May 16, 2021
Feminism #1
Feminism was a production of the last two centenaries and is popular nowadays in society. It is a significant symbol of females fighting for freedom and equality. From the 18th century, women used their pen to fight for equal rights and moaned unfair treatment starting in British. From the early 19th century, women had fought for their right to vote and election. Then in the early 20th century, Engerland women finally had achieved legal and civil equality. In the historical big picture, feminism activities had gained uncountable achievement and success to approach equality between different genders. But this triumph of feminism was flourishing in the West, instead of the East. There are many reasons, which could analyze why feminism is wide-spreading in the West. Comparing the East countries, such as China and India, people could through different angles understand that the East countries could not be a hotbed of feminist’ ideas. For example, historical religions, domestic culture, and social structure could be one of the elements to influence the spreading of feminism. Under those influences, the core of feminists is having to mutate and have been a misunderstanding by people. While feminism is flushing in the United States, it is sagging in China and India.
please, help me check the grammar and sentence, my professor said the whole essay is easily confusing.
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It is a significant symbol of female's main focus is fighting for the freedom and equality of women.
From theStarting in 18th century, women used their pen to fight for equal rights and moaned unfair treatment starting in British Britain, women wrote and protested in support of equal rights and to criticize their unfair treatment.
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Then in the early 20th century, Engerlandlish women finally had achieved legal and civil equality.
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But this triumph of feminism was flourishingoccurred only in the West, instead ofnot the East.
There are many reasons, which one could analyze as to why feminism is wide-spreadingpopular in the West.
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Under those influences, the core of feminists is having to mutate and have been am has been challenged and misunderstandingood by people.
While feminism is fluourishing in the United States, it is staggnating in China and India.
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This is an improved but far from perfect version of your essay. Did your teacher not have any feedback for you?
May 16, 2021
My professor just said I have to revise it. He said I have a lot of the grammar and sentences don't make sense. But he doesn't any specific examples to show me how to improve. And thanks your reply.
May 17, 2021
Using Grammarly might help you. And at the very least, writing in a word processor with spellcheck should eliminate misspellings like "Engerland".
May 17, 2021
how can I improve my English? except the wrong vocabulary speeding
I don't get why my professor said the sentences are confusing.
thanks you
May 17, 2021
I could understand most of what you wrote, but there's a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, as well as ideas that just aren't phrased very well by the standard of a native speaker. Is this essay for an English class or are you taking other classes at an English speaking university?
May 17, 2021
It is for the ENGLISH 1 course which is university & reading composition. it is too hard. I am almost fall
May 17, 2021
I went to an American college with a lot of Chinese students whose writing sounded similar to yours so I don't think your English is too bad. I'm happy to answer your questions anytime and I might make some suggestions for the other parts of your essay when I have more time tomorrow.
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Feminism #1 |
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Feminism was a production of the last two centenaries and is popular nowadays in society. Feminism |
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It is a significant symbol of females fighting for freedom and equality. It |
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From the 18th century, women used their pen to fight for equal rights and moaned unfair treatment starting in British.
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From the early 19th century, women had fought for their right to vote and election.
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Then in the early 20th century, Engerland women finally had achieved legal and civil equality. Then in the early 20th century, Eng |
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In the historical big picture, feminism activities had gained uncountable achievement and success to approach equality between different genders. In the historical big picture, feminis |
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But this triumph of feminism was flourishing in the West, instead of the East. But this triumph of feminism |
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There are many reasons, which could analyze why feminism is wide-spreading in the West. There are many reasons |
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Comparing the East countries, such as China and India, people could through different angles understand that the East countries could not be a hotbed of feminist’ ideas.
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For example, historical religions, domestic culture, and social structure could be one of the elements to influence the spreading of feminism. For example, |
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Under those influences, the core of feminists is having to mutate and have been a misunderstanding by people. Under those influences, the core of feminis |
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While feminism is flushing in the United States, it is sagging in China and India. While feminism is fl |
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