April 5, 2021
Haidilao Hotpot
In order to let my granddaughter eat Haidilao hotpot, we went to the Haidilao restaurant again this morning. Because Haidilao usually needs to wait in line in advance, I tried to make a reservation on my phone when it was just a little bit past 10 am. But I failed to book a table, and the front table receptionist told me on the phone that we had to go to the restaurant to see if there were available tables. When we arrived at the restaurant, it was only a little past 11, but there were no tables available, so we had to wait in line. Until 1:30 pm we could have a table to eat.
During lunch we met two interesting things. One was some staff of the restaurant celebrating a child's birthday. They sang and danced, and the birthday atmosphere was very warm. The other was a staff member who hand pulled noodles on the spot, and he pulled the noodles like a dancer with beautiful posture. When we finished our lunch, it was already 3 pm. As always, the waiters gave us a few toys, some snacks and candies. The service quality of Haidilao is really good, but the price of all the food there was also very high. I feel like I won't go there in the future, unless it's necessary.
Haidilao Hotpot
In order to let my granddaughter eat Haidilao hotpot, we went to the Haidilao restaurant again this morningWe went to the Haidilao restaurant again this morning so that my granddaughter could eat Haidilao hotpot.
It sounds better to use the purpose clause after the main clause, as doing it the way you did it sounds a bit stilted (but is definitely not incorrect). "So that" just sounds better here, I don't know why though.
Because HaidilaoSince you usually needs to wait in line in advancefor Haidilao, I tried to make a reservation in advance on my phone when it was just a little bit past 10 am.
"In advance" refers to the reservation so it should be in the same clause as it. You need "you" there (or something equivalent) to indicate the impersonal form - that is, anyone that goes for Haidilao needs to wait in line, as opposed to Haidilao itself waiting in line.
But I failed to book a table, and the front table receptionist told me on the phone that we had to go to the restaurant to see if there were available tables.
When we arrived at the restaurant, it was only a little past 11, but there were no tables available, so we had to wait in line.
Until 1:30 pm we could haveWe didn't get a table to eat until 1:30 pm.
I wasn't completely sure what you were going for, but I assumed that you were trying to say that you didn't get a table until 1:30.
During lunch we met two interesting things.
"Met" is alright but "encountered" is a synonym of "met" and sounds slightly better here.
One was some staff of the restaurant celebrating a child's birthday.
They sang and danced, and the birthday atmosphere was very warm.
The other was a staff member who hand pulled noodles on the spot, and he pulled the noodles by hand, like a dancer with beautiful posture.
"Hand-pulled" sounds a bit weird but I could see what you were going for. We tend to use the phrase "by hand" to refer to an action that is done with the hands as opposed to a machine (like a noodle maker). You don't need to need to repeat "he pulled the noodles".
When we finished our lunch, it was already 3 pm.
As always, the waiters gave us a few toys, some snacks and candies.
The service quality of Haidilao is really good, but the price of all the food there was also very high.
I feel like I won't go there in the future, unless it's necessary.
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你的英文很好的.
Nearly all of your sentences made sense, and most of my corrections are just improvements on style, which means that your English is very strong.
April 11, 2021
Thank you for your corrections and praise. I will continue to learn to make my English better.
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Haidilao Hotpot This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In order to let my granddaughter eat Haidilao hotpot, we went to the Haidilao restaurant again this morning.
It sounds better to use the purpose clause after the main clause, as doing it the way you did it sounds a bit stilted (but is definitely not incorrect). "So that" just sounds better here, I don't know why though. |
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Because Haidilao usually needs to wait in line in advance, I tried to make a reservation on my phone when it was just a little bit past 10 am.
"In advance" refers to the reservation so it should be in the same clause as it. You need "you" there (or something equivalent) to indicate the impersonal form - that is, anyone that goes for Haidilao needs to wait in line, as opposed to Haidilao itself waiting in line. |
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But I failed to book a table, and the front table receptionist told me on the phone that we had to go to the restaurant to see if there were available tables. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When we arrived at the restaurant, it was only a little past 11, but there were no tables available, so we had to wait in line. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Until 1:30 pm we could have a table to eat.
I wasn't completely sure what you were going for, but I assumed that you were trying to say that you didn't get a table until 1:30. |
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During lunch we met two interesting things. During lunch we met two interesting things. "Met" is alright but "encountered" is a synonym of "met" and sounds slightly better here. |
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One was some staff of the restaurant celebrating a child's birthday. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They sang and danced, and the birthday atmosphere was very warm. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The other was a staff member who hand pulled noodles on the spot, and he pulled the noodles like a dancer with beautiful posture. The other was a staff member who "Hand-pulled" sounds a bit weird but I could see what you were going for. We tend to use the phrase "by hand" to refer to an action that is done with the hands as opposed to a machine (like a noodle maker). You don't need to need to repeat "he pulled the noodles". |
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When we finished our lunch, it was already 3 pm. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As always, the waiters gave us a few toys, some snacks and candies. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The service quality of Haidilao is really good, but the price of all the food there was also very high. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I feel like I won't go there in the future, unless it's necessary. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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