July 4, 2025
I Wonder...
I used to seek cheap thrills on every body arms
It wasn't passion or a hot feeling, it was just a need fulfillment
I needed to feel desired and kissed like everything was going to hell
Didn't think or thought that if I loved someone I wouldn't need to seek that.
Now I love you, i'm yours and you're mine.
So where's that sparkle? That something that I was looking for
Well I only found it in the wrong places, maybe it's the danger factor that I miss
When I'm in your arms feeling your warm I feel safe, maybe that's the problem.
I wish you want me like I crave you
I hoped that you would never get tired of me
Nowadays, I only feel something when I'm numbed by drinking
When I'm intoxicated by your perfume
I look at you and all I see is a person who needs me not someone who is attracted to it
In such short space of time we're boring as hell
I Wonder...
I used to seek cheap thrills oin every body's arms
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It wasn't passion or a hot feeling, it was just a need for fulfillment
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I needed to feel desired and kissed like everything was going to hell
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(I) Didn't think or thought that if I loved someone I wouldn't need to seek that.
(1) "Everybody" is one word.
(2) "Didn't thought" is ungrammatical. "Didn't think" will suffice.
Now I love you, iI'm yours and you're mine.
So where's that sparkle?
That something that I was looking for
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Well, I only found it in the wrong places, maybe it's the danger factor that I miss
.¶
When I'm in your arms feeling your warmth I feel safe, maybe that's the problem.
(1) "Well" is typically followed by a comma.
(2) "Warm" is an adjective. "Warmth" is the noun.
I wish you want me like I crave you
,¶
I hoped that you would never get tired of me
.¶
Nowadays, I only feel something when I'm numbed by drinking
.¶
When I'm intoxicated by your perfume
,¶
I look at you and all I see is a person who needs me, not someone who is attracted to it
me.¶
In such a short spacen of time we're boring as hell.
(1) I'm not sure what "it" is referring to in the phrase "attracted to it". I'm assuming you're referring to yourself.
(2) The word to use with "time" is "span".
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Was this intentionally written in the form of a poem? If so, I understand that some poems do not place punctuations at the end of lines. However, with punctuation being the way this site separates sentences, you might consider using them. That aside, I think that this was quite well-written.
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I used to seek cheap thrills on every body arms It wasn't passion or a hot feeling, it was just a need fulfillment I needed to feel desired and kissed like everything was going to hell Didn't think or thought that if I loved someone I wouldn't need to seek that. I used to seek cheap thrills (1) "Everybody" is one word. (2) "Didn't thought" is ungrammatical. "Didn't think" will suffice. |
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Now I love you, i'm yours and you're mine. Now I love you, |
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That something that I was looking for Well I only found it in the wrong places, maybe it's the danger factor that I miss When I'm in your arms feeling your warm I feel safe, maybe that's the problem. That something that I was looking for (1) "Well" is typically followed by a comma. (2) "Warm" is an adjective. "Warmth" is the noun. |
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I wish you want me like I crave you I hoped that you would never get tired of me Nowadays, I only feel something when I'm numbed by drinking When I'm intoxicated by your perfume I look at you and all I see is a person who needs me not someone who is attracted to it In such short space of time we're boring as hell I wish you want me like I crave you (1) I'm not sure what "it" is referring to in the phrase "attracted to it". I'm assuming you're referring to yourself. (2) The word to use with "time" is "span". |
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