April 3, 2021
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I have just written a short passage about Huang Mountain. In this passage I said "it must have changed a lot since I was there". A reader makes a joke on me by saying that "I don't think it has changed a lot, because the flying stone will still be that flying stone". I think she is right because all of the natural scenery can't be changed. But the service facilities, the management systems and the public environment have doubtlessly changed a lot. For example, at that time when we had just arrived at Huang Mountain and got off the bus, a crowd of people ran to us promoting various services. Even if we clearly told them that we didn't need any service, they still followed us for a long distance until we started to climb up the mountain. But now, I believe these kinds of things no longer exist. So, what I said really means is something like this.
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I have just written a short passage about Huang Mountain.
In this passage I said "it must have changed a lot since I was there".
A reader makes a joke on mejokes by saying that "I don't think it has changed a lot, because the flying stone will still be that flying stone"."
It is a little bit awkward to say the phrase "makes a joke on me," but any English speaker will know what you're trying to communicate! In its place, you might say "a reader jokes." :)
I think she is right because all of the natural scenery can't be changed.
But the service facilities, the management systems, and the public environment have doubtlesscertainly changed a lot.
I think technically this comma that separates lists (called the Oxford comma) is optional in English now, but it is still very widely used and mimics the natural pause that happens when you verbally speak the sentence :) Also, the word "doubtlessly" is a little bit awkward (I'm not completely certain I've heard it before!) and I think your idea is communicated a little bit better using the word "certainly"
For example, at that time when we had just arrived at Huang Mountain and gotten off the bus, a crowd of people ran to us promoting various services.
Since you use the tense called the "perfect tense" ("we HAD arrived") the verb that comes later in the sentence ("got") needs to also be in this tense since you connect it with the word "and." :)
Even if we clearly told them that we didn't need any service, they still followed us for a long distance until we started to climb up the mountain.
But now, I believe these kinds of things no longer exist.
So, what I said really means is something like this.
I'm not completely sure what you're trying to say here...
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Awesome job here!! Your ideas come across well and there are just some very minor things in my comments that could be changed to be more clear or grammatically correct. None of these issues (besides the final sentence) are things that impede my understanding of your ideas though, so again great job friend!
April 3, 2021
So, what I said really means is something like this.
The true meaning of what I said is referring to these kinds of things.
Thank you for your corrections and your praise.
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I have just written a short passage about Huang Mountain. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In this passage I said "it must have changed a lot since I was there". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A reader makes a joke on me by saying that "I don't think it has changed a lot, because the flying stone will still be that flying stone". A reader It is a little bit awkward to say the phrase "makes a joke on me," but any English speaker will know what you're trying to communicate! In its place, you might say "a reader jokes." :) |
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I think she is right because all of the natural scenery can't be changed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But the service facilities, the management systems and the public environment have doubtlessly changed a lot. But the service facilities, the management systems, and the public environment have I think technically this comma that separates lists (called the Oxford comma) is optional in English now, but it is still very widely used and mimics the natural pause that happens when you verbally speak the sentence :) Also, the word "doubtlessly" is a little bit awkward (I'm not completely certain I've heard it before!) and I think your idea is communicated a little bit better using the word "certainly" |
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For example, at that time when we had just arrived at Huang Mountain and got off the bus, a crowd of people ran to us promoting various services. For example, Since you use the tense called the "perfect tense" ("we HAD arrived") the verb that comes later in the sentence ("got") needs to also be in this tense since you connect it with the word "and." :) |
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Even if we clearly told them that we didn't need any service, they still followed us for a long distance until we started to climb up the mountain. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But now, I believe these kinds of things no longer exist. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So, what I said really means is something like this. So, what I said really means is something like this. I'm not completely sure what you're trying to say here... |
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