May 11, 2021
How embarrassing
It was during the summer break. I was spending most of my free time with my friend playing and driving our bikes. We decided to mark this summer break with some new adventure.
I suggested my friend going to the movies. Everybody liked that idea and I was very excited. That morning I was beautifully dressed from head to toe, washed my teeth, made my hair, but my dad's perfume, and went to the movies with my mum.
She left me there and I went to the mall, jumping with happiness. I met my friend there and we all went to the movies. On the way I saw a beautiful girl from our school, I was staring at her and didn't even notice that there was a big glass door in from of me.
I was looking only at her all the time and then BUM! The next thing I remember is that I'm lying on the floor while all my friends are laughing at me. The beautiful girl approached me and helped me get up. She introduced herself but I was still really ashamed.
My big adventure turned into a nightmare but I still got to meet my new sympathy.
How eEmbarrassing!
In English, the first letter in all nouns, verbs, adjetives, adverbs, etc., is capitalized in the title.
It was during the summer break.
I was spending most of my free time with my friend, playing and drivding our bikes.
We decided to mark this summer break with some new adventure.
I suggested my friend going to the movies to my friend .
EverybodThey liked that idea and I was very excited.
"Everyone" normally implies more than two people.
That morning, I was beautifully dressed from head to toe, washed my teeth, made brushed, my hair, but made, my dad's perfume applied, and I went to the movies with my mum.
She left me there and I went to the mall, jumping with happiness.
I met my friend there and we allboth went to the movies.
"We all" implies more than two people.
On the way, I saw a beautiful girl from our school,. I was staring at her and didn't even notice that there was a big glass door in from of me.
I was looking onfocused solely aton her all the time and then BUM!
The next thing I remember is that I'm lying on the floor while all my friends are laughing at me.
This sentence is grammatically correct but doesn't make sense within the general paragraph, because prior to this only one friend was mentioned.
The beautiful girl approached me and helped me get up.
She introduced herself, but I was still really ashamed.
My big adventure turned into a nightmare, but I still got to meet my new sympathycrush.
"Sympathy" doesn't really make sense here.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
May 23, 2021
Thank you so much!
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How embarrassing How In English, the first letter in all nouns, verbs, adjetives, adverbs, etc., is capitalized in the title. |
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It was during the summer break. It was during |
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I was spending most of my free time with my friend playing and driving our bikes. I was spending most of my free time with my friend, playing and |
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We decided to mark this summer break with some new adventure. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I suggested my friend going to the movies. I suggested |
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Everybody liked that idea and I was very excited.
"Everyone" normally implies more than two people. |
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That morning I was beautifully dressed from head to toe, washed my teeth, made my hair, but my dad's perfume, and went to the movies with my mum. That morning, I was beautifully dressed from head to toe, |
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She left me there and I went to the mall, jumping with happiness. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I met my friend there and we all went to the movies. I met my friend there and we "We all" implies more than two people. |
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On the way I saw a beautiful girl from our school, I was staring at her and didn't even notice that there was a big glass door in from of me. On the way, I saw a beautiful girl from our school |
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I was looking only at her all the time and then BUM! I was |
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The next thing I remember is that I'm lying on the floor while all my friends are laughing at me. The next thing I remember is that I'm lying on the floor while all my friends are laughing at me. This sentence is grammatically correct but doesn't make sense within the general paragraph, because prior to this only one friend was mentioned. |
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The beautiful girl approached me and helped me get up. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She introduced herself but I was still really ashamed. She introduced herself, but I was still really ashamed. |
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My big adventure turned into a nightmare but I still got to meet my new sympathy. My big adventure turned into a nightmare, but I still got to meet my new "Sympathy" doesn't really make sense here. |
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