Sept. 21, 2025
Rabdom story 3 : Queen of the Swamps
- Ragnar Stormbreaker -
Our group went throw the Swamps. The wood road was long and wide. Around us was water, mud and trees. Everything was dark and misterious. It was almoust dark when we heard wierd noises. We stoped... Gebrin want to say something but I shuted him down and listen. Then something behind us snapped. We truned around and saw humen whit mask. Then he threw a thing that explode. It was too fast. In one moment there was onli one persone but then there were lots of strange people with guns and explosives. Than started big fight.
Rabndom story 3 : Queen of the Swamps
I think you were trying to write random instead of rabdom.
- Ragnar Stormbreaker -
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Our group went throwugh the Swamps.
Throw is not the correct word here.
The wood road was long and wide.
I think when you refer to "the wood road" you are referring to a bridge
Everything was dark and miysterious.
spelling error.
It was almoust dark when we heard wieird noises.
We stopped... Gebrin wanted to say something but I shuted him down and listened.
all verbs need to be in past tense. Shut is the past tense instead of shutted.
We trurned around and saw humean whith a mask.
Then he threw a something that exploded.
Something flows better than a thing. explode needs to be in past tense.
In oOne moment there was onliy one persone, but then there were lots of strange people with guns and explosives.
Than starteden, a big fight started.
rearrange words.
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Overall good, mostly spelling errors and word arrangement.
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Rabdom story 3 : Queen of the Swamps Ra I think you were trying to write random instead of rabdom. |
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- Ragnar Stormbreaker - Our group went throw the Swamps. - Ragnar Stormbreaker - Throw is not the correct word here. |
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The wood road was long and wide. The wood road was long and wide. I think when you refer to "the wood road" you are referring to a bridge |
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Around us was water, mud and trees. |
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Everything was dark and misterious. Everything was dark and m spelling error. |
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It was almoust dark when we heard wierd noises. It was almo |
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We stoped... Gebrin want to say something but I shuted him down and listen. We stopped... Gebrin wanted to say something but I shut all verbs need to be in past tense. Shut is the past tense instead of shutted. |
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Then something behind us snapped. |
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We truned around and saw humen whit mask. We t |
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Then he threw a thing that explode. Then he threw Something flows better than a thing. explode needs to be in past tense. |
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It was too fast. |
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In one moment there was onli one persone but then there were lots of strange people with guns and explosives.
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Than started big fight. Th rearrange words. |
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