May 21, 2021
Sentences 115: Dwindle Away, Mockery, Jaded
We secured funding for the full first year, but with marketing expenses skyrocketing, the funding dwindled away within a couple of weeks.
The new law that forbids all outdoor meetups makes a complete mockery of all promised improvements that should happen when infection rates keep falling.
I repeated the analysis about organizational flaws over and over to the management but now I'm feeling jaded and won't repeat it again.
We secured funding for the full first year, but with marketing expenses skyrocketing, the funding dwindled away within a couple of weeks.
The new law that forbids all outdoor meetups makes a complete mockery of all promised improvements, that should happen, when infection rates keep falling.
It's ok, but a very long sentence - in English the rules for using the comma aren't as strict as they are in German (I'm learning German!) so they can be used just to mark a natural pause in the sentence - think of when you'd naturally take a breath, if you were speaking the sentence aloud. You could leave out the first comma I've put in, and it would work just as well
I repeated the analysis about organizational flaws over and over to the management, but now I'm feeling jaded and won't repeat it again.
Same thing about using the comma, this is the most natural place to put it.
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Very good, the only corrections here were really just style, I know sometimes German speakers can find the English comma rules confusing
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Sentences 115: Dwindle Away, Mockery, Jaded |
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We secured funding for the full first year, but with marketing expenses skyrocketing, the funding dwindled away within a couple of weeks. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The new law that forbids all outdoor meetups makes a complete mockery of all promised improvements that should happen when infection rates keep falling. The new law that forbids all outdoor meetups makes a complete mockery of all promised improvements, that should happen, when infection rates keep falling. It's ok, but a very long sentence - in English the rules for using the comma aren't as strict as they are in German (I'm learning German!) so they can be used just to mark a natural pause in the sentence - think of when you'd naturally take a breath, if you were speaking the sentence aloud. You could leave out the first comma I've put in, and it would work just as well |
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I repeated the analysis about organizational flaws over and over to the management but now I'm feeling jaded and won't repeat it again. I repeated the analysis about organizational flaws over and over to the management, but now I'm feeling jaded and won't repeat it again. Same thing about using the comma, this is the most natural place to put it. |
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