Kpop to Korean Language

It should be either "Kpop to the Korean Language" or "Kpop to Korean". I think the second one sounds more natural.

My two sisters and I started to love Kpop since 2016.

My sister bought a lot of posters and put ithem up on my bedroom wall at first I felt weird because I felt like they are all looking at me.

It sounds like you're referring to multiple posters, and "it" is singular.

As time past I was gettingt first I felt weird because I felt like they are all looking at me, but as time past I got used to it.

You're talking about something that happened in the past, so you should say "got used to it", which is past tense.

The reason why I decided to take ithem down was I wanted to make space forto post my notes to post on my bedroom wall to keep me remind med and keep me inspired to study Korean language.

You're talking about the past so it's "wanted".

I know learning a language will take me years to master but I know, but with perseverance, dedication and discipline itI will bring me able to speak my target language in time and t. Through God's wisdom I know I can do this.

"Gods wisdom" is possessive so it needs an apostrophe.

My two sisters and I started tohave loved Kpop since 2016.

My sister bought a lot of posters and put it on my bedroom wall a. At first, I felt weird because I felt like they awere all looking at me.

As time past I was gettingsed, I got used to it.

The reason why I decided to take ithem down was because I wanted to make space for my notes to post on my bedroom wall to keep me reminded and inspired me to study the Korean language. on my bedroom wall.

"Korean" can be used instead of "the Korean language"

I know learnmastering a language will take me years to master, but I know with perseverance, dedication and discipline itedication, I will bring me able to speak my target language in time and through God's wisdom, I know I can do this.

I think you meant it will take years to become fluent in the language.

My two sisters and I started tohave loved Kpop since 2016.

My sister bought a lot of posters and put ithem on my bedroom wall a. At first I felt weird because I felt like they awere all looking at me.

As time pastsed I was getting use to ithem.

Since you are referring to the posters, use "them" instead of "it".

The reason why I decided to take ithem down was I want to make space for my notes to post on my bedroom wall to keep me remind med and keep me inspired to study Korean language.

Or your could say "... study the Korean language."

I know learning a language will take me years to master but I knowalso know that with perseverance, dedication and discipline itI will bring me to speak my target language in time, and through God's wisdom I know I can do this.