June 2, 2021
Note: LGBTQIAN Medicine
When I first read this topic, the "candy" that transgender people eating was the first thing that popped up into my head. Then I realized it was supposed to refer to LGBT health.
LGBT people definitely face a lot of stress, which means they have worse mental health. And the common illnesses of LGBT people such as obesity and anorexia are all the result of mental illness. So LGBT community need more support, such as medical support, family support, and social support. But the reality is not good. There are almost no doctors in hospitals specifically for the LGBT community. If not supported by families, the situation is becoming worse. The following paragraph broke my heart.
LGBT youth who experienced family rejection were 8.4 times more likely to attempt suicide, 5.9 times more likely to experience elevated levels of depression, and 3.4 times more likely to use illegal drugs than those LGBT youth who were accepted by family members.
LGBTQIAN medicine
How do doctors behave toward us? Why do they behave this way? Which illnesses strike us worse? What can we do to advocate for our health?
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Note: LGBTQIAN Medicine
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Using connectives like 'and' or 'but' makes your journal flow a bit better.
The following paragraph broke my heart.
LGBT youth who experienced family rejection were 8.4 times more likely to attempt suicide, 5.9 times more likely to experience elevated levels of depression, and 3.4 times more likely to use illegal drugs than those LGBT youth who were accepted by family members.
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Most of my corrections here are just grammar or editing your sentences to sound a bit more natural.
It really is heartbreaking how much LGBT people's physical and mental health suffers from discrimination and prejudice. :(
June 2, 2021
Thank you very much for the corrections!
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When I first read this topic, the "candy" that transgender people eating was the first thing that popped up into my head. When I first read about this topic, the "candy" that transgender people eat |
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Then I realized it was supposed to refer to LGBT health.
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LGBT people definitely face a lot of stress, which means they have worse mental health. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And the common illnesses of LGBT people such as obesity and anorexia are all the result of mental illness.
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So LGBT community need more support, such as medical support, family support, and social support. So the LGBT community need more support, |
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But the reality is not good. |
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There are almost no doctors in hospitals specifically for the LGBT community.
This is a bit clearer. Your sentence sounded like within 'hospitals that are specifically for the LGBT community' there are no doctors. |
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If not supported by families, the situation is becoming worse.
Using connectives like 'and' or 'but' makes your journal flow a bit better. |
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The following paragraph broke my heart. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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LGBT youth who experienced family rejection were 8.4 times more likely to attempt suicide, 5.9 times more likely to experience elevated levels of depression, and 3.4 times more likely to use illegal drugs than those LGBT youth who were accepted by family members. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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