Table Tennis

Jack

April 26, 2025

The first time I played table tennis was in middle school. After I started studying in middle school, I found there was a “table tennis table” outside my classroom.

This “table” was made of bricks and cement. Although it was not a real table tennis table, table tennis could be played on it.

It was the first sport I got to know, so I was really fond of it. I tried to play it more whenever I was free. Because there was only one table tennis table for my class, it was common to see a few students competing for the chance to play table tennis.

We were very poor back then because we were all from the countryside. We couldn’t afford a single table tennis racket. So we often played table tennis with our textbooks.

One of the students had a relatively wealthy family. His father worked in the local supply and marketing cooperative, which meant his father had a salary. So the student had a pair of rackets.

We would be very excited if we ever had a chance to use his rackets to play table tennis, although the rackets had no rubber. Obviously, the rackets were much better than a textbook for playing table tennis.

I studied very hard in middle school because middle school studies were very important to me. The grades I achieved in the middle school graduation exam would determine whether I could work for the government. So I dared not play table tennis often.

Well, that’s all for this memory sharing. See you guys soon with the next one.

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Craynier

Table Tennis

The first time I played table tennis was in middle school.

After I started studying in middle school, I found there was a “table tennis table” outside my classroom.

This “table” was made of bricks and cement.

Although it was not a real table tennis table, table tennis could be played on it.

It was the first sport I got to know, so I was really fond of it.

I tried to play it more whenever I was free.

Because there was only one table tennis table for my class, it was common to see a few students competing for the chance to play table tennis.

We were very poor back then because we were all from the countryside.

We couldn’t afford a single table tennis racket.

So we often played table tennis with our textbooks.

One of the students had a relatively wealthy family.

His father worked in the local supply and marketing cooperative, which meant that his father had a good/high/decent salary.

* maybe put "good salary" or "high salary" or "decent salary" if you meant he was rich.

-> connect sentence

S... so the ~~student~~ had a pair of rackets.

* since "so the student had a pair of racket" is not a complete sentence. (only stating reason)

Or

you could do:

"So, the student had a pair of rackets."

We would be very excited if we ever had a chance to use his rackets to play table tennis, although the rackets had no rubber.

Obviously, the rackets were much better than a textbook for playing table tennis.

I studied very hard in middle school because middle school studies were very important to me.

The grades I achieved in the middle school graduation exam would determine whether I could work for the government.

So, I dared not play table tennis often.

Well, that’s all for this memory sharing.

See you guys soon with the next one.

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Best of Luck!

Jack

April 27, 2025

Thank you very much.

kennyfrequency

Table Tennis

The first time I played table tennis was in middle school.

After I started studying in middle school, I found there was a “table tennis table” outside my classroom.

Instead of writing "table tennis table" (since it can be difficult to say out loud,) I would phrase it "I found there was a "table" for table tennis outside my classroom." or you could describe the makeshift table in the same sentence.

This “table” was made of bricks and cement.

Although it was not a ~~real table tennis~~n manufactured table, table tennis could be played on it.

I'd say this is good. Avoid repeating words too often as it can be difficult to pronounce, mentioned above. It makes sense so this is fine to keep this way.

It was the first sport I got to know, so I was really fond of it.

I tried to play it more whenever I was free.

Because there was only one table tennis table for my class, it was common to see a few students competing for the chance to play it~~able tennis~~.

Good structure, just the same about repetition. You have context as to what the students are competing for, so it wouldn't be entirely necessary to include it again.

We were very poor back then because we were all from the countryside.

We couldn’t afford a single table tennis racket.

Sso we often played table tennis with our textbooks.

I suggest combining these two as "We often played table tennis with our textbooks because we couldn't afford rackets."

On the other hand, one of the students had a relatively wealthy family.

Adding a transition phrase or word will prevent awkward sentences. i.e: 'to contrast', 'similarly'

His father worked in the local supply and marketing cooperative, which meant his father had a salary.

Saying 'had a salary' could mean the father just has an income, not that it's a wealthy or great amount. I suggest adding a word to describe it if you want to emphasize or point out that the father makes a lot of money.

So the student had a pair of rackets.

We would be very excited if we ever had a chance to use his rackets to play table tennis, although the rackets had no rubber.

Obviously, the rackets were much better than a textbook for playing table tennis.

I studied very hard in middle school because middle school studies were very important to me.

The grades I achieved in the middle school graduation exam would determine whether or not I could work for the government.

So I dared not play table tennis often.

Well, that’s all for this memory sharing.

See you guys soon with the next one.

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Overall its very good, I see where you are improving at.

Jack

April 27, 2025

Thank you very much. At the time, almost all of us were from farmers' families. We wouldn't have money unless we sold our crops.

That student's father worked in a state - owned company and he got paid monthly. Compared with a farmer's family, his family was much better off financially than ours, whether his father's salary was high or low.

However, I shouldn't have written “relatively wealthy”. Maybe I should say “his family had a little money.”

kennyfrequency

April 27, 2025

I see, yeah that would've made more sense!

So we often played table tennis with our textbooks.

Sso we often played table tennis with our textbooks.

I suggest combining these two as "We often played table tennis with our textbooks because we couldn't afford rackets."