May 20, 2021
My impression of the Game of Throne
When I was finished watching "Game of Throne" 2 years ago, my first comments was that all actors and actresses acted amazingly and I was so impressed.
It was not only a fantasy, but also a war, love, betrayal and a grand scale. So we couldn't imagine the next developments. I understood why there were people who watched "Game of Throne " were hooked on it and became fans. All characters in it had a strong personality and hard to deal with. Especially, it looked many viewers felt strong emotions with an actor who played a dwarf. His play was so natural and captivated viewers. Some actresses really put everything they had their nude performance.
However, the final season, which all viewers expected the ending was completely unsatisfied for us. Some fans said that the last season wasn't described well enough and the story didn't built up as past seasons. That is why many fans made a complain about it. Because the conclusion wasn't happy , it was indescribable pain and sorrow.
Overall, I really enjoyed it and made me excited a lot. I am sure that I do not forget this drama another 20 years or until I will see better one than "Game of Throne".
My impression of the Game of Thrones
The TV show is generally called "Game of Thrones" in English, so this was a very small correction.
When I was finished watching "Game of Thrones" 2 years ago, my first comments wasere that all actors and actresses acted amazingly and I was so impressed.
The "Was" in "When I was finished watching" is not needed for readability, your sentence is already very readable so does not need it. Second "Was" changed to be plural "Were" because your comments were "all actors and actresses"
It was not only a fantasy story, but also about war, love, betrayal andwith a grand scale.
Again, very small changes, your English is very good. Your original was good, this just helped a bit with reading but, was readable before so you do not have to change anything here if you don't want to.
So we couldn't imagine the next developments.
I understood why there were people who watched "Game of Throne " were hooked on it and became fans.
All characters in it had a strong personality and were hard to deal with.
Especially, it looked like many viewers felt strong emotions withtowards an actor who played a dwarf.
Just a small change for grammar.
His playacting was so natural and captivated viewers.
Just changed "Play" to "Acting" as it conveys a more professional tone.
Some actresses really put everything they had into their nude performance.
small filler word to help it flow better
However, the final season, which all viewers expected the ending was completely unsatisfiedying for us.
changed the tense of "Unsatisfied" to "unsatisfying". If you want to keep it as "Unsatisfied" you could say: "We were completely unsatisfied with the ending".
Some fans said that the last season wasn't described well enough and the story didn'twasn't as built up as past seasons.
Changed it to "Wasn't" from "Didn't" because it flows better that way.
That is why many fans made a complaint about it.
Just changed "complain" to the past tense "complaint" because it happens in the past.
Because the conclusion wasn't happy , it was indescribable pain and sorrow.
Overall, I really enjoyed it and made me excited a lot.
I am sure that I do not forget this drama another 20 years or until I will see better one than "Game of Throne".
Feedback
Wow, what great English!
I could only spot small changes that could be made to improve the flow but, your level is very good. Well done.
Your spelling was excellent, and your grammar needed very few corrections.
I hope you keep writing, as this was a joy to read and correct.
Have a lovely day!
May 20, 2021
Thank you so much for your nice corrections and comments about my mistakes. They were easy for me to understand. Your compliment made me cheer up and happy. Since I have started writing journal in Lang correct, I realized how many stupid mistakes I made again and again. Also, my grammar was far from good. I am going to make an effort little by little and tried to improve. I really appreciate all your comments. Have a great day!
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My impression of the Game of Throne My impression of The TV show is generally called "Game of Thrones" in English, so this was a very small correction. |
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When I was finished watching "Game of Throne" 2 years ago, my first comments was that all actors and actresses acted amazingly and I was so impressed. When I The "Was" in "When I was finished watching" is not needed for readability, your sentence is already very readable so does not need it. Second "Was" changed to be plural "Were" because your comments were "all actors and actresses" |
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It was not only a fantasy, but also a war, love, betrayal and a grand scale. It was not only a fantasy story, but also about war, love, betrayal Again, very small changes, your English is very good. Your original was good, this just helped a bit with reading but, was readable before so you do not have to change anything here if you don't want to. |
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So we couldn't imagine the next developments. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I understood why there were people who watched "Game of Throne " were hooked on it and became fans. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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All characters in it had a strong personality and hard to deal with. All characters in it had a strong personality and were hard to deal with. |
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Especially, it looked many viewers felt strong emotions with an actor who played a dwarf. Especially, it looked like many viewers felt strong emotions Just a small change for grammar. |
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His play was so natural and captivated viewers. His Just changed "Play" to "Acting" as it conveys a more professional tone. |
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Some actresses really put everything they had their nude performance. Some actresses really put everything they had into their nude performance. small filler word to help it flow better |
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However, the final season, which all viewers expected the ending was completely unsatisfied for us. However, the final season, which all viewers expected the ending was completely unsatisf changed the tense of "Unsatisfied" to "unsatisfying". If you want to keep it as "Unsatisfied" you could say: "We were completely unsatisfied with the ending". |
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Some fans said that the last season wasn't described well enough and the story didn't built up as past seasons. Some fans said that the last season wasn't described well enough and the story Changed it to "Wasn't" from "Didn't" because it flows better that way. |
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That is why many fans made a complain about it. That is why many fans made a complaint about it. Just changed "complain" to the past tense "complaint" because it happens in the past. |
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Because the conclusion wasn't happy , it was indescribable pain and sorrow. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Overall, I really enjoyed it and made me excited a lot. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I am sure that I do not forget this drama another 20 years or until I will see better one than "Game of Throne". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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