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I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.1)

Xinjiang cotton has become a hot topic in China. Here's how it played out: H&M claimed to be boycotting Xinjiang cotton. Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of good cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.
And many brands have joined this organization. Nike, Uniqlo, GAP, Zara and other brands that have joined the organization have all issued "banned Xinjiang cotton" statements on their official websites.
And then there's what happened today, with a large group of people calling for a boycott of these products. A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accused "These companies are trying to make money in China while creating rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton? What a fool's errand!" And of course there was some hilarious criticism: "These US offical websites blocks us from seeing their websites! It's disgusting!" Of course the opposite is true, apparently it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.
Seriously, I'm sick of it.
As we all know, this is related to the recent sanctions imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently. But what exactly is going on in Xinjiang, do we Chinese know? I don't think most of us know. Chinese websites have blocked all news about Xinjiang concentration camps. Sorry, that's not accurate enough, it should be called blocking all negative news. It's like Biden's New Year's message this year, and the part about Xinjiang was just censored in Chinese Version. In China, everything about Xinjiang is positive. You can see on the Chinese Internet that small, unknown countries are sending people to visit Xinjiang and think Xinjiang is a wonderful place. There are also news articles denouncing the attempts by "foreign forces" to undermine China's unification. Can Chinese news sites report on the Xinjiang concentration camps? No, they can't. Because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented. So what is going on in Xinjiang? I don't know. All the information comes from foreign media. How ironic to have to understand what is happening in our own country through other country's media.

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I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.1)

Xinjiang cotton has become a hot topic in China.

Here's how it played out: H&M claimed to be boycotting Xinjiang cotton.

Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international, non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which. It works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of "good" cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.

And mMany brands have joined this organization.

Nike, Uniqlo, GAP, Zara, and other brands that have joined the organization have all issued "banned Xinjiang cotton" statements on their official websites.

And then there's what happened today, withas a large group of people is now calling for a boycott of these products.

A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accusedsaid accusingly that "These companies are trying to make money in China while creating rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton?

What a fool's errand!"

And of course there was some hilarious criticism: "These US official US websites blocks us from seeing their websitesm!

It's disgusting!"

Of course the opposite is true, a. Apparently it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.

Seriously, I'm sick of it.

Asll we all know,know is that this is related to the recent sanctions imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently.

But what exactly is going on in Xinjiang, d? Do we Chinese know?

I don't think that most of us know.

Chinese websites have blocked all news about the Xinjiang concentration camps.

Sorry, that's not accurate enough, i. It should really be called blocking out all negative news.

It's like Biden's New Year's message this year, ands the part about Xinjiang was just censored in Chinese Version.

In China, everything about Xinjiang is positive.

You can see on the Chinese Internet that small, unknown countries are sending people to visit Xinjiang and think Xinjiang is a wonderful place.

There are also news articles denouncing the attempts by "foreign forces" to undermine China's unification.

Can Chinese news sites report on the Xinjiang concentration camps?

No, they can't.

BThis is because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media areis party-oriented.

So what is going on in Xinjiang?

"What is" is often said/written as "what's".

I don't know.

All the information about what's going on comes from foreign media.

How ironic it is to have to understandlearn about what is happening in our own country through another country's media.

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

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heyyawn

March 26, 2021

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Thanks

I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.1)

Xinjiang cotton has become a hot topic in China.

Here's how it played out: H&M claimed to be boycotting Xinjiang cotton.

Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which. BCI works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers, and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of good cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it's quite long.

And mMany brands have joined this organization.

In more formal writing, avoid starting a sentence with "and."

Nike, Uniqlo, GAP, Zara and other brands that have joined the organization have all issued "banned Xinjiang cotton" statements on their official websites.

And then there's what happened today, with a large group of people calling for a boycott of these products.

A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accused claimed that "These companies are trying to make money in China while cspreatding rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton?.

"Spreading rumors" is a great collocation.
To accuse in this context is always to accuse someone of something.
Eg: A group of people led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account accused these companies of trying to make money in China while spreading rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton.

What a fool's errand!"

And of course there was some hilarious criticism: "These US offical websites blocks us from seeing their websites!

It's disgusting!"

Of course, the opposite is true, a. Apparently, it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.

Seriously, I'm sick of it.

As we all know, this is related to the recent sanctions recently imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently.

Purely stylistic - what you wrote is correct, but this sounds a tiny bit better to me.

But whatdo we Chinese know exactly what is going on in Xinjiang, do we Chinese know?

I don't think most of us know.

Chinese websites have blocked all news about Xinjiang concentration camps.

Sorry, that's not accurate enough, i. It should be called blocking all negative news.

It's likeFor example, the part in Biden's New Year's message this year, and the part about Xinjiang was just censored in the Chinese Vversion.

In China, everything about Xinjiang is positive.

You can see on the Chinese Internet that small, unknown countries are sending people to visit Xinjiang and think Xinjiang is a wonderful place.

There are also news articles denouncing the attempts by "foreign forces" to undermine China's unification.

Can Chinese news sites report on the Xinjiang concentration camps?

No, they can't, becaause the first rule ofo journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented.

Because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented.

So what is going on in Xinjiang?

I don't know.

All the information that we can trust comes from foreign media.

How ironic to have to understand what is happening in our own country through other country's media.

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Awful situation :( but your English is great!

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heyyawn

March 26, 2021

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I Can't Bear It Anymore (pt.1)


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Xinjiang cotton has become a hot topic in China.


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Here's how it played out: H&M claimed to be boycotting Xinjiang cotton.


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Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of good cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.


Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which. BCI works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers, and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of good cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.

This sentence is grammatically correct, but it's quite long.

Then people found there is a connection between H&M and Better Cotton Initiative (BCI), an international, non-profit membership organization registered in Switzerland in 2009, which. It works with stakeholders from cotton fields to suppliers, manufacturers and brands to provide a globally accepted definition of "good" cotton and to propose social and environmental standards that are applicable worldwide.

And many brands have joined this organization.


And mMany brands have joined this organization.

In more formal writing, avoid starting a sentence with "and."

And mMany brands have joined this organization.

Nike, Uniqlo, GAP, Zara and other brands that have joined the organization have all issued "banned Xinjiang cotton" statements on their official websites.


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Nike, Uniqlo, GAP, Zara, and other brands that have joined the organization have all issued "banned Xinjiang cotton" statements on their official websites.

And then there's what happened today, with a large group of people calling for a boycott of these products.


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And then there's what happened today, withas a large group of people is now calling for a boycott of these products.

A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accused "These companies are trying to make money in China while creating rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton?


A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accused claimed that "These companies are trying to make money in China while cspreatding rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton?.

"Spreading rumors" is a great collocation. To accuse in this context is always to accuse someone of something. Eg: A group of people led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account accused these companies of trying to make money in China while spreading rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton.

A group of people, led by the Communist Youth League's Weibo account, accusedsaid accusingly that "These companies are trying to make money in China while creating rumors to boycott Xinjiang cotton?

What a fool's errand!"


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And of course there was some hilarious criticism: "These US offical websites blocks us from seeing their websites!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And of course there was some hilarious criticism: "These US official US websites blocks us from seeing their websitesm!

It's disgusting!"


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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Of course the opposite is true, apparently it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.


Of course, the opposite is true, a. Apparently, it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.

Of course the opposite is true, a. Apparently it's our wonderful Great Fire Wall that blocks their official websites.

Seriously, I'm sick of it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

As we all know, this is related to the recent sanctions imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently.


As we all know, this is related to the recent sanctions recently imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently.

Purely stylistic - what you wrote is correct, but this sounds a tiny bit better to me.

Asll we all know,know is that this is related to the recent sanctions imposed on Xinjiang by European and American countries recently.

But what exactly is going on in Xinjiang, do we Chinese know?


But whatdo we Chinese know exactly what is going on in Xinjiang, do we Chinese know?

But what exactly is going on in Xinjiang, d? Do we Chinese know?

I don't think most of us know.


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I don't think that most of us know.

Chinese websites have blocked all news about Xinjiang concentration camps.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Chinese websites have blocked all news about the Xinjiang concentration camps.

Sorry, that's not accurate enough, it should be called blocking all negative news.


Sorry, that's not accurate enough, i. It should be called blocking all negative news.

Sorry, that's not accurate enough, i. It should really be called blocking out all negative news.

It's like Biden's New Year's message this year, and the part about Xinjiang was just censored in Chinese Version.


It's likeFor example, the part in Biden's New Year's message this year, and the part about Xinjiang was just censored in the Chinese Vversion.

It's like Biden's New Year's message this year, ands the part about Xinjiang was just censored in Chinese Version.

In China, everything about Xinjiang is positive.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You can see on the Chinese Internet that small, unknown countries are sending people to visit Xinjiang and think Xinjiang is a wonderful place.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

There are also news articles denouncing the attempts by "foreign forces" to undermine China's unification.


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Can Chinese news sites report on the Xinjiang concentration camps?


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No, they can't.


No, they can't, becaause the first rule ofo journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented.

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Because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented.


Because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media are party-oriented.

BThis is because the first rule of journalism is that Chinese media areis party-oriented.

So what is going on in Xinjiang?


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So what is going on in Xinjiang?

"What is" is often said/written as "what's".

I don't know.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

All the information comes from foreign media.


All the information that we can trust comes from foreign media.

All the information about what's going on comes from foreign media.

How ironic to have to understand what is happening in our own country through other country's media.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

How ironic it is to have to understandlearn about what is happening in our own country through another country's media.

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