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zanyzoe

Nov. 9, 2025

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Japan- Sapporo

In March, I went in Japan with my boyfriend, Pat, for one month.
We traveled a lot, alone and together, but it was our first travel outside of Europe together.
In January, I told to Pat: "I need to go far from France, so let's go to Japan!". And he said yes.
Why Japan?
Because it's the opposite of France for a lot of things, and I really needed to immerse me on an other culture.
First off, we arrived in the Chitose airport and went to Sapporo.
We were chocked by the lot of snow.
In France, we speak a lot about the big town like Tokyo or Kyoto, but not really about the North of Japan, so we don't know what we can see here.
It one of the reason we decided to discover this part of the country.
Sapporo is a sympathetic city.
We saw a lot of people who were playing with the snow, children and adults, and I made snowmen with them.
We were suprised by the car, because there was a lot of small square cars who looks like toys.
We discovered the underground, and in first time, we thought it's only in Sapporo because the snow and cold.
Our first dinner was Soba.
We found a little restaurant and we were astonished by the low price, so we ate too much.
We took a walk at the Nopporo Forest Park, and it was like another world, with all the white snow and nobody around us.
It was a magic moment.
We passed two days on this city, and we really appreciate it.
It was just the beginning of our travel.
After that, we were to Aomori to took our car.

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In March, I went into Japan with my boyfriend, Pat, for one month.

We traveled a lot, both alone and together, but it was our first time travelling outside of Europe together.

In January, I told to Pat: "I need to go farsomewhere far away from France, so let's go to Japan!".

And he said yes.

Because it's the opposite ofdifferent from France forin a lot of things,ways and I really needed to immerse me oyself in an other culture.

First off, we arrived inat the Chitose aAirport and went to Sapporo.

We were cshocked by thethat there was a lot of snow.

In France, we speatalk a lot about the big towncities like Tokyo or Kyoto, but not really about the Nnorth of Japan, so we don't know what we can see here.

We refer to towns to describe areas smaller than Tokyo and Kyoto, which are cities.

It's one of the reasons we decided to discover this part of the country.

Sapporo is a sympathetnice city.

"Sympathetic" in English means feeling pity or sorrow for someone.

We saw a lot of people who were playing within the snow, both children and adults, and I made snowmen with them.

We were suprised by the cars, because there was a lot of small square cars whothat looksed like toys.

Use "who" only when referring to people.

We discovered the underground, and inmetro, and for the first time, we thought that it' was only in Sapporo because of the snow and cold.

"Metro", "subway", and "underground" have the same meaning but depend on where you are/where the speaker is from.

Our first dinner was Ssoba.

We found a little restaurant and we were astonished by the low price, so we ate too much.

We took a walk at the Nopporo Forest Park, and it was like another world, with all the white snow and nobody around us.

It was a magical moment.

We passedspent two days oin this city, and we really appreciated it.

Since it already happened, you'll want to use past tense here.

It was just the beginning of our travels.

After that, we werent to Aomori to tookget our car.

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zanyzoe

Nov. 10, 2025

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Japan- Sapporo


In March, I went in Japan with my boyfriend, Pat, for one month.


In March, I went into Japan with my boyfriend, Pat, for one month.

We traveled a lot, alone and together, but it was our first travel outside of Europe together.


We traveled a lot, both alone and together, but it was our first time travelling outside of Europe together.

In January, I told to Pat: "I need to go far from France, so let's go to Japan!".


In January, I told to Pat: "I need to go farsomewhere far away from France, so let's go to Japan!".

And he said yes.


And he said yes.

Why Japan?


Because it's the opposite of France for a lot of things, and I really needed to immerse me on an other culture.


Because it's the opposite ofdifferent from France forin a lot of things,ways and I really needed to immerse me oyself in an other culture.

First off, we arrived in the Chitose airport and went to Sapporo.


First off, we arrived inat the Chitose aAirport and went to Sapporo.

We were chocked by the lot of snow.


We were cshocked by thethat there was a lot of snow.

In France, we speak a lot about the big town like Tokyo or Kyoto, but not really about the North of Japan, so we don't know what we can see here.


In France, we speatalk a lot about the big towncities like Tokyo or Kyoto, but not really about the Nnorth of Japan, so we don't know what we can see here.

We refer to towns to describe areas smaller than Tokyo and Kyoto, which are cities.

It one of the reason we decided to discover this part of the country.


It's one of the reasons we decided to discover this part of the country.

Sapporo is a sympathetic city.


Sapporo is a sympathetnice city.

"Sympathetic" in English means feeling pity or sorrow for someone.

We saw a lot of people who were playing with the snow, children and adults, and I made snowmen with them.


We saw a lot of people who were playing within the snow, both children and adults, and I made snowmen with them.

We were suprised by the car, because there was a lot of small square cars who looks like toys.


We were suprised by the cars, because there was a lot of small square cars whothat looksed like toys.

Use "who" only when referring to people.

We discovered the underground, and in first time, we thought it's only in Sapporo because the snow and cold.


We discovered the underground, and inmetro, and for the first time, we thought that it' was only in Sapporo because of the snow and cold.

"Metro", "subway", and "underground" have the same meaning but depend on where you are/where the speaker is from.

Our first dinner was Soba.


Our first dinner was Ssoba.

We found a little restaurant and we were astonished by the low price, so we ate too much.


We found a little restaurant and we were astonished by the low price, so we ate too much.

We took a walk at the Nopporo Forest Park, and it was like another world, with all the white snow and nobody around us.


We took a walk at the Nopporo Forest Park, and it was like another world, with all the white snow and nobody around us.

It was a magic moment.


It was a magical moment.

We passed two days on this city, and we really appreciate it.


We passedspent two days oin this city, and we really appreciated it.

Since it already happened, you'll want to use past tense here.

It was just the beginning of our travel.


It was just the beginning of our travels.

After that, we were to Aomori to took our car.


After that, we werent to Aomori to tookget our car.

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