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Old Songs, New Feelings

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play" I went to her house the other day.
That title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".
It's quite an old song.
It seems It came up in her recommended when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.
This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.
It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the feeling of moving fast as well.
I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.
The tempo was very fast when sang a guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

Please try listening to it if you like.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2eOR2proWaY


古い歌、新しい感情
先日、友人が「弾きたい曲があるのよ」と言っていたので、友人の家に行きました。
そのタイトルは「さらばシベリア鉄道」で、かなり昔の曲です。
YouTubeを見ていたらお勧め動画に上がっていたらしく、すぐに気に入ったと言っていました。
私も聞いてみたら、独特の感じがするというか、他の曲で同じような曲を聞いたことがないと思いました。
哀愁感がありますが、疾走感もあります。
弾きやすいコードで原曲キーだったので原曲に合わせて練習することが出来ました。
弾き語りをすると、テンポが速く、二人ともノリノリで歌っていました。
良かったら聞いてみてください。
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2eOR2proWaY

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One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

That title ise song is called "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo". (Farewell, Siberian Railroad)

It's quite an old song.

It seemsApparently,

Iit came up in her recommended whenations while she was watching YouTube, and as soon as shefter hearding it, she loved it.

This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the feeling of moving fast as wellhas a sense of sorrow but also a sense of speed.

I was able to practice aloneg with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when we sang awhile playing the guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the songit.

Please try listening to it if you likget a chance.

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Nice writing and nice song. 😀 I am glad you two enjoyed it.

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LeahLeah

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Thank you so much. 😀
Oh, there was an alternate phrase "is called".
I completely forgot about it when I was writing. 🤣

Old Songs, New Feelings

OThe other day one of my friends told me, "Tthere is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

Quotes used in the middle of a sentence like this don't keep their capitalized letter!

"One of my friends told me, 'There is a song I want to play' " | "I went to her house the other day." feels a little disconnected. Putting "the other day" at the beginning sets the context for your conversation and flows into the "X occurred, so I did Y".

That title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

It's quite an old song.

It seems

Iit came up in her recommended videos when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

Saying "it came up in her recommended" is technically a little awkward in writing, BUT if I were messaging or chatting with friends I would probably also say "it came up in my recommended".

This next correction can be a little tricky. The technical rule for using a comma ( , ) before "and" is that if you are connecting to independent clauses, you should put a comma before it.

However the "she" and "heard it" part of your sentence is a clear continuation of your previous thought. So since this section of your sentence isn't really independent, you don't need the ( , ). This is a little overly technical, but you're English writing is pretty good so I think you can handle it 👍

This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.

Sentence is correct, but another way to say it could be "... and I've never heard anything like it".

It feels sorrowfulSorrow resonates through thise song and it feel, but it also gave the feeling of moving fast as well.

"Sorrowful" is used correctly hear, but I don't usually hear/read it used this way often.

"It feels sorrowful, this song" feels a little bit like old English, like if you were narrating a book that took place long ago.

Here, "it feel the feeling" isn't correct. For "feelings", something can "give" you feelings or something can "make" you "feel", but "feel the feeling" sounds a little odd.

I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when saung awith guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

Please try listening to it if you like.

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Great job! These were some complex sentences so good work!

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LeahLeah

today

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Thank you so much.
I'm not good at using commas, "and" and the articles.
They confuse me when making sentences.
I guess I'll get used to it as I keep using it. 😀

Old Songs, New Feelings

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play" when I went to her house the other day.

Thate title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

It came up in her recommendedations when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel, yet it has the feeling of moving fast as well.

I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when sang a guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

I am a little curious about this sentence

Please try listening to it if you like.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2eOR2proWaY

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LeahLeah

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Thank you so much. 😀
The original song's tempo is probably around 145.
We practiced with the original song, so we think we were singing and playing at about 130–140.

We felt the tempo was fast, so we made a few mistake, but we still ended up enjoying it.

Old Songs, New Feelings

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

That title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

It's quite an old song.

It seems that

Iit came up in her recommended when she was watching something on YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the, and it gives off a feeling of moving fast as well.

or "it conveys a feeling of moving fast as well"

I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when sang awhile playing the guitar, andso we really enjoyed singing the song.

Please try listening to it if you like.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2eOR2proWaY

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Well done! It's an interesting song. It makes me imagine horses galloping in the snow.

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LeahLeah

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Thank you for correcting me.
This song has become one of my favorites. 😆

Old Songs, New Feelings

One of my friends told me, "T that there iwas a song Ishe wanted to play". So, I went to her house the other day.

Sometimes, we'll paraphrase quotes using "that", in this manner.

ThatIt was title isd "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

It's quite an old song.

It seems

Iit came up in her recommended whilen she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

This song gave me a unique feeling, and I've never heard another song like it.

You could also say "special" instead of "unique". "Unique" just means new and different, but "special" means unique in a very positive way.

It feels sorrowful, this song, and itI can feel the feeling of moving fast as well.

I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when saung awith guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

"Sing" is an irregular verb that has different forms, similar to do/did/done. I sing, I sang, the song was sung.

Please try listening to it if you'd like.

Original is fine, but this feels a little more natural to me.

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Overall, well written. And a very beautiful song, as well!

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LeahLeah

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Thank you for letting me know the difference between "special" and "unique". 😃
I've used phrases like "Special day" or "Special present".
If I get a chance to use "special", I want to use it.

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One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play" I went to her house the other day.


One of my friends told me, "T that there iwas a song Ishe wanted to play". So, I went to her house the other day.

Sometimes, we'll paraphrase quotes using "that", in this manner.

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play" when I went to her house the other day.

OThe other day one of my friends told me, "Tthere is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

Quotes used in the middle of a sentence like this don't keep their capitalized letter! "One of my friends told me, 'There is a song I want to play' " | "I went to her house the other day." feels a little disconnected. Putting "the other day" at the beginning sets the context for your conversation and flows into the "X occurred, so I did Y".

One of my friends told me, "There is a song I want to play", so I went to her house the other day.

That title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".


ThatIt was title isd "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

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Thate title is "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo".

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That title ise song is called "Saraba Siberia Tetsudo". (Farewell, Siberian Railroad)

It's quite an old song.


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It seemsApparently,

It came up in her recommended when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.


Iit came up in her recommended whilen she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

Iit came up in her recommended when she was watching something on YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

It came up in her recommendedations when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

Iit came up in her recommended videos when she was watching YouTube, and as soon as she heard it, she loved it.

Saying "it came up in her recommended" is technically a little awkward in writing, BUT if I were messaging or chatting with friends I would probably also say "it came up in my recommended". This next correction can be a little tricky. The technical rule for using a comma ( , ) before "and" is that if you are connecting to independent clauses, you should put a comma before it. However the "she" and "heard it" part of your sentence is a clear continuation of your previous thought. So since this section of your sentence isn't really independent, you don't need the ( , ). This is a little overly technical, but you're English writing is pretty good so I think you can handle it 👍

Iit came up in her recommended whenations while she was watching YouTube, and as soon as shefter hearding it, she loved it.

This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.


This song gave me a unique feeling, and I've never heard another song like it.

You could also say "special" instead of "unique". "Unique" just means new and different, but "special" means unique in a very positive way.

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This song gave me a unique feeling and I've never heard another song like it.

Sentence is correct, but another way to say it could be "... and I've never heard anything like it".

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It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the feeling of moving fast as well.


It feels sorrowful, this song, and itI can feel the feeling of moving fast as well.

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the, and it gives off a feeling of moving fast as well.

or "it conveys a feeling of moving fast as well"

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel, yet it has the feeling of moving fast as well.

It feels sorrowfulSorrow resonates through thise song and it feel, but it also gave the feeling of moving fast as well.

"Sorrowful" is used correctly hear, but I don't usually hear/read it used this way often. "It feels sorrowful, this song" feels a little bit like old English, like if you were narrating a book that took place long ago. Here, "it feel the feeling" isn't correct. For "feelings", something can "give" you feelings or something can "make" you "feel", but "feel the feeling" sounds a little odd.

It feels sorrowful this song and it feel the feeling of moving fast as wellhas a sense of sorrow but also a sense of speed.

I was able to practice alone with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.


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I was able to practice aloneg with the original song because the chords were easy and in the original key.

The tempo was very fast when sang a guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.


The tempo was very fast when saung awith guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

"Sing" is an irregular verb that has different forms, similar to do/did/done. I sing, I sang, the song was sung.

The tempo was very fast when sang awhile playing the guitar, andso we really enjoyed singing the song.

The tempo was very fast when sang a guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

I am a little curious about this sentence

The tempo was very fast when saung awith guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the song.

The tempo was very fast when we sang awhile playing the guitar, and we really enjoyed singing the songit.

Please try listening to it if you like.


Please try listening to it if you'd like.

Original is fine, but this feels a little more natural to me.

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Please try listening to it if you likget a chance.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2eOR2proWaY


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