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I practiced jazz drum tonight. I started to practice a new song which is quite difficult for me. The bpm is 96, and there are a lot rhytms of kick drum. The more difficult thing is that there are some semiquaver styles of the kick drum which means I have to kick very quickly.
If I divided it in two parts, I could do it. But when I play continously, I failed. If you merely look at the style, it is quite simple. What you need to do is to hit the snare once at the third beat meanwhile your right foot and hand are playing the same styles. I could do it without hitting snare. When I hit the snare, my right foot was out of control. It seemed like my brain wasn't able to handle three parts of my lombs. At that moment, I wished I were a robot that things would have been easier.


我想表达的是,那个节奏是两个十六分音符。地鼓(kick drum/kick)是连续两个十六分音符,hihat是两个八分音符,军鼓(snare)只在第二个十六分音符的第一下。地鼓和hihat的节奏都是一样的,所以只需要在第三下加一个左手的军鼓就可以。看似很简单,对机器人来说特别简单,对我来说好难。

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Hands Aand Feet

In a title we only capitalise the main words.

I practiced jazz drum tonight.

I started to practice a new song which is quite difficult for me.

The bpm is 96, and there are a lot rhythms of kick drum.

I'm afraid I don't know much about drums so I will assume "kick drum" is correct. Maybe another viewer can confirm.

The morest difficult thing is that there are some semiquaver styles of the kick drum, which means I have to kick very quickly.

When you use "which", it's generally an indication that you need a comma. It also means that "means" refers to the circumstance. If you had used "that" instead of "which", the "that" would refer to "styles" so you would have to write "mean" instead i.e. "styles that mean I have to..."

If I divided it into two parts, I could do it.

to divide something into parts

But when I played continuously, I failed.

Try to stay within the tense.
When I play continuously, I fail (a general statement - simple present)
When I played continuously, I failed (the evening you were practising - simple past)

If you merely look at the style, it is quite simple.

What you need to do is to hit the snare once aton the third beat, meanwhilest your right foot and hand are playing the same styles.

Since it is a general rule, I would use simple present in both clauses

I could do it without hitting snare.

When I hit the snare, my right foot was out of control.

It seemed like my brain wasn't able to handle three parts of my loimbs.

Or do you mean three of your limbs?

At that moment, I wished I were a robot so that things would have been easier.

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You're very hard on yourself! Well done on learning an instrument. One day you'll look at this skill and find it very easy! #
Your text is very good, just a few small grammar points to keep in mind when you're writing. Well done!

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kiwy

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It seemed like my brain wasn't able to handle three parts of my loimbs.

Yes.

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kiwy

July 31, 2021

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Thank you!

Hands And Feet


Hands Aand Feet

In a title we only capitalise the main words.

I practiced jazz drum tonight.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I started to practice a new song which is quite difficult for me.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The bpm is 96, and there are a lot rhytms of kick drum.


The bpm is 96, and there are a lot rhythms of kick drum.

I'm afraid I don't know much about drums so I will assume "kick drum" is correct. Maybe another viewer can confirm.

The more difficult thing is that there are some semiquaver styles of the kick drum which means I have to kick very quickly.


The morest difficult thing is that there are some semiquaver styles of the kick drum, which means I have to kick very quickly.

When you use "which", it's generally an indication that you need a comma. It also means that "means" refers to the circumstance. If you had used "that" instead of "which", the "that" would refer to "styles" so you would have to write "mean" instead i.e. "styles that mean I have to..."

If I divided it in two parts, I could do it.


If I divided it into two parts, I could do it.

to divide something into parts

But when I play continously, I failed.


But when I played continuously, I failed.

Try to stay within the tense. When I play continuously, I fail (a general statement - simple present) When I played continuously, I failed (the evening you were practising - simple past)

If you merely look at the style, it is quite simple.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

What you need to do is to hit the snare once at the third beat meanwhile your right foot and hand are playing the same styles.


What you need to do is to hit the snare once aton the third beat, meanwhilest your right foot and hand are playing the same styles.

Since it is a general rule, I would use simple present in both clauses

I could do it without hitting snare.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

When I hit the snare, my right foot was out of control.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It seemed like my brain wasn't able to handle three parts of my lombs.


It seemed like my brain wasn't able to handle three parts of my loimbs.

Or do you mean three of your limbs?

At that moment, I wished I were a robot that things would have been easier.


At that moment, I wished I were a robot so that things would have been easier.

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