April 16, 2025
My Second Elder Brother
My second elder brother is five years older than me. When I was in middle school, he was also in the same school.
My second elder brother was not very good at schooling, but he liked working. He did much housework.
He was stubborn and didn’t follow my mother well, so he often got hit by my mother.
After he graduated from middle school, he sold baby chicks for a few years. That was the only way for people in my village to earn money by riding a bike around different villages and selling chicks.
In 1982, my father retired (he worked in the local government). According to Chinese policy, one of his children could get a job because of his retirement. Therefore, my second elder brother got a job in the local tobacco company.
The tobacco company in China was a good work - unit. It was in charge of the whole industry. Private companies were not allowed to do tobacco business. So the treatment of employees was very good.
Now, he has two houses: one is in Shanghai and the other is in my home county seat. He lives between these houses in different seasons.
He has only a daughter, my niece. She has a daughter, and her husband is a naval officer. She lives with her daughter in Shanghai most of the time.
My second elder brother also retired. He doesn’t have so many things to do now. He just enjoys his life after retirement.
My Second Elderst Brother
My second elderst brother is five years older than me.
When I was in middle school, he was also in themy same school.
My second elder brother was not very good at schooling, but he liked working.
Because we are still on the subject of your second eldest brother and have been talking about him continuously, we can just say "brother", and it is implied that it is still your second oldest one.
He did muchlots of housework.
We rarely use the word "much" in this manner. Usually, in this context, we'd say "lots of" or "a lot of" instead.
He was stubborn and didn’t follow my mother well, so he often got hit by my mother.
After he graduated from middle school, he sold baby chicks for a few years.
That was the only way for people in my village to earn money: by riding a bike around different villages and selling chicks.
Since the half of the sentence after "money" describes exactly what the first part of the sentence is, we can use a colon to separate the two.
In 1982, my father retired (he worked in the local government).
According to Chinese policy, one of his children could get a job because of his retirement.
Therefore, my second elderst brother got a job in the local tobacco company.
The tobacco company in China was a good work - unitjob to have.
I'm not exactly sure what you mean by "work-unit" here.
It was in charge of the whole industry.
Private companies were not allowed to do tobacco business.
So they treatment ofed employees was very goodwell.
Not wrong, but this feels more natural.
Now, he has two houses: one is in Shanghai and the other is in my (home county seat)?.
I'm not sure what you mean here. The word "seat" is confusing me here.
He lives between these houses in different seasons.
He has only aone daughter,: my niece.
"one" works better than "a" or "an" when talking about quantity directly.
She has a daughter, and her husband is a naval officer.
She lives with her daughter in Shanghai most of the time.
My second eolderst brother is also retired.
It's more natural to use "retired" as an adjective rather than a verb, thus using "is" as well. We'd use "retired" as a verb if we wanted to talk about WHEN someone retired, like for instance: "I retired back in 2007".
He doesn’t have so many thingsmuch to do now.
Alternatively, "He doesn't have that many things to do now".
He just enjoys his life after retirement.
When talking about life after one retires, we often simply say "retirement". "Life after retirement" isn't wrong, though, so either is fine.
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Very well written! Nice work!
April 17, 2025
Thank you very much. When I looked up the Chinese word 县城 in English, I got the result of “county town” and “county seat”.
April 18, 2025
I just looked it up, and apparently "county seat" IS actually a valid English term, and is used in the US where I live. For instance, Seattle is the "county seat" of King County, Washington. But for some reason, I've never heard the term used myself.
"County seat" has more of a legal connotation (we often use the term "seat" when talking about people who have positions in political offices and departments), so if we were just talking about a place, I suppose "county town" or maybe just "county" would work better.
Sorry if that was a lot to read! Hope I could be of some assistance, though.
April 18, 2025
Thank you very much for the information. I learned a lot from it.
My Second Elder Brother
My second elder brother is five years older than me.
When I was in middle school, he was also in the same school.
My second elder brother was not very good at schooling, but he liked working.
He did mucha lot of the housework.
He was stubborn and didn’t followlisten to my mother well, so he often got hit by my mother.
After he graduated from middle school, he sold baby chicks for a few years.
That was the only way for people in my village to earn money was by riding a bike around different villages and selling chicks.
In 1982, my father retired (he worked in the local government).
According to Chinese policy, one of his children could get a job because of his retirement.
Therefore, my second elder brother got a job in the local tobacco company.
The tobacco company in China was a good work - unitfield.
It was in charge of the whole industry.
Private companies were not allowed to dosell tobacco business.,
Sso the treatment of employees was very good.
Now, he has two houses: one is in Shanghai and the other is in my home county seat.
He lives between these houses in according to the different seasons.
He has only has a daughter, my niece.
She has a daughter, and her husband is a naval officer.
She lives with her daughter in Shanghai most of the time.
My second elder brother also retired.
He doesn’t have so many things to do now.
He just enjoys his life after retirement.
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Very interesting story 😊
April 17, 2025
Thank you very much.
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