Elephants´ behaviorThe Behavior of Elephants The Behavior of Elephants

(Please feel free to not only correct my (grammar) mistaketical) errors, but also to give meinform me of more suitable phrases / /vocabulary. (Please feel free to not only correct my (grammatical) errors, but also to inform me of more suitable phrases/vocabulary.

I'll swap out words where applicable for ones I think are more advanced, but still fit the sentence.

Elephants have strongform intimate social cbonnectionsds with one another. Elephants form intimate social bonds with one another.

The females never leave their family herd.herd of birth, The females never leave their herd of birth,

Unlike the males, theywho "move out" when they´re teenagers. Unlike the males, who "move out" when they´re teenagers.

Uunlike the males, theywho "move out" whenonce they´ re teenagers.ach their teens, unlike the males, who "move out" once they reach their teens,

They "moveing in" with other male elephants and buildforming a "bachelor-herd". "moving in" with other male elephants and forming a "bachelor-herd".

Merged these sentences together because it sounds nicer.

The cCalves get raisare reared by their wholeentire matrilinear family: grandmothers, aunties, brothers, sisters andjuvenile siblings and cousins, and their mother. Calves are reared by their entire matrilinear family: grandmothers, aunts, juvenile siblings and cousins, and their mother.

I changed "auntie" to "aunt" because it's the more formal term. "Auntie" is fine in casual conversation, but not in an article or essay like this. I added the word "matrilinear" because the father and uncles aren't included here, so I assume it's just the maternal family members and siblings/cousins.

Furthermore, elephants communicate through two different wayAlso of note is that elephants are able to communicate via two distinct acoustic methods. Also of note is that elephants are able to communicate via two distinct acoustic methods.

I changed "furthermore" because this sentence isn't advancing the previous point, so that word doesn't work. "Also of note" is a different bridging phrase which can introduce a totally separate idea. I added the word "acoustic" which means "to do with sound or hearing". The second half of the sentence is a bit of a "big word overload", but I used it to demonstrate new words you might want to use.

On the one hand they use soundThe first is through sound frequencies that weus humans canare capable of hearing. The first is through sound frequencies that us humans are capable of hearing.

"On the one hand..." etc. isn't suitable here, because that phrase is used to contrast the pros and cons of something. Eg. "On the one hand, being fired means I finally have time to spend with my kids. On the other hand, I now have to worry about my finances."

On the other hand they useThe second is via infrasound, an incredibly low -frequency sound undetectable to us. The second is via infrasound, an incredibly low-frequency sound undetectable to us.

Infrasound can travel many kilometers, that leads to the fact that. Therefore, elephants can stay in contact within aover long distances. Infrasound can travel many kilometers. Therefore, elephants can stay in contact over long distances.

Infrasound can travel many kilometers, that leads to the fact that elephants can stay in contact within a longwhich allows elephants to maintain connections over extended distances. Infrasound can travel many kilometers, which allows elephants to maintain connections over extended distances.

Evidence shows that elephants have feelings likehas demonstrated that elephants are capable of experiencing emotions such as grief. Evidence has demonstrated that elephants are capable of experiencing emotions such as grief.

A clear example of this is a situation which happened in 1986 in Africa, where a man witnessed a sick calvef and it´s mother. A clear example of this is a situation which happened in 1986 in Africa, where a man witnessed a sick calf and its mother.

A clear example of this is a situation happened 1986 in Africawhich occurred in Africa (country?) in 1986, where a man witnessspotted a sick calve anf with it´s mother. A clear example of this is a situation which occurred in Africa (country?) in 1986, where a man spotted a sick calf with its mother.

The calvef was laying on the floorground and the mother tried to help them. The calf was lying on the ground and the mother tried to help them.

The calvef was laying on the floor and thewhile its mother triattempted to help themit up(?). The calf was lying on the floor while its mother attempted to help it up(?).

This might be difficult because it's the ancient remnants of a more complex verb conjugation system in English, but "lie/lying" and "lay/laying" have different uses. The first is intransitive, eg.: "I lie down on the bed." The second is transitive, eg.: "She lay her baby down on the bed." "I lay my head on her shoulder." "The sword lay discarded on the ground." Many verbs don't have transitive and intransitive forms, but some do.

Later theat day the calvef died and the mother still stayed by the calves´f's side. Later that day the calf died and the mother still stayed by the calf's side.

Later theat day, the calve died andf perished, yet the mother still stayremained by the calves´f's side. Later that day, the calf perished, yet the mother remained by the calf's side.

Other elephants tried to comfortnsole the mother. Other elephants tried to console the mother.

When one elephant is sad or grieving another tries to comfort them via bodily contact. When one elephant is sad or grieving another tries to comfort them via bodily contact.

or "physical contact"

When one elephant is sad or grievdowncast or mourning, another triesmay try to comfort them via body contphysical intimacty. When one elephant is downcast or mourning, another may try to comfort them via physical intimacy.

This is similar to how humans huggingembrace one another. This is similar to how humans embrace one another.