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serhan

Dec. 26, 2023

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If the wild dogs were snow leaopart

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungry. If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them. In the below video, the leopard jump off the cliff to hunt the deer. In this scenario, the wild dogs do not have sufficent courage to jump. none of them shows courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feast. If the wild dogs were the leopard, the deers becoming calm in a negative situation does not pay off.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulF9R7r4Jok

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If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

In the below videovideo below, the leopard jumps off the cliff to hunt the deer.

In this scenario, the wild dogs do not have sufficent courage to jump.

nNone of them shows the courage to sacrifice itselfthemselves among the clan for a feast.

If the wild dogs were the leopards, the deers becoming calm in athis negative situation doeswould not pay off.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulF9R7r4Jok

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Nice job!

If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds?

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

In the below videovideo below, the leopard jump off the cliff to hunt the deer.

In this scenario, the wild dogs doid not have sufficent courage to jump.

nNone of them showsed enough courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feast.

If the wild dogs were thlike leopard,s, the deers would becominge calm in a negativeand this situation doeswould not pay off.

If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds

Removing animal pronouns from titles is usually more natural sounding.

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

Just study word order for this one and you'll be solid!

If they were hungry enough, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

You will want to repeat "hungry enough" even if you just described it in the last sentence.

In the below videovideo below, the leopard jumps off the cliff to hunt the deer.

Word order for video and below, which is an easy fix. For the singular form of jump, make sure to use "jumps".

In this scenariocase, the wild dogs do not have sufficient courage to jump.

Scenario is used for hypothetical situations.

nNone of them shows enough courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feastthemselves for a feast for the pack.

Them calls for the use of themselves, not itself. It is appropriate to use enough rather than not use it because the wild dogs had some courage in attempting the hunt. Pack is more appropriate to describe a group of dogs than clan.

If the wild dogs were the leopards, the deers becoming calm in a negativethis dangerous situation doeswould not pay off.

It is awkward to describe a pack of dogs becoming one leopard. Deer is never written as "deers". Second part of the sentence has the incorrect tense. "Dangerous" tells the reader more information than "negative".

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulF9R7r4Jok

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Overall, this is a job well done! Keep up the good work!

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serhan

Dec. 26, 2023

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Thank you very much. I learnt many things :)

If the wild dogs were snow leaopart


If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds

Removing animal pronouns from titles is usually more natural sounding.

If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds?

If the wild dogs were snow leaopartds

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungry.


I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

Just study word order for this one and you'll be solid!

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

I think the wild dogs are not enough hungryhungry enough.

If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.


If they were hungry enough, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

You will want to repeat "hungry enough" even if you just described it in the last sentence.

If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

If they were, they would jump towards the deers to catch them.

In the below video, the leopard jump off the cliff to hunt the deer.


In the below videovideo below, the leopard jumps off the cliff to hunt the deer.

Word order for video and below, which is an easy fix. For the singular form of jump, make sure to use "jumps".

In the below videovideo below, the leopard jump off the cliff to hunt the deer.

In the below videovideo below, the leopard jumps off the cliff to hunt the deer.

In this scenario, the wild dogs do not have sufficent courage to jump.


In this scenariocase, the wild dogs do not have sufficient courage to jump.

Scenario is used for hypothetical situations.

In this scenario, the wild dogs doid not have sufficent courage to jump.

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none of them shows courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feast.


nNone of them shows enough courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feastthemselves for a feast for the pack.

Them calls for the use of themselves, not itself. It is appropriate to use enough rather than not use it because the wild dogs had some courage in attempting the hunt. Pack is more appropriate to describe a group of dogs than clan.

nNone of them showsed enough courage to sacrifice itself among the clan for a feast.

nNone of them shows the courage to sacrifice itselfthemselves among the clan for a feast.

If the wild dogs were the leopard, the deers becoming calm in a negative situation does not pay off.


If the wild dogs were the leopards, the deers becoming calm in a negativethis dangerous situation doeswould not pay off.

It is awkward to describe a pack of dogs becoming one leopard. Deer is never written as "deers". Second part of the sentence has the incorrect tense. "Dangerous" tells the reader more information than "negative".

If the wild dogs were thlike leopard,s, the deers would becominge calm in a negativeand this situation doeswould not pay off.

If the wild dogs were the leopards, the deers becoming calm in athis negative situation doeswould not pay off.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ulF9R7r4Jok


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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