May 30, 2021
Retirement reminder
Last week I receive a document from my part time job.
Is about I will be retire next July.
I can request to extend the period.
I did signed the form hopefully I can extend the service period.
Even this is a part time job but the company allow us work 6 days in a week.
The month salary end up can higher than many people’s daily job.
Some colleagues even quit the daily job to work full time in this part time job.
But my heart telling me go opposite way.
I want to work less.
Because if next year I can’t extend my life will suddenly become so empty.
That is a more serious problem to consider.
Retirement reminder
Last week I received a document from my part time job.
You would say received instead of receive because you are taking about what already happened.
It is about I will bme retireing next July.
Although I can request to extend the period.time I spend working
It would be better to explain that the period is for serving in this sentence instead of the next sentence. Otherwise it can get a bit confusing.
I did signed the form to hopefully I can extend the service period.
The way you wrote it didn't explain why you signed the form.
Even though this is a part time job but, the company allows us to work 6 days in a week.
The monthly salary can end up can higher than many people’s daily job.
Some colleagues even quit their daily jobs to work full time in this part time job.
But my heart is telling me goto go in the opposite way.
I want to work less.
It would be better to join this with the next sentence.
Because if next year I can’t extend my life will suddenly become so empty.I want to work less, but my life will be very empty if I can’t work next year
You are saying that you want to work less because extending the time you work would stop your life becoming empty, but this doesn't make much sense. If you are extending work because you don't want to have an empty life, then that means you want more work but here you have said you want less. So, maybe you mean you want less work but you are going to continue working to not have an empty life.
That is a more serious problem to consider.
Feedback
Your spelling is great, although the way you connect sentences together is a bit confusing. Either you didn't use them properly, or you just didn't use them to explain the situation. I think if you used them well it would make it a lot more easier to understand what is affecting what and why things happen.
Your grammar also has a few mistakes.
I was able to get what you were talking about although I had to make a few assumptions. I hope the best for your English in the future!
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Retirement reminder This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Last week I receive a document from my part time job. Last week I received a document from my part time job. You would say received instead of receive because you are taking about what already happened. |
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Is about I will be retire next July. It is about |
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I can request to extend the period. Although I can request to extend the It would be better to explain that the period is for serving in this sentence instead of the next sentence. Otherwise it can get a bit confusing. |
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I did signed the form hopefully I can extend the service period. I The way you wrote it didn't explain why you signed the form. |
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Even this is a part time job but the company allow us work 6 days in a week. Even though this is a part time job |
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The month salary end up can higher than many people’s daily job. The monthly salary can end up |
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Some colleagues even quit the daily job to work full time in this part time job. Some colleagues even quit their daily jobs to work full time in this part time job. |
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But my heart telling me go opposite way. But my heart is telling me |
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I want to work less. I want to work less. It would be better to join this with the next sentence. |
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Because if next year I can’t extend my life will suddenly become so empty.
You are saying that you want to work less because extending the time you work would stop your life becoming empty, but this doesn't make much sense. If you are extending work because you don't want to have an empty life, then that means you want more work but here you have said you want less. So, maybe you mean you want less work but you are going to continue working to not have an empty life. |
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That is a more serious problem to consider. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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