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Nov. 13, 2025

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Japan- Hirosaki Castle

After our visit of the temple, we went to the Hirosaki Castle.
It was one of the last authentic japanese Castle built during the Edo period.
Today, only remains twelve japanese Castle of this period.
First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which contrast with the immaculate snow.
On the park of the Castle, I saw my favorite tree : A ginkgo Biloba, approximately aged three thousand years old.
I love the signification and the story of this tree.
Unfortunately, he didn't have any leaf on this period, but he was still magnificence with his big roots.
The Castle was on the top of the hill.
His walls were white and the roof was something like dark green.
He was nice, but in this season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.
So we just walked on the park covered by the snow.
Even the river was froze!
On spring, the parc is full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.
I think it could be incredebly beautiful.
After this walk, the snow was fall a lot, so we were on the only open cafe : Starbucks.
It was my first time on this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.
It looks like a typical old japanese house.
For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask a hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.
The girls who worked here was very kind.
We took a place next the window, because I wanted to see the snow fall.
There was not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major party were students.
Everybody worked in silence, so it was really peacefull.

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After our visit tof the temple, we went to the Hirosaki Castle.

It was one of the last authentic japanese Castles built during the Edo period.

Today, only remains twelve japanese Castles of this period remain.

First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which contrasted with the immaculate snow.

On the park of the CastleCastle grounds, I saw my favorite tree :

A ginkgo Biloba, which was approximately aged three thousand years old.

I love the significationnce and the story of this tree.

Unfortunately, heit didn't have any leaf on this periods at the time, but heit was still magnificencet with hit's big roots.

The Castle was on the top of the hill.

HiIt's walls were white and the roof was something likea kind of dark green.

HeIt was nice, but in thisat season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.

So we just walked on the parkgrounds covered by the snow.

Even the river was frozen!

OIn spring, the parc isgrounds are full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.

I think it could be incredeibly beautiful.

After thise walk, the snow wasstarted falling a lot, so we were onnt to the only open cafe : Starbucks.

It was my first time oin this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.

It looks like a typical old japanese house.

For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask for a hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.

The girls who worked there wasere very kind.

We took a placeseat next to the window, because I wanted to see the snow fall.

You could also say "we sat down next to the window"

There wasere not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major parity were students.

Everybody worked in silence, so it was really peacefull.

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zanyzoe

Nov. 20, 2025

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Thank you! :)

Today, only remains twelve japanese Castle's of this period.

First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which was in contrast withto the immaculate snow.

On the park of the Castle, I saw my favorite tree :

I love the significationnce and the story of this tree.

Unfortunately, he didn't have any leaf onduring this period, but he was still magnificencet with his big roots.

HisThe walls were white and the roof was something like dark green.

HThe castle was nice, but in this season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.

Even the river was frozen!

On spring, the parck is full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.

After this walk, the snow was fafell a lot, so we were oin the only open cafe : Starbucks.

It was my first time oin this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.

For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask afor hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.

The girls who worked here wasere very kind.

There was not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major party weremostly students.

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zanyzoe

Nov. 20, 2025

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Thank you very much!

Japan- Hirosaki Castle


After our visit of the temple, we went to the Hirosaki Castle.


After our visit tof the temple, we went to the Hirosaki Castle.

It was one of the last authentic japanese Castle built during the Edo period.


It was one of the last authentic japanese Castles built during the Edo period.

Today, only remains twelve japanese Castle of this period.


Today, only remains twelve japanese Castle's of this period.

Today, only remains twelve japanese Castles of this period remain.

First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which contrast with the immaculate snow.


First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which was in contrast withto the immaculate snow.

First off, we passed a beautiful red bridge which contrasted with the immaculate snow.

On the park of the Castle, I saw my favorite tree :


On the park of the Castle, I saw my favorite tree :

On the park of the CastleCastle grounds, I saw my favorite tree :

A ginkgo Biloba, approximately aged three thousand years old.


A ginkgo Biloba, which was approximately aged three thousand years old.

I love the signification and the story of this tree.


I love the significationnce and the story of this tree.

I love the significationnce and the story of this tree.

Unfortunately, he didn't have any leaf on this period, but he was still magnificence with his big roots.


Unfortunately, he didn't have any leaf onduring this period, but he was still magnificencet with his big roots.

Unfortunately, heit didn't have any leaf on this periods at the time, but heit was still magnificencet with hit's big roots.

The Castle was on the top of the hill.


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His walls were white and the roof was something like dark green.


HisThe walls were white and the roof was something like dark green.

HiIt's walls were white and the roof was something likea kind of dark green.

He was nice, but in this season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.


HThe castle was nice, but in this season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.

HeIt was nice, but in thisat season, everything was closed, so we couldn't visit anything.

So we just walked on the park covered by the snow.


So we just walked on the parkgrounds covered by the snow.

Even the river was froze!


Even the river was frozen!

Even the river was frozen!

On spring, the parc is full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.


On spring, the parck is full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.

OIn spring, the parc isgrounds are full of cherry trees that are blossoming, with pink and white flowers.

I think it could be incredebly beautiful.


I think it could be incredeibly beautiful.

After this walk, the snow was fall a lot, so we were on the only open cafe : Starbucks.


After this walk, the snow was fafell a lot, so we were oin the only open cafe : Starbucks.

After thise walk, the snow wasstarted falling a lot, so we were onnt to the only open cafe : Starbucks.

It was my first time on this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.


It was my first time oin this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.

It was my first time oin this type of coffeeshop, but I was suprised by the quality of the architecture of the building.

It looks like a typical old japanese house.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask a hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.


For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask afor hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.

For the first time, I spoke in japanese to ask for a hot chocolate and a very good pastery with cream and matcha.

The girls who worked here was very kind.


The girls who worked here wasere very kind.

The girls who worked there wasere very kind.

We took a place next the window, because I wanted to see the snow fall.


We took a placeseat next to the window, because I wanted to see the snow fall.

You could also say "we sat down next to the window"

There was not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major party were students.


There was not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major party weremostly students.

There wasere not a lot of people, less than ten, and the major parity were students.

Everybody worked in silence, so it was really peacefull.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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