May 31, 2021
Growth Process and Restructuring
I don't like everyday talks. They include little benefits.
One duration, I was absorbed in a game. There was a time when I became popular among the users in that game's server. One of the many reasons was attributed to my distinctive play style. I didn't pay a lot of money to the administration, but was still competitive as a lancer having high luck as the number of character's ability. Even when I was 230 in my level, I solely and often went for a hunt for monsters in their 600 level or around. I got almost no reword of experience points because the gap between the level of monsters and I are quite far open. But I was enjoying hunts seeking for drop of rare items, like first or second ever dropped item in the server or high price estimated item to sell to one of the top players in the server. But as I grew up, I became not to want to play any games except Japanese chess.
One duration in the past, I was always participating online conversation with the same or slightly different peers from each day. Thanks to it, I can admit that my conversational skill with my native tongue was more upgraded than before, when I was hesitant even to respond to a phone call from someone except my family. Then as I grew up further, I came not to want to talk about everyday matters for many hours continuously. The shorter one is enough. One of the reasons is, to be honest, I am not interested in others' everyday lives. For instance, I don't want to hear about non-productive talk such as complaints to their fellows, celebrities' scandals they are interested in, sports they play or watch, the battle with each other in the talking group in an attempt to get a title of being wiser than the other.
Since I started English, I have had many chances to talk with other countries' people. But after two or so years, or recently, I gradually got also accustomed to talking with them. So I faced the same problem to a time when I talk to Japanese. I got tired of hearing about daily matters. At the same time, thanks to staying for a long time for many days with speaking in English, I became aware of a need to have a chance to use my mother language several times a month. But I think, twice a month is enough to talk with them because I am busy in investing in the U.S. stocks, not in Japanese ones actively lately, and because they compete each other over trifles or some of them always start with negative expression to the assertion from the other person even without hearing up to the last word in the assertion or even though it is completely right assertion with a proof.
I have to focus on my own. That is better moment for me to feel satisfaction. To make time used more effectively is necessary. Time is not someone's. Time is mine. Time is always consumed by itself. Time doesn't await a man. Through experience, parts of waste are removed of. Through complexity and chaos, the next order will be restructured.
Growth Process and Restructuring
I don't like everydaysmall talks.
"Small talk" is a phrase for simple conversations about the weather, what people are doing over the weekend, and so on. Like the noun "water", the word "talk" is uncountable and never in plural. So never say "talks".
TheyIt includes little benefits.
Again "talk" is always singular, uncountable.
One durationtime, I was absorbed in a game.
"Duration" means, you want to describe *for how long* something happened. In this sentence, you want to express that something ever happened at all, so you use "time" here.
There was a time when I became popular among the users in that game's server.
One of the many reasons was attributed to my distinctive play style.
"attributed to" means "a reason", but before this phrase you already mentioned the "many reasons", so it's redundant
I didn't pay a lot of money to the administration, but was still competitive as a lancer having highgood luck as the number of character's ability.
Do you mean: "I was still competitive as a lancer, having good luck as one of my character's abilities (ie character is the lancer you are in the game)", or "I was still competitive as a lancer, because part of my personality is good luck", or something else?
Even when I was 230 in my level, I solelyat level 230, I alone and often went for a hunt forhunting monsters in or around their 600 level or around.
"alone" is right for this context, not "solely". While "went for a hunt" is grammatical, it implies going one time and thus doesn't work with "often", which implies many times.
I got almost no rewoard of experience points because the gap between the levels of the monsters and I are often quite far open.
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You wrote quite a bit, sorry I don't have time to correct it all! In general, your grammar and sentence structure is pretty good. The biggest issue is vocabulary. You tend to use fancier, less common words that don't have quite the right meaning for what you want to say. For instance, saying "duration" instead of "time" or saying "solely" instead of "alone". For now, I recommend using simpler words because they work most of the time. When writing, you can use a site like Glosbe or Reverso to check words' contexts in order to see the difference between things like "solely" and "alone". In Glosbe, you'll see tons of people saying "one time," and nobody saying "one duration,". Hope this helps
June 1, 2021
Easy vocabulary has a wider range of meanings and usages basically in general. So in order to clarify and not to make listeners to misunderstand it, I have to use specific words. I don't know which is more natural or not because I am not experienced like native speakers. I don't think these are not common words because I often see them and I roughly know each vocabulary level for learners. But the odds will be high that I might use them incorrectly. I am very sorry for that time.
I wanted to say certain duration in the past.
I wanted to say high numerical point in luck of the character in this context, but I actually have a good luck as well.
I've never seen this form ''I alone....'' For me, this is more unnatural. But I now checked it. That means in my understanding of the dictionary ''Only I''. So I think ''I alone'' implies ''not any other members do it.'' But I simply wanted to say ''I went hunting alone (as a solo play).'', not ''Only I went hunt, while other players didn't.''
Thank you.
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Time is mine. |
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To make time used more effectively is necessary. |
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Growth Process and Restructuring This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I don't like everyday talks. I don't like "Small talk" is a phrase for simple conversations about the weather, what people are doing over the weekend, and so on. Like the noun "water", the word "talk" is uncountable and never in plural. So never say "talks". |
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They include little benefits.
Again "talk" is always singular, uncountable. |
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One duration, I was absorbed in a game. One "Duration" means, you want to describe *for how long* something happened. In this sentence, you want to express that something ever happened at all, so you use "time" here. |
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There was a time when I became popular among the users in that game's server. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One of the many reasons was attributed to my distinctive play style. One of the many reasons was "attributed to" means "a reason", but before this phrase you already mentioned the "many reasons", so it's redundant |
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I didn't pay a lot of money to the administration, but was still competitive as a lancer having high luck as the number of character's ability. I didn't pay a lot of money to the administration, but was still competitive as a lancer having Do you mean: "I was still competitive as a lancer, having good luck as one of my character's abilities (ie character is the lancer you are in the game)", or "I was still competitive as a lancer, because part of my personality is good luck", or something else? |
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Even when I was 230 in my level, I solely and often went for a hunt for monsters in their 600 level or around. Even when I was "alone" is right for this context, not "solely". While "went for a hunt" is grammatical, it implies going one time and thus doesn't work with "often", which implies many times. |
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I got almost no reword of experience points because the gap between the level of monsters and I are quite far open. I got almost no rew |
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But I was enjoying hunts seeking for drop of rare items, like first or second ever dropped item in the server or high price estimated item to sell to one of the top players in the server. |
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But as I grew up, I became not to want to play any games except Japanese chess. |
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One duration in the past, I was always participating online conversation with the same or slightly different peers from each day. |
|
Thanks to it, I can admit that my conversational skill with my native tongue was more upgraded than before, when I was hesitant even to respond to a phone call from someone except my family. |
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Then as I grew up further, I came not to want to talk about everyday matters for many hours continuously. |
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The shorter one is enough. |
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One of the reasons is, to be honest, I am not interested in others' everyday lives. |
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For instance, I don't want to hear about non-productive talk such as complaints to their fellows, celebrities' scandals they are interested in, sports they play or watch, the battle with each other in the talking group in an attempt to get a title of being wiser than the other. |
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Since I started English, I have had many chances to talk with other countries' people. |
|
But after two or so years, or recently, I gradually got also accustomed to talking with them. |
|
So I faced the same problem to a time when I talk to Japanese. |
|
I got tired of hearing about daily matters. |
|
At the same time, thanks to staying for a long time for many days with speaking in English, I became aware of a need to have a chance to use my mother language several times a month. |
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But I think, twice a month is enough to talk with them because I am busy in investing in the U.S. stocks, not in Japanese ones actively lately, and because they compete each other over trifles or some of them always start with negative expression to the assertion from the other person even without hearing up to the last word in the assertion or even though it is completely right assertion with a proof. |
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I have to focus on my own. |
|
That is better moment for me to feel satisfaction. |
|
Time is not someone's. |
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Time is always consumed by itself. |
|
Time doesn't await a man. |
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Through experience, parts of waste are removed of. |
|
Through complex and chaos, the next order will be restructured. |
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Through complexity and chaos, the next order will be restructured. |
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