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My academic journey

I started my academic journey when I was a little child, at four years old, when my mom brought me to the preschool where she worked and I found it interesting to learn new things and interact with children with my same age. Then I joined priva elementary school where I joined reader club and started my reading journey, then my mom faced financial difficulties and I was trafer to public high school when I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bachelor degree in Social Communication and Journalism. During that time I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cine festivals in Colombia, this was amazing! Then I went to Mexico for an exchange in the most important public universities in Latin America, UNAM. This was my first international travel and then I got more opportunities thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States. Just a month ago I graduated from my master of arts in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida. I feel happy and ready to the new academic adventures.

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My aAcademic jJourney

Titles are usually written in title case, which has special capitalization rules.

I started my academic journey when I was a little child, at four years old, when my mom brought me to the preschool where she worked and I found it interesting to learn new things and interact with children with my same age.

Then I joined a private elementary school where I joined a readering club and started my reading journey, t. Then my mom faced financial difficulties and I was transferred to a public high school, whenre I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bbachelor´s degree in Ssocial Ccommunication and Jjournalism.

Because there are many complete thoughts here, I think splitting it into separate sentences helps readability.

I think a more concise way to write the second sentence would be:

When my mom faced financial difficulties, I transferred to a public high school, where I got good grades and won a scholarship to earn a bachelor´s degree in communication and journalism.

OR

When my mom faced financial difficulties, I transferred to a public high school, where my good grades helped me win a scholarship for a bachelor´s degree in communication and journalism.

I don´t think the degree type or subjects need to be capitalized.

Also, I try not to overuse a transition word like "then."

During that time, I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cinematic festivals in Colombia, t. This was amazing!

You could say "and this was amazing!" "which was amazing!" or you could use a semicolon, but I think separating that into a new sentence helps the reader understand your excitement better.

Then I went to Mexico for an exchange program in the most important public universitiesy in Latin America, UNAM.

If "exchange program" is what you´re meaning, while it may be common for students or school staff to say just "exchange," unfamiliar readers will benefit from knowing that "exchange" functions as an adjective describing the program. Also, I think UNAM is one university.

This was my first international travel, and then II also got more opportunities, thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States.

I think "also" helps connect that part to the part before it and helps avoid overusing "then."

Just a month ago, I graduated from my mMaster of aArts program in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida.

The introductory phrase benefits from the added comma. Also, Master of Arts is a specific kind of master´s degree, so it should be capitalized. You could also say "I graduated with my Master of Arts degree ..."

I feel happy and ready to thefor new academic adventures.

"the" makes it sound like you mentioned starting new adventures previously. You could also say something like:

I feel happy and ready for the new academic adventures that I will begin.

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Really clear sequence in your writing, just some relatively minor grammar things I think were notable. Nice!

I started my academic journey when I was a little child, at four years old, when my mom brought me to the preschool where she worked and. I found it interesting to learn new things and interact with children with myof the same age.

Then I joined a private elementary school where I joined the reader club and started my reading journey, t. Then, my mom faced financial difficulties and I was transferred to a public high school when. There, I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bachelor's degree in Social Communication and Journalism.

During that time, I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cine festivals in Colombia, twhisch was amazing!

Then, I went to Mexico for an exchange inprogram at the most important public universitiesy in Latin America, UNAM.

This was my first time traveling international travelly, and then I got more opportunities thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States.

Just a month ago, I graduated fromwith my master of aArts in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida.

I feel happy and ready to thefor new academic adventures.

My academic journey


My aAcademic jJourney

Titles are usually written in title case, which has special capitalization rules.

I started my academic journey when I was a little child, at four years old, when my mom brought me to the preschool where she worked and I found it interesting to learn new things and interact with children with my same age.


I started my academic journey when I was a little child, at four years old, when my mom brought me to the preschool where she worked and. I found it interesting to learn new things and interact with children with myof the same age.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

During that time I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cine festivals in Colombia, this was amazing!


During that time, I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cine festivals in Colombia, twhisch was amazing!

During that time, I co-created a cinema magazine with some friends and traveled to the most important cinematic festivals in Colombia, t. This was amazing!

You could say "and this was amazing!" "which was amazing!" or you could use a semicolon, but I think separating that into a new sentence helps the reader understand your excitement better.

Then I joined priva elementary school where I joined reader club and started my reading journey, then my mom faced financial difficulties and I was trafer to public high school when I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bachelor degree in Social Communication and Journalism.


Then I joined a private elementary school where I joined the reader club and started my reading journey, t. Then, my mom faced financial difficulties and I was transferred to a public high school when. There, I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bachelor's degree in Social Communication and Journalism.

Then I joined a private elementary school where I joined a readering club and started my reading journey, t. Then my mom faced financial difficulties and I was transferred to a public high school, whenre I got good grades and I won a university scholarship to study a Bbachelor´s degree in Ssocial Ccommunication and Jjournalism.

Because there are many complete thoughts here, I think splitting it into separate sentences helps readability. I think a more concise way to write the second sentence would be: When my mom faced financial difficulties, I transferred to a public high school, where I got good grades and won a scholarship to earn a bachelor´s degree in communication and journalism. OR When my mom faced financial difficulties, I transferred to a public high school, where my good grades helped me win a scholarship for a bachelor´s degree in communication and journalism. I don´t think the degree type or subjects need to be capitalized. Also, I try not to overuse a transition word like "then."

Then I went to Mexico for an exchange in the most important public universities in Latin America, UNAM.


Then, I went to Mexico for an exchange inprogram at the most important public universitiesy in Latin America, UNAM.

Then I went to Mexico for an exchange program in the most important public universitiesy in Latin America, UNAM.

If "exchange program" is what you´re meaning, while it may be common for students or school staff to say just "exchange," unfamiliar readers will benefit from knowing that "exchange" functions as an adjective describing the program. Also, I think UNAM is one university.

This was my first international travel and then I got more opportunities thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States.


This was my first time traveling international travelly, and then I got more opportunities thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States.

This was my first international travel, and then II also got more opportunities, thanks to scholarships in Spain and the United States.

I think "also" helps connect that part to the part before it and helps avoid overusing "then."

Just a month ago I graduated from my master of arts in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida.


Just a month ago, I graduated fromwith my master of aArts in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida.

Just a month ago, I graduated from my mMaster of aArts program in Latin American Studies at the University of Florida.

The introductory phrase benefits from the added comma. Also, Master of Arts is a specific kind of master´s degree, so it should be capitalized. You could also say "I graduated with my Master of Arts degree ..."

I feel happy and ready to the new academic adventures.


I feel happy and ready to thefor new academic adventures.

I feel happy and ready to thefor new academic adventures.

"the" makes it sound like you mentioned starting new adventures previously. You could also say something like: I feel happy and ready for the new academic adventures that I will begin.

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