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sachisachi

April 17, 2025

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Onigiri - Part 1 (121)

When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

It looked familiar.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same one I've seen in London.

They were selling Japanese food.

My friend and I were missing Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.

I decided to buy it because I was curious about the filling inside.

At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice balls.

When I open it I was shocked.

To be continued...


先月ニューヨークに行った時、通りを歩いていて「わさび」というお店を見ました。

どこかで見たことがあると思いました。

それで、ロンドンに行った時に見たお店だ、と思い出しました。

そこには、日本食が売っていました。

私と友達は、ちょっと和食が恋しくなっていたので、入ることにしました。

そこで、日本で見たことのない面白い「のりおにぎり」というのを見ました。

その中身が気になったので、買うことにしました。

その時、その名前が変だと思いました。

だって、のりは、普通おにぎりの周りに巻いてあるものだから。

開けた時、びっくりしました。

つづく。。。

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Onigiri - Part 1

When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

It looked familiar.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same one I've seen in London.

They were selling Japanese food.

My friend and I were missing Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.

I decided to buy it because I was curious about the filling inside.

At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice balls.

When I opened it, I was shocked.

To be continued...

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sachisachi

April 18, 2025

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Thank you so much for your corrections!

Onigiri - Part 1

When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

You can also say "while walking down the street." Either is OK!

It looked familiar.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same one I'ved seen in London.

They were selling Japanese food.

My friend and I were missing Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.

I decided to buy it because I was curious about the filling inside.

At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice ballsonigiri.

"Rice balls" isn't incorrect, but since you used "onigiri" in your other sentence, I think it sounds better and more consistent to keep that word.

When I opened it, I was shocked.

To be continued...

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Was there hamburger inside? 😂 I look forward to finding out in Part 2!

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sachisachi

April 18, 2025

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Thank you so much for your corrections! I'm going to write Part 2 soon.

Onigiri - Part 1

When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

It looked familiar.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same as the one I've seen in London.

They were selling Japanese food.

My friend and I were missing [eating] Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I prefer "missing eating" because it better conveys that you really wanted to eat Japanese food due to not having eaten it in a long while.

I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.

I decided to buy it because I was curious about the filling inside.

At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice balls.

When I opened it I was shocked.

To be continued...

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Great job! I'm hoping that the surprise was a good one and not a bad one!

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sachisachi

April 17, 2025

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Thank you so much for your corrections! The onigiri was very good, but I was surprised the color of the wakame.

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Onigiri - Part 1

When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

It looked familiar.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same as one I've seen in London.

Since you're comparing this shop in New York with another shop in London, you need to include "as".

They were selling Japanese food.

My friend and I were missing Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.

At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice balls.

When I opened it I was shocked.

"Open" needs to be in the past tense (opened) to match the tense of the rest of the story.

To be continued...

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Well done! I want to know what was inside!

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sachisachi

April 17, 2025

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Thank you so much for your corrections! The onigiri was one mixed with shredded wakame, but the color was too light green, that's why I was surprised. It didn't look appetizing, but it was actually good.

I decided to buy it because I was curious about the filling inside.


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At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice balls.


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At the time, I thought the name sounded weird because nori is something wrapped around rice ballsonigiri.

"Rice balls" isn't incorrect, but since you used "onigiri" in your other sentence, I think it sounds better and more consistent to keep that word.

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Onigiri - Part 1


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When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.


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When I went to New York City last month, I saw a shop called "Wasabi" while walking on the street.

You can also say "while walking down the street." Either is OK!

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It looked familiar.


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Then, I remembered the shop was the same one I've seen in London.


Then, I remembered the shop was the same as one I've seen in London.

Since you're comparing this shop in New York with another shop in London, you need to include "as".

Then, I remembered the shop was the same as the one I've seen in London.

Then, I remembered the shop was the same one I'ved seen in London.

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They were selling Japanese food.


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My friend and I were missing Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.


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My friend and I were missing [eating] Japanese food at the time, so we decided to go in.

I prefer "missing eating" because it better conveys that you really wanted to eat Japanese food due to not having eaten it in a long while.

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I saw an interesting onigiri called "Nori Onigiri" that I've never seen in Japan.


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When I open it I was shocked.


When I opened it I was shocked.

"Open" needs to be in the past tense (opened) to match the tense of the rest of the story.

When I opened it I was shocked.

When I opened it, I was shocked.

When I opened it, I was shocked.

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Onigiri - Part 1 (121)


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