Sept. 12, 2025
My favorite computer game
When I was a child, I got sick. My grandma decided to buy me The Sims to cheer me up. It was the first installment. That's how I discovered something that would become my second home.
I remember how difficult it was to play The Sims 1. There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome. I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc. While I was playing, I completely forgot about pain.
Then the second installment was released. My parents bought me the anthology 18 in 1 at once. Since then it has been my favorite game. Add-ons like "University", "Business", "Nightlife", "Apartments", etc help me to make up a lot of stories. I admire creating towns. I've been working on the town named Profound River for approximately one year. There is a custom system of managing, a custom political system based on clans. I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse. I will just say that there are a lot of well-developed public lots. I wish I could walk around this amazing town in real life.
The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top. I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), the journal for skills, ability to garden, adding spices into dishes (it changes their characteristics). The list goes on and on.
The Sims 4, from my point of view, is overrated. It's as fake as plastic. It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons. As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame. Of course, it has some advantages. The main one is the graphics. Building houses and creating characters are so detailed. It's pleasant to watch. But how boring it is to play...
I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters. I feel comfortable in fictional worlds. The Sims helps me to act out various scenarios. It's the reason why The Sims is still my favorite game.
What game is your favorite? How long have you been playing it?
My parents bought me the anthology (18 in 1) at once.
I admireenjoy creating towns.
"admire" needs a person or group as the target, rather than an activity. If you want to say you look up to city planners (people who plan out towns in reality) you could say "I admire city planners" or "I admire people who create towns"
I've been working on thea town named Profound River for approximately one year.
A is more natural than "the" here as it's your first time mentioning this town.
There isI made a custom system of managingement, a custom political system based on clans.
It's not a natural phenomenon or something the game provided you with, so it's more natural to talk about your role in creating this system.
I'm not even going to (tell you / talk) about this because it's thea topic for another giant esseay.
"tell" requires a target, like "tell _you_ about this". "talk" does not.
The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal topfavourites.
"top" is an adjective, it doesn't work as a noun
I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, the ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, the ability to change the appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), the journal for skills, the ability to garden, addingnd add spices into dishes (it changes their characteristics).
Building houses and creating characters areis so detailed.
"creating characters" is one activity, so is treated as singular grammatically. It's a little confusing because "characters" is plural, but the "is" is applied to the whole activity, not just the target of the activity.
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I've played a bunch of the sims over the year, but I always find myself torn on which to play. I started with the Sims 1, but I found the Sims 2 pretty much replaced the Sims 1 as better in every way for me. But 2, 3, and even 4 each have their strong points for me. I think 2 has the best gameplay still, while both 3 and 4 are a little more dollhouse-ish (I guess generally people would call it sandbox-like but dollhouse is the phrase Will Wright used to describe the building aspect of the Sims 1 when he was designing it). Sims 3 has the create-a-style tool and the big open world which are very nice (though makes the game a little unstable), while Sims 4 has the precise placement and building tools. I think most often I end up playing the Sims 3 when the mood for the Sims hits.
Sept. 13, 2025
How great to meet another Sims lover here :) I enjoyed reading your comment. I've been thinking about playing the third part lately too... Thanks for helping with the text!
I admireenjoy creating towns.
admire doesn't make sense here
I've been working on thea town named Profound River for approximately one year.
There is a custom system of managing, and a custom political system based on clans.
I'm not even going to tell aboutmention this because it's the topic for another giant esseay.
The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal topfavorites.
I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), and the journal for skills, ability to garden, addingnd add spices into dishes (ito changes their characteristics).
very long sentence, consider separating into different thoughts.
Of course, it has some advantaggood qualities.
BuildingThe houses and creating characters are so detailed.
But how boring it is to play...
I have always loved to fantasize, and make up stories and characters.
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great work!
Sept. 13, 2025
Thank you! :)
There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome.
There was no money and sims were always dying; they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome.
I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc.
I could make jam or make a Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or buy a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, or go to a resort, etc.
I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse.
Essay, not esse.
The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top.
The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal favorites.
It's as fake as plastic.
I'm not sure your simile lands - how is plastic fake? And how are any of the other Sims games less fake? You'd need to elaborate what you're describing and probably make a different comparison to help communicate your point.
It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons.
It's just a sandbox in which you have to supply "sand" add-ons.
As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame.
To me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality was not a concern for its developers, which is a shame.
The main one is the graphics.
Combine this with the next sentence.
Building houses and creating characters are so detailed.
The main one is the graphics; building the houses and creating the characters is so detailed.
I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters.
I have always loved to fantasize, making up stories and characters.
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Your English overall is pretty good! I do think that your writing structure needs more thought. You leave a lot of context clues out, meaning the reader has to know what you are talking about in order to understand what you're saying. If I didn't know already what The Sims is, what makes a good video game, what installments mean, etc., I would have been lost. Ordering your information in a better way and adding in some better transitions would strengthen your writing for your audience. Great job!
Sept. 13, 2025
You are right, I should have made the text more informative for those who aren't familiar with the game. Thank you!
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My favorite computer game |
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When I was a child, I got sick. |
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My grandma decided to buy me The Sims to cheer me up. |
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It was the first installment. |
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That's how I discovered something that would become my second home. |
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I remember how difficult it was to play The Sims 1. |
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There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome. There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome. There was no money and sims were always dying; they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome. |
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I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc. I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc. I could make jam or make a Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or buy a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, or go to a resort, etc. |
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While I was playing, I completely forgot about pain. |
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Then the second installment was released. |
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My parents bought me the anthology 18 in 1 at once. My parents bought me the anthology (18 in 1) at once. |
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Since then it has been my favorite game. |
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Add-ons like "University", "Business", "Nightlife", "Apartments", etc help me to make up a lot of stories. |
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I admire creating towns. I admire doesn't make sense here I "admire" needs a person or group as the target, rather than an activity. If you want to say you look up to city planners (people who plan out towns in reality) you could say "I admire city planners" or "I admire people who create towns" |
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I've been working on the town named Profound River for approximately one year. I've been working on I've been working on A is more natural than "the" here as it's your first time mentioning this town. |
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There is a custom system of managing, a custom political system based on clans. There is a custom system of managing
It's not a natural phenomenon or something the game provided you with, so it's more natural to talk about your role in creating this system. |
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I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse. I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse. Essay, not esse. I'm not even going to I'm not even going to (tell you / talk) about this because it's "tell" requires a target, like "tell _you_ about this". "talk" does not. |
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I will just say that there are a lot of well-developed public lots. |
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I wish I could walk around this amazing town in real life. |
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The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal favorites. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal "top" is an adjective, it doesn't work as a noun |
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I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), the journal for skills, ability to garden, adding spices into dishes (it changes their characteristics). I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), and the journal for skills, ability to garden, a very long sentence, consider separating into different thoughts. I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, the ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around |
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The list goes on and on. |
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The Sims 4, from my point of view, is overrated. |
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It's as fake as plastic. It's as fake as plastic. I'm not sure your simile lands - how is plastic fake? And how are any of the other Sims games less fake? You'd need to elaborate what you're describing and probably make a different comparison to help communicate your point. |
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It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons. It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons. It's just a sandbox in which you have to supply "sand" add-ons. |
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As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame. As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame. To me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality was not a concern for its developers, which is a shame. |
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Of course, it has some advantages. Of course, it has some |
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The main one is the graphics. The main one is the graphics. Combine this with the next sentence. |
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Building houses and creating characters are so detailed. Building houses and creating characters are so detailed. The main one is the graphics; building the houses and creating the characters is so detailed.
Building houses and creating characters "creating characters" is one activity, so is treated as singular grammatically. It's a little confusing because "characters" is plural, but the "is" is applied to the whole activity, not just the target of the activity. |
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It's pleasant to watch. |
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But how boring it is to play... But |
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I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters. I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters. I have always loved to fantasize, making up stories and characters. I have always loved to fantasize, and make up stories and characters. |
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I feel comfortable in fictional worlds. |
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The Sims helps me to act out various scenarios. |
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It's the reason why The Sims is still my favorite game. |
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What game is your favorite? |
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How long have you been playing it? |
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