two friends.
So I thought that bothe scenery were ain both places was quite similar.
There were so many people sitting or liedaying on their stomachs to get suntan on their backs.
I was wondering how they could lie down under such a strong sun for an hour or two hours.
Even in such a nice weather, I didn't see many peoples swimming in the sea.
Most people on the beach were just enjoying a hot summer day with their friends or families on the beach.
Maybe swimming in the sea wasn't their purpose to come toin going there.
I seaw some business people who were selling sliced moango, in a pouch of sangria and ice cream on the beach.
Also, I lookedsaw that there were light aircrafts, which that had big advertisements.
One was " We support gGovernor Cuomo" and the other was Iabout an insurance company named Geico.
I haven't seen those advertisements inat the beach before, but according to friend of mine, it was appeareds every so often inat the beach in the summer time.
I understood itwhy, because there were around 3,000 people inat the beach( (my guess), people look at and recognized it quickly.
Also, many women were wearing daring bikinis without bashfulshame.
That is beach magic.
Everybody loves summer inat the beach.
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June 10, 2021
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The Day in The Beach
"The" isn't capitalized in titles unless it comes as the first word. |
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Yesterday, the temperature was around 90 degrees. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A friend of mine, my roommate and I went Brighton Beach in Brooklyn. A friend of mine, my roommate, and I went to Brighton Beach in Brooklyn. |
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It was the first time to go to there for me, but I have already been to Cony Island a long time ago with other two friends. It was the first time t |
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So I thought that both scenery were a quite similar. So I thought that |
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There were so many people sitting or lied on their stomachs to get suntan on their backs. There were so many people sitting or l |
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I was wondering how they could lie down under strong sun for an hour or two hours. I was wondering how they could lie down under such a strong sun for an hour or two hours. |
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Even such a nice weather, I didn't see many peoples swimming in the sea. Even in such |
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Most people on the beach were just enjoying a hot summer day with their friends or families on the beach. Most people on the beach were just enjoying a hot summer day with their friends or families |
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Maybe swimming in the sea wasn't their purpose to come to there. Maybe swimming in the sea wasn't their purpose |
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I sew some business people who were selling sliced mongo, in a pouch of sangria and ice cream on the beach. I s |
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Also, I looked there were light aircrafts, which had big advertisements. Also, I |
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One was " We support governor Cuomo" and the other was Insurance company named Geico. One was " We support |
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I haven't seen those advertisements in the beach before, but according to friend of mine, it was appeared so often in the beach in the summer time. I haven't seen those advertisements |
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I understood it because there were around 3,000 people in the beach( my guess), people look at and recognized it quickly. I understood |
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Also, many women were wearing daring bikinis without bashful. Also, many women were wearing daring bikinis without |
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That is beach magic. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Everybody love summer in the beach. Everybody loves summer |
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