March 17, 2025
Should I studie?
For almost a year I've been wondering if I must finish my career in telecommunications, electronics, and systems. I had a girlfriend, and she got into a military college. We broke up between the months of November and December, but that began a fire in my stomach and a question in my mind. Was I born to be a soldier? I've always liked working out and I'm very capable of surviving and progressing in the military lifestyle. The problem is that I'm 20 years old, and I only must to complete two years more to finish my college. I don't know what to do, especially because I like my career, I like programming and learning new things. However, I haven't found a way to tell this to any of my friends or family, they would just say: "Are you crazy? You must finish college." Anyway, I just wrote this to improve my writing and I'm not looking for support. Thank you for reading.
Llevo casi un año preguntándome si debo terminar mi carrera en telecomunicaciones, electrónica y sistemas. Tenía una novia que entró en una academia militar. Rompimos entre noviembre y diciembre, pero eso me provocó una profunda inquietud y una pregunta en la cabeza: ¿Nací para ser soldado? Siempre me ha gustado hacer ejercicio y soy muy capaz de sobrevivir y progresar en la vida militar. El problema es que tengo 20 años y solo me faltan dos años más para terminar la universidad. No sé qué hacer, sobre todo porque me gusta mi carrera, me gusta programar y aprender cosas nuevas. Sin embargo, no he encontrado la manera de contárselo a mis amigos ni a mi familia; simplemente me dirían: "¿Estás loco? Tienes que terminar la universidad". En fin, solo escribí esto para mejorar mi escritura y no busco apoyo. Gracias por leer.
Should I studiey?
"Studie" is a typo.
For almost a year I'’ve been wondering if I mustwhether I should finish my cadegreer in tTelecommunications, eElectronics, and sSystems.
"Must" sounds a bit too strong and obligatory. "Should" fits better when you're expressing doubt or contemplation. Also, in English, "degree" is a more common term for an academic qualification than "career"
Proper nouns (like the names of fields or areas of study) are capitalized.
I had a girlfriend, and she got into who entered a military college.
I removed the comma after "girlfriend" because it's unnecessary. Instead of "she got into," I used "who entered," which is a more formal and clear way of expressing the same idea.
We broke up between the months of November and December, but that began a fire in myexperience ignited stomachething within me and a question in my mind.
The phrase "between the months of" is redundant
"Began a fire in my stomach" is a metaphor that might be unclear.
I've always liked working out and I'’m veryquite capable of survivadapting to and progressthriving in the military lifestyle.
"Adapting to" sounds more natural than "surviving," and "thriving" carries a more positive connotation than "progressing."
The problem is that, I'’m 20 years old, and I only musthave two complete twomore years more to finish my college.degree
"I only have" is the correct phrasing here. I also replaced "my college" with "my degree," which is the more appropriate term.
I don't know what to do, especially because I like my career, and I like programming and learning new things.
I added "and" to connect the sentences more naturally.
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Nice story-telling! Keep writing!
March 24, 2025
Thak you very much for your feedback. I'd wish to help you but german is not my strong
March 24, 2025
You're welcome. No worries! I would still appreciate your corrections regardless : )
Should I sStudiey?
For almost a year I've been wondering if I mustshould finish my cadegreer in telecommunications, electronics, and systems.
I had a girlfriend, and she got into a military collegeacademy.
We broke up between the months of November and December, but that begantriggered a fire in my stomach and a question in my mind.
Was I born to be a soldier?
I've always liked working out and I'm very capable of surviving and progressing in the(on my own) and living a military lifestyle.
The problem is that I'm 20 years old, and I only must to complethave two years moreleft to finish my college.
However, I haven't found a way to tell this to any of my friends or family,; they would just say:, "Are you crazy?
You musthave to finish college."
Anyway, I just wrote this to improve my writing and I'm not looking for support.
Thank you for reading.
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Good job. Keep in mind, there are subtle differences between must, have to, ought to, should, etc.
March 24, 2025
Great, I'll keep it mind. Thanks!!
Should I studiey?
"Should I keep studying?" might be even better.
For almost a year I've been wondering if I must finish my career in telecommunications, electronics, and systems.
I had a girlfriend, and she got into a military college.
We broke up between the months of November and December, but that beganstarted a fire in my stomach and put a question in my mind.
Was I born to be a soldier?
I've always liked working out and I'm very capable of surviving and progressing in the military lifestyle.
The problem is that I'm 20 years old, and I only must tonly complete two more years more to finish my college.
Very small word order edits, but nicely done.
I don't know what to do, especially because I like my career, I like programming and learning new things.
However, I haven't found a way to tell this to any of my friends or family, they would just say:, "Are you crazy?
You must finish college."
Anyway, I just wrote this to improve my writing and I'm not looking for support.
Thank you for reading.
March 17, 2025
I corrected "began a fire" to "started a fire" but actually, I think the best would be "put a fire in my stomach and a question in my mind."
March 24, 2025
Nice, I like that sentence. Thank you for your time and your ideas
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