April 13, 2025
Mr. Raji's Daily Life
In the small village at the corner of the forest, there lived an old farmer named Mr. Raji. Every morning, he went to the farm with a hoe and a rattan basket on his back. Although he was archaic, his spirit never faded. He always believes that diligence will lead to a good result. Village children usually came to listen to his stories of past life.
One day, it rained extremely, and Mr. Raji's farm was flooded. Yet, he didn't sigh. Instead, he took advantage of that time to repair his farm tools and planted vegetables in the backyard. His neighbors were impressed by his perseverance and started following his lifestyle. Slowly, the village became more prosperous and harmonious because of the spirit of mutual cooperation.
Di sebuah desa kecil di tepi hutan, hiduplah seorang petani tua bernama Pak Raji. Setiap pagi, ia pergi ke ladang dengan cangkul dan keranjang rotan di punggungnya. Meskipun usianya sudah lanjut, semangatnya tidak pernah padam. Ia selalu percaya bahwa kerja keras akan membawa hasil yang baik. Anak-anak desa sering datang untuk mendengarkan cerita-ceritanya tentang masa lalu.
Suatu hari, hujan turun sangat deras dan ladang Pak Raji terendam air. Namun, ia tidak mengeluh. Ia justru memanfaatkan waktu itu untuk memperbaiki alat-alat pertaniannya dan menanam sayuran di kebun belakang rumah. Tetangganya kagum dengan ketekunannya dan mulai mengikuti cara hidupnya. Perlahan, desa itu menjadi lebih makmur dan harmonis karena semangat gotong royong.
Mr. Raji's Daily Life
In the small village at the corner of the forest, there lived an old farmer named Mr. Raji.
This is completely correct, however the use of "the" in "the forest" indicates that there is only one forest, or that this is a "well known" forest. This can absolutely be the case if that was your intention. However, if you were wanting to indicate that this was a "random forest", or "one of many forests", then it would be better to use "a forest" instead.
Every morning, he went to the farm with a hoe and a rattan basket on his back.
Although he was archaic, his spirit never faded.
He always believes that diligence will lead to a good results.
This sentence is still correct, it's just that this suggestion sounds slightly more "correct".
Village children usually came to listen to his stories of a past life.
One day, it rained extremseverely, and Mr. Raji's farm was flooded.
The use of "extremely" in this case sounds off. Some other synonyms could be "heavily" or "a lot". Other suggestions could be,
"One day, it rained so much that Mr. Raji's farm was flooded."
"One day, a severe rain storm flooded Mr. Raji's farm."
Yet, he didn't sigh.
Instead, he took advantage of that time to repair his farm tools and planted vegetables in the backyard.
Remember to keep the tense of your verbs consistent throughout the sentence. "repair" is present-tense, but "planted" is past-tense.
His neighbors were impressed by his perseverance and they started following his lifestyle.
I'm not sure if this suggestion is necessary, but it sounds "more correct".
Slowly, the village became more prosperous and harmonious because of the spirit of mutual cooperation.
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This was fun to read. An excellent job! There were only 2 things that I would consider an "error", "it rained extremely", and "planted" instead of "plant". I don't think most people would "bat an eye" (give a second thought) to the rest of your short story.
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In the small village at the corner of the forest, there lived an old farmer named Mr. Raji. In the small village at the corner of the forest, there lived an old farmer named Mr. Raji. This is completely correct, however the use of "the" in "the forest" indicates that there is only one forest, or that this is a "well known" forest. This can absolutely be the case if that was your intention. However, if you were wanting to indicate that this was a "random forest", or "one of many forests", then it would be better to use "a forest" instead. |
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Every morning, he went to the farm with a hoe and a rattan basket on his back. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Although he was archaic, his spirit never faded. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He always believes that diligence will lead to a good result. He always believes that diligence will lead to This sentence is still correct, it's just that this suggestion sounds slightly more "correct". |
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Village children usually came to listen to his stories of past life. Village children usually came to listen to his stories of a past life. |
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One day, it rained extremely, and Mr. Raji's farm was flooded. One day, it rained The use of "extremely" in this case sounds off. Some other synonyms could be "heavily" or "a lot". Other suggestions could be, "One day, it rained so much that Mr. Raji's farm was flooded." "One day, a severe rain storm flooded Mr. Raji's farm." |
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Yet, he didn't sigh. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Instead, he took advantage of that time to repair his farm tools and planted vegetables in the backyard. Instead, he took advantage of that time to repair his farm tools and plant Remember to keep the tense of your verbs consistent throughout the sentence. "repair" is present-tense, but "planted" is past-tense. |
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His neighbors were impressed by his perseverance and started following his lifestyle. His neighbors were impressed by his perseverance and they started following his lifestyle. I'm not sure if this suggestion is necessary, but it sounds "more correct". |
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Slowly, the village became more prosperous and harmonious because of the spirit of mutual cooperation. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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