April 21, 2021
Scary Story
It was a cold October night some teenagers were joking around the village. After some time it was born to them so they decided to go to another village through the dark path. They were afraid to go but after some time they decided to go. They only have flashed on phone and they were really scared. It was really dark. After 15 minutes of walking they get to the mystery woods that they didn’t know. When they walk into the forest they were quickly lost and didn’t know where to go. They walked in the circle the whole time. From nowhere they heard a noise like someone is walking and cracking woods, their blood ran cold and they freeze in the place. Does someone say ˝Hey who is there?˝ but nothing happened so they go next. In one moment they heard a noise like someone is walking to them and in one moment they heard a deep voice that says ˝RUNNN!!!˝ their heart almost jumps out and they start running like crazy. After 10 minutes running like crazy, they finally get to the village and when they think it’s over a mysterious black man stand in front of them, they freeze in place, their hearts stop working, they were watching eys in eys with that mysterious man...
Scary Story
It was a cold October night and some teenagers were joking around in the village.
After some time it was born to them so they decided to go to another village through thevia a dark path.
Do you mean "after some time, they got bored"?
They were afraid to go but after some time they decidedconvinced themselves to go.
They only havd the flashed on their phones and they were really scared.
It was really dark.
After 15 minutes of walking they geot to/reached the mystery woods that they didn’t know.
When they walked into the forest they were quickly lost and didn’t know where to go.
They walked in thea circle the whole time.
From nowhere they heard a noise like someone iwas walking and cracbreaking woods, tbranches. Their blood ran cold and they freeoze in the place.
Does someoneOne of them sayid ˝Hey, who i's there?˝ bBut nothing happened so they go nextcarried on.
In oneThe next moment they heard a noise like someone iwas walking towards them and in one momthent they heard a deep voice that says ˝RUNNN!!!˝ tTheir hearts almost jumpsed out of their chests and they start running like crazy.
After 10 minutes running like crazy, they finally geot to the village and just when they think it’aught it was over, a mysterious black man was standing in front of them, t. They freeoze in place, and their hearts stopped working, as they were watching eys inlocked eyes with thate mysterious man... / stood face to face with the man
"face to face" would be used if the two parties are quite close together. "Locked eyes with" can be used for longer distances.
April 22, 2021
After some time it was born to them so they decided to go to another village through thevia a dark path.
Yes, I meant ''they got bored''. Spelling mistake.
A Scary Story
It was a cold October night, and some teenagers were joking around in the village.
After some time it was born to them, they got bored, so they decided to go to another village through thea dark path.
They were afraid to go, but after some time theeventually decided to gocontinue.
They only have flashed on phoned a phone flashlight and they were really scared.
It was really dark.
After 15 minutes of walking, they geot to thea mysteryious woods that they didn’t know.
When they walk into the forest, they were quickly became lost and didn’t know where to go.
They walked in the circle the whole times.
From nowhereout in the dark, they heard a noise, like that of someone is walking and cracking through the woods, their blood ran cold and they freeoze in the place.
Does sSomeone sayid ˝Hey, who i's there?˝, but nothing happened, so they go nextcontinued.
In oneThe next moment, they heard a noise like someone is walkcoming up to them, and in one momentsuddenly they heard a deep voice that saysid ˝RUNNN!!!˝ t. Their heart almost jumps outs climbed up into their throats and they started running like crazy.
After 10 minutes of running like crazy, they finally geot to the village and. However, just when they think it’ought it was over, a mysterious black man stanood in front of them, and they freeoze in place, t. Their hearts seemed to stop working, as they were watching eys in eysstood eye to eye with thate mysterious man...
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April 21, 2021
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It was a cold October night some teenagers were joking around the village. It was a cold October night, and some teenagers were joking around in the village. It was a cold October night and some teenagers were joking around in the village. |
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After some time it was born to them so they decided to go to another village through the dark path. After some time After some time it was born to them so they decided to go to another village Do you mean "after some time, they got bored"? |
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They were afraid to go but after some time they decided to go. They were afraid to go, but They were afraid to go but after some time they |
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They only have flashed on phone and they were really scared. They only ha They only ha |
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After 15 minutes of walking they get to the mystery woods that they didn’t know. After 15 minutes of walking, they g After 15 minutes of walking they g |
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When they walk into the forest they were quickly lost and didn’t know where to go. When they walk into the forest, they When they walked into the forest they were quickly lost and didn’t know where to go. |
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From nowhere they heard a noise like someone is walking and cracking woods, their blood ran cold and they freeze in the place. From From nowhere they heard a noise like someone |
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Does someone say ˝Hey who is there?˝ but nothing happened so they go next.
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In one moment they heard a noise like someone is walking to them and in one moment they heard a deep voice that says ˝RUNNN!!!˝ their heart almost jumps out and they start running like crazy.
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After 10 minutes running like crazy, they finally get to the village and when they think it’s over a mysterious black man stand in front of them, they freeze in place, their hearts stop working, they were watching eys in eys with that mysterious man... After 10 minutes of running After 10 minutes running like crazy, they finally g "face to face" would be used if the two parties are quite close together. "Locked eyes with" can be used for longer distances. |
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