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I can remember 6Six years ago, I was a young girl without a mobile phone. Six years ago, I was a young girl without a mobile phone.

I can remember 6 years ago, when I was a young girl without a mobile phone. I can remember 6 years ago when I was a young girl without a mobile phone.

I can remember 6six years ago,. I was a young girl without a mobile phone. I can remember six years ago. I was a young girl without a mobile phone.

Numbers zero to ten are written in word form, usually. This sentence contains a comma splice, which means you put a comma to separate two independent clauses (you can't do this in English). You could just replace the comma with a period, and these two sentences would be grammatically correct. Here's a smoother way to say the same thing: "Six years ago, I remember myself as a young girl without a mobile phone."

I hadspent less time in the virtual world and spent more timmore in the real world. I spent less time in the virtual world and more in the real world.

I hadspent less time in the virtual world and spent more timmore in the real world. I spent less time in the virtual world and more in the real world.

I hadspent less time in the virtual world and spent more timmore in the real world. I spent less time in the virtual world and more in the real world.

I had nothing to keep me distracted, until I got a phone. I had nothing to keep me distracted until I got a phone.

I had nothing to keep me distract med, until I got a phone. I had nothing to distract me, until I got a phone.

I had nothing to keep me distracted, until I got a phone. I had nothing to keep me distracted until I got a phone.

I can remember how happy and excited I was then. I can remember how happy and excited I was.

FI finally, I also haved a mobile device like every other girl and boychild my age. I finally had a mobile device like every other child my age.

Finally, I also have a mobile device like every other girl and boy my age. Finally, I have a mobile device like every other girl and boy my age.

Finally, I also haved a mobile device like every other girl and boy my age. Finally, I also had a mobile device like every other girl and boy my age.

Then it startedcame the distractions, games, and social media. Then came the distractions, games, and social media.

This is easier to read while keeping the dramatic tone.

The distractions, games, and social media.

This is a sentence fragment because there is no verb present. It's added to the previous sentence.

Especially social media. Especially social media.

Good use of the fragment.

It started drawining me away from the real world and into the virtual world. It started draining me away from the real world and into the virtual world.

"Draining" is what you intend to say. Or write "withdrawing".

I couldn't stop myself. I couldn't stop myself.

I couldn't stop myself. I couldn't stop myself.

You want be sure to include the contraction with "not" here since without it your sentence has the opposite meaning.

I couldn't stop myself. I couldn't stop myself.

Wait, you "could" or "couldn't"? It makes more sense here if you wrote you "couldn't".

I couldn't stop myself. I couldn't stop myself.

I'm pretty sure you meant "couldn't" or "could not".

It was like a drug that kept me scrolling for hours while I was laughing and liking the videos. It was like a drug that kept me scrolling for hours while I was laughing and liking the videos.

Good metaphor

SI was scrolling for hours, laughing and liking videos. I was scrolling for hours, laughing and liking videos.

Your original sentence is fine if this is a literary work. But if this is part spoken or formal writing, you may want to include a subject.

Scrolling for hours, laughing and liking videos.

This is a sentence fragment, and I've attached it to the previous sentence.

I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how. I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how.

I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how. I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how.

You need to qualify what it is you didn't know. For example, "...didn't know how addictive it would be" or "...didn't know how to stop."

I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how. I couldn't get myself out of it because I didn't know how.

Or maybe "...I didn't know how bad it was for me." Depending on what you mean.

But nNow I know, but I'm still stuck. Now I know, but I'm still stuck.

But now I know, but and I'm still stuck. But now I know and I'm still stuck.

You can also use "yet" or "however" if you keep "But" in the beginning of the sentence. An alternative is to remove "But" and use it later: "Now I know, but I'm still stuck." As a side note: This sentence is changing verb tenses and interrupts the overall flow of your story. To keep it the same you may want to say "I even realized the problem but was still stuck"

But nNow, I know how to stop, but I'm still feel stuck. Now, I know how to stop, but I still feel stuck.

This is a comparison sentence, however, using "but" is repetitive and choppy.

But now I know, buyet I'm still stuck. But now I know, yet I'm still stuck.

Not a requirement, but you can use "yet" in place of "but" to avoid repetition.

I didn't know anything else again and started blaming my device and social media. I started blaming my device and social media.

I didn't know anything else again and, so I started blaming my device and social media. I didn't know anything, so I started blaming my device and social media.

I'm not sure what you mean by "I didn't know anything else again". The "anything else again" part is confusing to me, particularly the use of "again".

I realized that the problem wasn't social media,; it was me. I realized that the problem wasn't social media; it was me.

This is a comma splice. Use the semicolon (;) to separate two independent clauses.

But later, I realized that the problem wasn't social media, it was me. But later, I realized that the problem wasn't social media, it was me.

Without something like "But later, " or "Eventually, ", this feels connected to the last sentence in a way that doesn't make sense.

I should not have allowed a tool to control my life. I should not have allowed a tool to control my life.

You still want to stay in the past tense here.

I should not allow a tool to control my life, instead I should started working against it. I should not allow a tool to control my life, instead I should started working against it.

So I started working towards it. So I started working towards it.

Technically correct but it's not clear what you're referring to by "it"

So I started working towards itmproving my habits. So I started working towards improving my habits.

It better to qualify what "it" is here since the reader or listener doesn't know.

So I started working towards it.

This sentence should connect with the previous.

So I started working towardson it. So I started working on it.

You'd work 'towards' something really specific. Like, working towards cutting screen time usage, or if 'it' is known to be something explicitly mentioned. For something more general, you can say you work 'on' it.

I set screen time limits and alarms as reminders and now it'sI'm getting better. I set screen time limits and alarms as reminders and now I'm getting better.

You can qualify what "it" is with something else. I just chose "I" for ease. You could also say "...and now my control over my social media habits is getting better".

I set screen time limits and alarms as reminders, and now it's getting better. I set screen time limits and alarms as reminders, and now it's getting better.

I tell myself no wWhenever I am tempted to just waste away precious time, I tell myself that I can never get it back. Whenever I am tempted to waste precious time, I tell myself that I can never get it back.

"it" being the "precious time". I moved the dependent clause with "Whenever" to the beginning of the sentence for better flow.

I tell myself no, "No," whenever I am tempted to just waste away precious time that I can never get back. I tell myself, "No," whenever I am tempted to just waste away precious time that I can never get back.

Use or do not use quotation marks for thoughts that pop up in your head that you want to point out. More emphasis is created on that word when you add the quotation marks.

I tell myself "no" whenever I am tempted to just waste away precious time that I can never get back. I tell myself "no" whenever I am tempted to just waste away precious time that I can never get back.

Now I a'm here, still working on it but now I am'm getting better. Now I'm here, still working on it but now I'm getting better.

Contracting "I am" to "I'm" is best suited for this style of writing. If this was a formal or professional work "I am" may be more appropriate depending on the topic. I still believe it would be best to quality what "it" is but I left it at the end here sense your meaning is clear enough at the end of the passage.

Now I am here,I am still working on it but now I am, and I am getting better. I am still working on it, and I am getting better.

"Now" is repetitive. Writing "I am" is in the present tense, so there is no need. "I am getting" is a present progressive tense, which is an action that is continuously happening in the present.

Now I am here,: still working on it, but now I am better. Now I am here: still working on it, but now I am better.

Alternatively (although slightly different meaning): "...still working on it, but things are better."