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kantaro

April 27, 2021

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I can't stop to hunt monsters.

Have you play Monster Hunter? This is a game and my youth. When I was middle school student, I always play it with friends in their houses or school , hiding from teachers.
And recently, it was released the new series, "Monster Hunter Rise".
At first, I didn't have a interest in it, but my co-workers recommended to buy it hardly, so I bought it.
Then, I actually enjoy to play it and I can't stop to play. Last day-off, I played for a hall day.
It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English well.

How do you study to avoid your desires?
If you'd like, please give me good advises and help me…

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I can't stop to hunting monsters.

https://learnenglish.britishcouncil.org/grammar/intermediate-to-upper-intermediate/verbs-followed-by-ing-or-by-to-infinitive-2

Have you played Monster Hunter?

Past participle "played" for present perfect tense.

This is a game and my youth.

Do you mean to say that your youth was defined by playing Monster Hunter? You played Monster Hunter so much that Monster Hunter *was* your youth? If so this is good! Metaphorical :)

Possibly you mean something like "This is a game from my youth" though.

When I was a middle school student, I always played it with friends in their houses or at school , hiding from teachers.

"play" needs to be past tense here, as it's a verb happening "when I was a student" - in the past.

And recently, it was released the new series was released, "Monster Hunter Rise".

Here you have "it", a pronoun, used *before* the noun it replaces, which is not very good. You might say something like: "Now there's a new series. It was recently released: 'Monster Hunter Rise'." But here you don't actually need a pronoun at all!

At first, I didn't have any interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended to buy it hardlybuying it, so I bought it.

"a interest" is wrong - i is a vowel, so it would be "an interest". But "any interest" is most natural.

"hardly" is not a synonym for "strongly", in fact it means almost the opposite: "Barely, only just, almost not." If I hardly recommend something, then I am recommending it so weakly that I am almost not recommending it at all.

And we usually use the gerund when "recommending" verbs.

Then, I actually enjoy toed playing it, and now I can't stop to playing.

Seems most natural.

Last day- off, I played for a hallwhole day.

We don't tend to use "day off" like this, it would be more natural to say "On my last day off".

It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English well.

How do you study to avoid your desires when you want to study?

This is a guess, it's unclear what you mean.

If you'd like, please give me good advisesce and help me…

"Advise" is a verb; the noun is "advice". English is a silly language.

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It's not very useful advice, but I think you just have to set goals and stick to them. Today I will read about X grammar topic and work on it for half an hour; THEN I will play Monster Hunter for the rest of the day :) And keep writing things and posting them!

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kantaro

April 27, 2021

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Thanks you for correcting it !!! Your directions are so clear. I definitely understood them :)

I can't stop to hunting monsters.

If this is a title, it should be "I Can't Stop Hunting Monsters".

Have you play ed "Monster Hunter"?

Ex.
- Have you visited Japan before?
- Have you watched "Harry Potter"?
- Have you eaten dinner yet?

This is a game, and also a significant part of my youth.

You can also say, "This game series was a significant part of my youth."

When I was middle school student, I always played it with friends inat their houses or at school , hiding from teachers.

When you're telling a story about something that happened in the past, use the past tense👍

And recently, it was released the new seriesthe newest game in the series was released and is titled, "Monster Hunter Rise".

At first, I didn't have an interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended (for) me to buy it hardly, so I bought it.

Instead of "hardly", we say "to strongly recommend".

ThenAfter trying it out, I actually enjoy toed playing it and I caouldn't stop to playing.

When the 1st verb is either negative or ends w/ an -ed, the following verb usually needs to end in -ing.

Ex.
I didn't have fun eating cherries.
He couldn't stop reading the new book.
They enjoyed playing soccer.

LaOn my latest day-off, I played for a hallthe whole day.

You can also say: "On my most recent day off, ..."

It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English well.

How do you studtry to avoid your desires?

If you'd like, please feel free to give me good advisesce and tips to help me out

Feedback

Just a few minor issues with tenses, but your journal is mostly very clear.
I've also played "Monster Hunter Rise" on the Switch. It really is addictive so, unfortunately, I have no tips or advice.

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kantaro

April 27, 2021

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Thanks you for correcting it !!! Your directions are so clear. I definitely understood them :)
And I glad to hear that you said " your journal is mostly very clear." That encourages me a lot.

I can't stop to hunting monsters.

Have you played Monster Hunter?

This is a game andfrom my youth.

When I was a middle school student, I always played it with friends inat their housmes or at school , hiding it from teachers.

And rRecently, it was released the new series was released, "Monster Hunter Rise".

At first, I didn't have any interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended to buy it hardly, so I bought itbuying it, so I did.

In modern English, hardly means almost not at all or barely. Strongly or enthusiastically are probably closer to your meaning.

Then, I actually enjoy to playded up enjoying it, and now I can't stop to playing.

LOn my last day-off, I played for a hallthe whole day.

Not sure if I understood this sentence correctly. If you meant a half day, I would say "On my last day-off, I played for half the day."

It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English as well.

How do you study toand avoid being tempted by your desires?

If you'd like, please give me some good advises andce that will help me…

Feedback

I can definitely relate to this issue :)

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kantaro

April 27, 2021

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Thanks you for correcting it !!! Your directions are so clear. I definitely understood them :)

I can't stop to hunt monsters.


I can't stop to hunting monsters.

I can't stop to hunting monsters.

If this is a title, it should be "I Can't Stop Hunting Monsters".

I can't stop to hunting monsters.

https://learnenglish.britishcouncil.org/grammar/intermediate-to-upper-intermediate/verbs-followed-by-ing-or-by-to-infinitive-2

Have you play Monster Hunter?


Have you played Monster Hunter?

Have you play ed "Monster Hunter"?

Ex. - Have you visited Japan before? - Have you watched "Harry Potter"? - Have you eaten dinner yet?

Have you played Monster Hunter?

Past participle "played" for present perfect tense.

This is a game and my youth.


This is a game andfrom my youth.

This is a game, and also a significant part of my youth.

You can also say, "This game series was a significant part of my youth."

This is a game and my youth.

Do you mean to say that your youth was defined by playing Monster Hunter? You played Monster Hunter so much that Monster Hunter *was* your youth? If so this is good! Metaphorical :) Possibly you mean something like "This is a game from my youth" though.

When I was middle school student, I always play it with friends in their houses or school , hiding from teachers.


When I was a middle school student, I always played it with friends inat their housmes or at school , hiding it from teachers.

When I was middle school student, I always played it with friends inat their houses or at school , hiding from teachers.

When you're telling a story about something that happened in the past, use the past tense👍

When I was a middle school student, I always played it with friends in their houses or at school , hiding from teachers.

"play" needs to be past tense here, as it's a verb happening "when I was a student" - in the past.

And recently, it was released the new series, "Monster Hunter Rise".


And rRecently, it was released the new series was released, "Monster Hunter Rise".

And recently, it was released the new seriesthe newest game in the series was released and is titled, "Monster Hunter Rise".

And recently, it was released the new series was released, "Monster Hunter Rise".

Here you have "it", a pronoun, used *before* the noun it replaces, which is not very good. You might say something like: "Now there's a new series. It was recently released: 'Monster Hunter Rise'." But here you don't actually need a pronoun at all!

At first, I didn't have a interest in it, but my co-workers recommended to buy it hardly, so I bought it.


At first, I didn't have any interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended to buy it hardly, so I bought itbuying it, so I did.

In modern English, hardly means almost not at all or barely. Strongly or enthusiastically are probably closer to your meaning.

At first, I didn't have an interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended (for) me to buy it hardly, so I bought it.

Instead of "hardly", we say "to strongly recommend".

At first, I didn't have any interest in it, but my co-workers strongly recommended to buy it hardlybuying it, so I bought it.

"a interest" is wrong - i is a vowel, so it would be "an interest". But "any interest" is most natural. "hardly" is not a synonym for "strongly", in fact it means almost the opposite: "Barely, only just, almost not." If I hardly recommend something, then I am recommending it so weakly that I am almost not recommending it at all. And we usually use the gerund when "recommending" verbs.

Then, I actually enjoy to play it and I can't stop to play.


Then, I actually enjoy to playded up enjoying it, and now I can't stop to playing.

ThenAfter trying it out, I actually enjoy toed playing it and I caouldn't stop to playing.

When the 1st verb is either negative or ends w/ an -ed, the following verb usually needs to end in -ing. Ex. I didn't have fun eating cherries. He couldn't stop reading the new book. They enjoyed playing soccer.

Then, I actually enjoy toed playing it, and now I can't stop to playing.

Seems most natural.

Last day-off, I played for a hall day.


LOn my last day-off, I played for a hallthe whole day.

Not sure if I understood this sentence correctly. If you meant a half day, I would say "On my last day-off, I played for half the day."

LaOn my latest day-off, I played for a hallthe whole day.

You can also say: "On my most recent day off, ..."

Last day- off, I played for a hallwhole day.

We don't tend to use "day off" like this, it would be more natural to say "On my last day off".

It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English well.


It was a disaster, because I couldn't study English as well.

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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

How do you study to avoid your desires?


How do you study toand avoid being tempted by your desires?

How do you studtry to avoid your desires?

How do you study to avoid your desires when you want to study?

This is a guess, it's unclear what you mean.

If you'd like, please give me good advises and help me…


If you'd like, please give me some good advises andce that will help me…

If you'd like, please feel free to give me good advisesce and tips to help me out

If you'd like, please give me good advisesce and help me…

"Advise" is a verb; the noun is "advice". English is a silly language.

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