May 6, 2025
I climbed to the peak of the mountain
That day, I was staying on the third floor of a tall building with eight floors in total. I woke up at 8:20 and spent half an hour on my phone. My friend didn't wake up until nine. After that, we brushed our teeth, washed our faces, and packed our bags. We went out at nine thirty.
First, we went to the supermarket to buy some food. I bought some baby bananas and two large bottles of water. My friend only got one large bottle of water. Then, I went to a baozi shop and bought a few baozi. Meanwhile, my friend went to another supermarket to buy some chocolate and a box of potato chips. After that, we went to a breakfast place to eat. I ordered two rice noodle rolls, while my friend just ordered one.
While my friend was buying food, he alse booked a rideshare to Luofu mountain. By the time we finished breakfast , the car had arrived to pick us up. The trip to Luofo mountain took about two hours.
Second, when we got out of the car, I bought two tickets for the Luofu mountain scenic area on my phone. we crossed the road and arrived at the place where we needed to check in. Before checking in, we went to the toilet.
We started to climb the mountain. When I looked at the map of the scenic area, I found Daoist temple, so we decided to visit it. I walked around for a few minutes and left, but when I passed by the main hall, I noticed there was free incense. So I went back to the temple and lit some incense. On the way out, we saw a statue of the God of Wealth and prayed to it.
We continued to climb the mountain. The mountain is 1,296 meters high, and the path to the top is about 10 kilometers long. The way to the summit is well constructed -- some parts can be accessed by car, while most of the path consists of stone steps. It's a large-scale project. One ticket costs 43 yuan.
There are many shops along the way to the summit. These shops sell food, water, trekking poles, and more. However, there was a lot of garbage, even thought there were plenty of trash bins. There are alse a few attractions, such as rafting, a cableway, and sightseeing cars. The sightseeing cars can take you about one-third of the way up, and the cableway reaches about two-thirds of the way. But this time, we didn't take any of those transportation options -- we just hiked all the way to the top.
Third, we reached the top of the mountain. It took us about four hours. I got cramps in both legs during the last kilometer, but I kept walking and eventually made it to the top. We took a few photos at the summit. On the way back, we planned to take the cableway down to the bottom, the line was too long, so we decided to walk down instead.
Finally, we got back to the bottom of the mountain and booked a rideshare to return. After we got out of the car, we had dinner at KFC -- a small chicken meal. Then, we went to another restaurant to have a bowl noodles. That's how our trip to Luofu Mountain came to an end.
I climbed to the peak of thea mountain
The mountain that you are going to climb to is not known to the readers, so use “a” instead of “the”
That Yesterday, I was staying on the third floor of a tall building withhich has eight floors in total.
I’m not sure what you meant by “that day” since it’s not specific enough, so I put “yesterday”.
I woke up at 8:20 and spent half an hour on my phone.
My friend didn't wake up until nine.
After that, we brushed our teeth, washed our faces, and packed our bags.
We went out at nine thirty.
Firstly, we went to the supermarket to buy some food.
I bought some baby bananas and two large bottles of water.
My friend only got one large bottle of water.
Then, I went to a baozi shop and bought a few baozi.
Meanwhile, my friend went to another supermarket to buy some chocolate and a box (packet/bag) of potato chips.
Packet/bag is more commonly used instead of “box” unless the potato chips comes in a physical box.
After that, we went to a breakfast place to eat.
I ordered two rice noodle rolls, while my friend just ordered one.
While my friend was buying food, he alseo booked a ride-share to Luofu mountain.
Second, wWhen we got out of the car, I bought two tickets for the Luofu mountain scenic area on my phone.
wWe crossed the road and arrived at the place where we needed to check in.
Before checking in, we went to the toilet.
WAfter that, we started to climb the mountain.
When I looked at the map of the scenic area, I found Daoist temple (was nearby), so we decided to visit it.
I walked around for a few minutes and leftthought there was nothing, but when I passed by the main hall, I noticed there was free incense.
So I went back to the temple and lit some incense.
On the way out, we saw a statue of the God of Wealth and prayed to it.
WThen, we continued to climb the mountain.
The mountain is 1,296 meters high, and the path to the top is about 10 kilometers long.
The way to the summit is well constructed -- some parts can be accessed by car, while most of the path consists of stone steps.
It's a large-scale project.
One ticket costs 43 yuan.
There are many shops along the way to the summit.
These shops sell food, water, trekking poles, and more.
However, there was a lot of garbage, even thought there were plenty of trash bins.
There are alseo a few attractions and activities, such as rafting, a cableway, and sightseeing cars.
Since you included rafting, I added in “activities”.
ThirdAt last/Finally, we reached the top of the mountain.
It took us about four hours.
I got cramps in both legs during the last kilometer, but I kept walking and eventually made it to the top.
We took a few photos at the summit.
On the way back, we planned to take the cableway down to the bottom, but the line was too long, so we decided to walk down instead.
Finally, we got back to the bottom of the mountain and booked a ride-share toand returned to our hotel.
I assume you are staying in a hotel? If not you can say “and returned ~~” eg. Home
After we got out of the car, we had dinner at KFC --. We ordered a small chicken meal.
Then, we went to another restaurant to have a bowl of noodles.
That's how our trip to Luofu Mountain came to an end.
Describe your experience at the end of the trip, how were you feeling? Excited? Tired? Both?
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Overall, a very well written essay. Hope you had enjoyed your trip to Luofu mountain!
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My friend only got one large bottle of water. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I woke up at 8:20 and spent half an hour on my phone. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My friend didn't wake up until nine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I climbed to the peak of the mountain I climbed to the peak of The mountain that you are going to climb to is not known to the readers, so use “a” instead of “the” |
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That day, I was staying on the third floor of a tall building with eight floors in total.
I’m not sure what you meant by “that day” since it’s not specific enough, so I put “yesterday”. |
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Then, I went to a baozi shop and bought a few baozi. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Meanwhile, my friend went to another supermarket to buy some chocolate and a box of potato chips. Meanwhile, my friend went to another supermarket to buy some chocolate and a box (packet/bag) of potato chips. Packet/bag is more commonly used instead of “box” unless the potato chips comes in a physical box. |
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After that, we went to a breakfast place to eat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I ordered two rice noodle rolls, while my friend just ordered one. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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While my friend was buying food, he alse booked a rideshare to Luofu mountain. While my friend was buying food, he als |
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By the time we finished breakfast , the car had arrived to pick us up. |
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The trip to Luofo mountain took about two hours. |
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Second, when we got out of the car, I bought two tickets for the Luofu mountain scenic area on my phone.
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we crossed the road and arrived at the place where we needed to check in.
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Before checking in, we went to the toilet. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We started to climb the mountain.
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When I looked at the map of the scenic area, I found Daoist temple, so we decided to visit it. When I looked at the map of the scenic area, I found Daoist temple (was nearby), so we decided to visit it. |
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There are many shops along the way to the summit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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These shops sell food, water, trekking poles, and more. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, there was a lot of garbage, even thought there were plenty of trash bins. However, there was a lot of garbage, even though |
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There are alse a few attractions, such as rafting, a cableway, and sightseeing cars. There are als Since you included rafting, I added in “activities”. |
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The sightseeing cars can take you about one-third of the way up, and the cableway reaches about two-thirds of the way. |
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After that, we brushed our teeth, washed our faces, and packed our bags. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We went out at nine thirty. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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First, we went to the supermarket to buy some food. Firstly, we went to the supermarket to buy some food. |
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I bought some baby bananas and two large bottles of water. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I walked around for a few minutes and left, but when I passed by the main hall, I noticed there was free incense. I walked around for a few minutes and |
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So I went back to the temple and lit some incense. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the way out, we saw a statue of the God of Wealth and prayed to it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We continued to climb the mountain.
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The mountain is 1,296 meters high, and the path to the top is about 10 kilometers long. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The way to the summit is well constructed -- some parts can be accessed by car, while most of the path consists of stone steps. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's a large-scale project. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One ticket costs 43 yuan. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But this time, we didn't take any of those transportation options -- we just hiked all the way to the top. |
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Third, we reached the top of the mountain.
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It took us about four hours. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I got cramps in both legs during the last kilometer, but I kept walking and eventually made it to the top. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We took a few photos at the summit. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the way back, we planned to take the cableway down to the bottom, the line was too long, so we decided to walk down instead. On the way back, we planned to take the cableway down to the bottom, but the line was too long, so we decided to walk down instead. |
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Finally, we got back to the bottom of the mountain and booked a rideshare to return. Finally, we got back to the bottom of the mountain and booked a ride-share I assume you are staying in a hotel? If not you can say “and returned ~~” eg. Home |
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After we got out of the car, we had dinner at KFC -- a small chicken meal. After we got out of the car, we had dinner at KFC |
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Then, we went to another restaurant to have a bowl noodles. Then, we went to another restaurant to have a bowl of noodles. |
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That's how our trip to Luofu Mountain came to an end. That's how our trip to Luofu Mountain came to an end. Describe your experience at the end of the trip, how were you feeling? Excited? Tired? Both? |
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