May 31, 2021
party of Children's Day
When I write down the title, I am wondering whether activity would be more suitable.
Tomorrow is Children's Day, so our small school held a party today. The event which I in charge of was"blow the ball through the bowl". There were five china bowl full of water, a ping-pong ball is on one bowl. The player need to blow it from one bowl to another. If someone wants to win a reward, he/she must blow the ball through 2 bowl, then the more the better.
At the beginning, I had a try, it was not hard. But when the students tried at their first time, most of them failed. I was so confused. Then several boys did the job easily. I found out that the key of the game was patience. It did require some techque, but the most imlortant part was patience. You can observe the guy who succeed, or you can tried little by little, they all need patience.
party ofChildren's Day celebration / Children's Day party
You can write "party' too, but "celebration" can be more suitable when talking about holidays. "Children's Day party" is also more natural to write than "party of Children's Day".
When I write down the title, I am wondering whether activity would be more suitable.
Not sure what this means?
Tomorrow is Children's Day, so our small school held a party today.
The event which Igame that I was in charge of was called "blow the ball through the bowls".
Better to write "game" than "event" here!
TIn the game, there weare five china bowls full of water, with a ping- pong ball is on onefloating on top of the first bowl.
No need for "-" in "ping pong". Also, I corrected based on how I imagined the game to work, not sure if correct. It is good to be more specific about how the game is set up!
The player needs to blow ithe ball from one bowl to another.
If someone wants to win a reward, he/ or she must blow the ball through 2 bowl, then the moretwo or more bowls. The more bowls, the better.
At the beginning, I had a try, and it was not hard.
ButHowever, when other students tried at their first time, most of them failed their first time.
I was so confused.
Then several boys did the jobwere able to succeed easily.
Your sentence is correct, but maybe this might be more natural. "Succeed" works better when talking about a game / challenge.
I found out that the key of the game was patience.
It did require some technique, but the most imlportant part was patience.
You can either observe the guyplayers who succeed, or you can tried little by little, they ally again and again. You just need patience.
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Happy Children's Day! This game sounds interesting, 简单而好玩. I wonder what the rewards were!
June 1, 2021
Thank you very much for the detailed explainations.
Your understanding of the game is correct, it is funny, maybe you can have a try to. hah~
The reward is biscuits.
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party of Children's Day
You can write "party' too, but "celebration" can be more suitable when talking about holidays. "Children's Day party" is also more natural to write than "party of Children's Day". |
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When I write down the title, I am wondering whether activity would be more suitable. When I write down the title, I am wondering whether activity would be more suitable. Not sure what this means? |
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Tomorrow is Children's Day, so our small school held a party today. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The event which I in charge of was"blow the ball through the bowl". The Better to write "game" than "event" here! |
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There were five china bowl full of water, a ping-pong ball is on one bowl.
No need for "-" in "ping pong". Also, I corrected based on how I imagined the game to work, not sure if correct. It is good to be more specific about how the game is set up! |
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The player need to blow it from one bowl to another. The player needs to blow |
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If someone wants to win a reward, he/she must blow the ball through 2 bowl, then the more the better. If someone wants to win a reward, he |
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At the beginning, I had a try, it was not hard. At the beginning, I had a try, and it was not hard. |
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But when the students tried at their first time, most of them failed.
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I was so confused. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Then several boys did the job easily. Then several boys Your sentence is correct, but maybe this might be more natural. "Succeed" works better when talking about a game / challenge. |
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I found out that the key of the game was patience. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It did require some techque, but the most imlortant part was patience. It did require some technique, but the most im |
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You can observe the guy who succeed, or you can tried little by little, they all need patience. You can either observe the |
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