April 22, 2021
In the woods
It was a group of 6 young people who went climb on the mountain. They walked through the woods but did not see which way they were supposed to go. The road was easy for them to pass quite normally but until they came across ''a trap''. Suddenly, there was a sound. A huge tree appeared and blocked their way. Everyone was saved. It was getting dark, everyone was sleeping in their tents. When they woke up, a girl from the group saw two ''beasts''. They all packed up and ran out of the woods but that was not the end of the story. The other two fell into a camouflaged hole. At that time, the monsters spotted them. One young man from the group said: ''Watch out!'' While his friend pulled two friends out of the hole. They all started fleeing from the forest to their apartment where they settled. The day after, they all went home and said to themselves that they would never return there again.
In the woods
It was aA group of 6 young people who went to climb on the mountain.
They walked through the woods but did not see which way they were supposed to go.
The road was easy for them to pass quite normally but, until they came across ''a trap''.
Suddenly, there was a sound.
A huge tree appearedfell and blocked their way.
"appeared" makes it seem like the tree was magical and showed itself in front of the young people.
Everyone was saved.
It was getting dark, so everyone was sleepingt in their tents.
When they woke up, a girl from the group saw two ''beasts''.
If you mean to say you are not sure they were beasts, you can write it as: "...a girl from the group saw what seemed like two beasts."
They all packed up and ran out of the woods but that was not the end of the story.
Thewo other twopeople fell into a camouflaged hole.
At that timemoment, the monsters spotted them.
"moment" means the second it happened; there is a sense of danger and emergency.
One young man from the group said: ''Watch out!''
While his friend pulled two friends out of the hole.
They all started fleeing from the forest to their apartment where they settled.
The day after, they all went home and said to themselves that they would never return thereo the mountains/forest again.
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In the woods This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was a group of 6 young people who went climb on the mountain.
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They walked through the woods but did not see which way they were supposed to go. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The road was easy for them to pass quite normally but until they came across ''a trap''. The road was easy for them to pass quite normally |
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Suddenly, there was a sound. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A huge tree appeared and blocked their way. A huge tree "appeared" makes it seem like the tree was magical and showed itself in front of the young people. |
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Everyone was saved. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was getting dark, everyone was sleeping in their tents. It was getting dark, so everyone |
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When they woke up, a girl from the group saw two ''beasts''. When they woke up, a girl from the group saw two If you mean to say you are not sure they were beasts, you can write it as: "...a girl from the group saw what seemed like two beasts." |
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They all packed up and ran out of the woods but that was not the end of the story. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The other two fell into a camouflaged hole. T |
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At that time, the monsters spotted them. At that "moment" means the second it happened; there is a sense of danger and emergency. |
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One young man from the group said: ''Watch out!'' This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They all started fleeing from the forest to their apartment where they settled. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The day after, they all went home and said to themselves that they would never return there again. The day after, they all went home and said to themselves that they would never return t |
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