May 23, 2021
June 1st A New Chapter
September, 1995, I started this part time job.
I will be retiring at July 2022.
The first 19 years I was working at S district.
7 years ago, I have been transferred to LT district.
With only one year left.
Many people will choice to stay at the same district.
But recently I have some trouble with my supervisor.
So, I choice to leave LT and return to S.
The new date will start 1st June.
I feel so ironic.
Because in theory this is a best decision.
I got many benefits.
But I still feel sad in my heart.
Because “running away” is never a best solution.
June 1st A New Chapter
September, 1995, I started this job as part time job.
I will be retiring at July 2022.
7 years ago, I have beenwas transferred to LT district.
With only one year left.
Best to combine with the next sentence.
MWith only one year left, many people willould choicose to stay at the same district.
But recently I have some trouble with my supervisor.
Could also combine with the previous sentence.
So, I choicse to leave LT and return to S.
The new date will startstarting date is 1st June.
I feel so ironicconflicted.
I dont think this is be best word choice. Maybe “conflicted”?
Because in theory this is athe best decision.
Because “running away” is never athe best solution.
Could also combine with the previous sentence: “But I still feel sad in my heart because running away is never a good solution.”
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Good! Combining the short sentences that depend on each other, that use “but”, “and”, or “because”, will make it sound more natural.
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But I still feel sad in my heart. |
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June 1st A New Chapter This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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September, 1995, I started this part time job. September, 1995, I started this job as part time |
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I will be retiring at July 2022. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The first 19 years I was working at S district. |
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7 years ago, I have been transferred to LT district. 7 years ago, I |
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With only one year left. With only one year left. Best to combine with the next sentence. |
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Many people will choice to stay at the same district.
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But recently I have some trouble with my supervisor. But recently I have some trouble with my supervisor. Could also combine with the previous sentence. |
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So, I choice to leave LT and return to S. So, I cho |
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The new date will start 1st June. The new |
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I feel so ironic. I feel so I dont think this is be best word choice. Maybe “conflicted”? |
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Because in theory this is a best decision. Because in theory this is |
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I got many benefits. |
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Because “running away” is never a best solution. Because Could also combine with the previous sentence: “But I still feel sad in my heart because running away is never a good solution.” |
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