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AikawaMizore

June 6, 2021

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Gratin

Yesterday, I ate gratin priced at 1400 yen (12.8 dollars) while using shareholder's invitation ticket to cover the equivalent of 1000 yen. So I virtually just payed the rest of 400 yen in cash. However, despite expensive dish in consideration of the price of other same goods in other restaurants, it tasted disappointing. First of all, it was watery like stew while I wanted to eat more condensed and sticky one, at least about its surface with being burnt lightly. Avocados on the top of the dish was also malicious in savory. Overall, I will never ever ever ever (This is the U.S. incumbent President Biden's habitual words, though lol) order again as a conclusion. But this was not due to my mischoice. Rather, I had no choice but to do so, so I didn't regret at all because I already eaten many kinds of the menu in the restaurant throughout the past years while using the tickets, so I wanted to try new one that I had less wanted to choose but had slight curiosity to try. So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finishes, I can go to an adjacent metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company. Especially I can go to a conceptual restaurant where the interior is gorgeous and fantastical and maid-like women (Although, of course, I am more attractive than them lol So honestly I don't want to pay any high-price surcharge like as entrance fee or seat usage charge or whatever is called lol) entertain us and offer the services.

Gratin is one of popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan. Even as a frozen food as well as Chinese dumpling, pasta and takoyaki, it is so common here. But among experience talking to non-Japanese online, strangely, it turns out that they mostly don't know even the existence of the food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan. I don't exactly know in which countries they eat or know about it. And Japanese people certainly don't realize about that fact so that they would be surprised to hear it. I like Gratin and Doria (sister-like food to Gratin like Gratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by a microwave or in a family restaurant. And whenever a restaurant offers both Gratin and Doria, I order Doria with high chance because as I mentioned it before, Doria is similar to the Gratin and includes rice which can fill both of my satisfaction and appetite.

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Yesterday, I ate gratin priced at 1400 yen (12.8 dollars) while using a shareholder's invitation ticket to cover the equivalent of 1000 yen.

So I virtually just payed the rest of the 400 yen in cash.

Or, you can say: "So I virtually just payed 400 yen in cash."

However, despite being an expensive dish in (consideration ofing the price of other same goodimilar dishes in other restaurants), ithe tasted was disappointing.

First of all, it was watery like stew, while I wanted to eat a more condensed and sticky one, and at least about itswith the surface with being burnt lightly browned.

Sometimes "burnt" can have negative connotations. You could say "grilled" (if it was made in an oven), or "browned" to describe a light brown colour from being baked.

Avocados on the top of the dish was also a malicious inthing to include in a savoury dish.

I've corrected it to what I think you meant.

Overall, I will never ever ever ever (This is the U.S. incumbent President Biden's habitual words, though lol) order that again as a conclusion.

But this was not due to my mischoice.

Rather, I had no choice but to do so, so I didn't regret it at all because I had already eaten many kother thindgs ofrom the menu in theat restaurant throughout the past years while using the tickets, so I wanted to try a new one that I had lessn't wanted to choose so much but had a slight curiosity to try.

So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finishes, I can go to an adjacent metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company ticket.

EspeciallyIn particular, I can go to a conceptual restaurant where the interior is gorgeous and fantastical, and that has maid-like woaitresses who serve us provide entertainment. (Although, of course, I am more attractive than them lol So h). Honestly, I don't want to pay any high-price surcharge like assuch as an entrance fee or seat usage charge or whatever is called lol) entertain us and offer the services.

Your original sentence was a bit difficult to read! Try putting similar ideas closer together.

Gratin is one of the most popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan.

Even as a frozen food as well aslike Chinese dumplings, pasta and takoyaki, it is so common here.

But among my experiences talking to non-Japanese people online, strangely, it turns out that they mostly don't know eveneven know about the existence of the food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to for sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan.

I don't exactly know in which countries they eat or know about itgratin.

And Japanese people certainly don't realize about that fact so that they would be surprised to hear it.

I like Ggratin and Ddoria (a sister-like food to Ggratin like Ggratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by a microwave or in a family restaurant.

Decide whether you want to capitalise food names or not - then give all of them (or none of them) a capital letter.

And whenever a restaurant offers both Gratin and Doria, I order Doria with high chanceam likely to order Doria because as I mentioned it before, Doria is similar to the Gratin and includes rice which can fulfill both of my satisfaction and appetite.

Again, decide about the capitals.

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Avocados on top of gratin? Oh no! I'm so sorry for your watery stew experience.
I think gratin originated in France, although Japanese gratin has probably evolved.

For your writing, try working on making the sentences easier to understand. Don't be afraid to make shorter sentences - some of them just now are very long. It's like I'm reading what you are saying out loud in a conversation. Try redrafting your writing before you post it. If you have any questions about my comments, let me know :)

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AikawaMizore

June 11, 2021

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Yes, that was, and Doria was born in Japan.


First, I couldn't say in this way because the subject is not a human despite eating something.
''I don't exactly know which countries eat or know about gratin.''
Could it be good in a form of original sentence?


Second, I am hesitant to use this ''the most'' because for me, it might be overstating.
''Gratin is one of the most popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan.''
So, how could I say? Was that original sentence wrong concerning grammar?

Thank you for correcting my unintelligible sentences.
It helps me a lot.
I could feel deep attentiveness of yours to both my original thought and minute differences.

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barleytea

Aug. 14, 2021

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Sorry for the late reply! But thanks for your questions.

For your first question, you're right, it is a bit confusing because the subject isn't human. But in English, it's fine to say that a country "eats" (something). This means "the people of that country eat (something)".
Structure -> a country (subject) eats (verb) gratin (object)

Or, if you would like to leave out the subject entirely, we can use the passive voice (食べる -> 食べられる). We could say:
"I don't know which countries gratin is eaten in." But I think the other example I gave above ("...which countries eat gratin...") sounds better here.

For your second question, I understand what you're saying. I assumed you meant to say "the most", so I added it in.
But, you mean that it isn't the most popular, but it is *one* of the popular dishes in Japan. In that case, I would change it to:
"Gratin is one of [1) the many/ 2) a number of] popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan."
If you feel there are many types of popular, common and long-lasting foods in Japan, go for option (1).
If you feel there are a few, but not many, go for option (2).

I hope this helps! And sorry again for the hiatus. If you're still not sure about the translation options I offered, feel free to post your original idea in Japanese and I'll see what I can do :)

Gratin


Yesterday, I ate gratin priced at 1400 yen (12.8 dollars) while using shareholder's invitation ticket to cover the equivalent of 1000 yen.


Yesterday, I ate gratin priced at 1400 yen (12.8 dollars) while using a shareholder's invitation ticket to cover the equivalent of 1000 yen.

So I virtually just payed the rest of 400 yen in cash.


So I virtually just payed the rest of the 400 yen in cash.

Or, you can say: "So I virtually just payed 400 yen in cash."

However, despite expensive dish in consideration of the price of other same goods in other restaurants, it tasted disappointing.


However, despite being an expensive dish in (consideration ofing the price of other same goodimilar dishes in other restaurants), ithe tasted was disappointing.

First of all, it was watery like stew while I wanted to eat more condensed and sticky one, at least about its surface with being burnt lightly.


First of all, it was watery like stew, while I wanted to eat a more condensed and sticky one, and at least about itswith the surface with being burnt lightly browned.

Sometimes "burnt" can have negative connotations. You could say "grilled" (if it was made in an oven), or "browned" to describe a light brown colour from being baked.

Avocados on the top of the dish was also malicious in savory.


Avocados on the top of the dish was also a malicious inthing to include in a savoury dish.

I've corrected it to what I think you meant.

Overall, I will never ever ever ever (This is the U.S. incumbent President Biden's habitual words, though lol) order again as a conclusion.


Overall, I will never ever ever ever (This is the U.S. incumbent President Biden's habitual words, though lol) order that again as a conclusion.

But this was not due to my mischoice.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Rather, I had no choice but to do so, so I didn't regret at all because I already eaten many kinds of the menu in the restaurant throughout the past years while using the tickets, so I wanted to try new one that I had less wanted to choose but had slight curiosity to try.


Rather, I had no choice but to do so, so I didn't regret it at all because I had already eaten many kother thindgs ofrom the menu in theat restaurant throughout the past years while using the tickets, so I wanted to try a new one that I had lessn't wanted to choose so much but had a slight curiosity to try.

So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finish, I can go to the metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company.


Especially I can go to a conceptual restaurant where the interior is gorgeous and fantastical and maid-like women (Although, of course, I am more attractive than them lol So honestly I don't want to pay any high-price surcharge like as entrance fee or seat usage charge or whatever is called lol) entertain us and offer the services.


EspeciallyIn particular, I can go to a conceptual restaurant where the interior is gorgeous and fantastical, and that has maid-like woaitresses who serve us provide entertainment. (Although, of course, I am more attractive than them lol So h). Honestly, I don't want to pay any high-price surcharge like assuch as an entrance fee or seat usage charge or whatever is called lol) entertain us and offer the services.

Your original sentence was a bit difficult to read! Try putting similar ideas closer together.

Gratin is one of popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan.


Gratin is one of the most popular, common, and long-lasting foods in Japan.

Even as a frozen food as well as Chinese dumpling, pasta and takoyaki, it is so common here.


Even as a frozen food as well aslike Chinese dumplings, pasta and takoyaki, it is so common here.

But among experience talking to non-Japanese online, strangely, it turns out that they don't know even the existence of it as a food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan.


I don't exactly know in which countries they eat or know about it.


I don't exactly know in which countries they eat or know about itgratin.

And Japanese people certainly don't realize about that fact so that they would be surprised to hear it.


And Japanese people certainly don't realize about that fact so that they would be surprised to hear it.

I like Gratin and Doria (sister-like food to Gratin like Gratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by microwave or in family restaurants.


And whenever a restaurant offers both Gratin and Doria, I order Doria with high chance because as I mentioned it before, Doria is similar to the Gratin and includes rice which can fill both of my satisfaction and appetite.


And whenever a restaurant offers both Gratin and Doria, I order Doria with high chanceam likely to order Doria because as I mentioned it before, Doria is similar to the Gratin and includes rice which can fulfill both of my satisfaction and appetite.

Again, decide about the capitals.

So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finishes, I can go to the metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company.


So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finishes, I can go to an adjacent metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company.


So, it's totally O.K. If the pandemic finishes, I can go to an adjacent metropolis where I am supposed to be able to have more choices by using the same ticket of the company ticket.

But among experience talking to non-Japanese online, strangely, it turns out that they mostly don't know even the existence of it as a food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan.


I like Gratin and Doria (sister-like food to Gratin like Gratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by a microwave or in family restaurants.


I like Gratin and Doria (sister-like food to Gratin like Gratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by a microwave or in a family restaurant.


I like Ggratin and Ddoria (a sister-like food to Ggratin like Ggratin plus rice) whether it is cooked by a microwave or in a family restaurant.

Decide whether you want to capitalise food names or not - then give all of them (or none of them) a capital letter.

But among experience talking to non-Japanese online, strangely, it turns out that they mostly don't know even the existence of the food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan.


But among my experiences talking to non-Japanese people online, strangely, it turns out that they mostly don't know eveneven know about the existence of the food, although they know about and give good feedbacks to for sushi, ramen, and curry and rice in Japan.

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