Sept. 28, 2025
Faded Star
Bangkok in June is hot and dry. But that Friday evening at the bus tour station, I did not noticed how air was baking me alive. I sat on floor and waited for bus, too tired to find an empty seat. Since tomorrow would be the start of weekish-long national holiday, parking lots are busy with bus come and go every 15 minutes. Many people came here to their hometown, eagared to celerabate these long-anticipated holidays. Unlike me, who lost track of time and only noticed this important festival from workplace's groupchat. Luckily, my self-torture interrepted with the brightness from my bus' headlight. I headed to the bus and shoved all of my belonging to storage at the bottom. Then, I went to my window seat and slept without a single thought.
I suddenly woke up in the middle of night. The whole lobby would be pitch black If not because the street lamps are on. I saw the crowded yet silent bus driving through road. I tried to go back to sleep as I don't want my relatives saw me in corpse state. However, my brain seemed like don't understand my intention. With a few struggles, I gave up and looked at the window to kill some time. I noticed the lack of star in the sky. My first thought is "Is my eyesight that bad? I already wear the glasses! Shouldn't those help me see clearer?!". But I pondered for a while, I concluded that it must be the street lights that dim the sky. I have a similar situation when I was little. The difference is I could see star beautifully hanging on the sky. I complained in my head about the lost beauty from countryside louder with every light poles bus pass by. Unexpectedly a single thought snapped in my mind: "Aren't these light poles good for drivers?". In the end, I accept that these roads weren't for me alone and I should sleep 'cause it'd been half hour since I woke up.
Faded Star
Bangkok in June is hot and dry.
But that Friday evening at the bus tour station, I did not noticed how the air was baking me alive.
I sat on the floor and waited for the bus, too tired to find an empty seat.
Since tomorrow would beis the start of weekish-longa national holiday that's about a week long, parking lots are busy with buses that come and go every 15 minutes.
Many people came here to their hometown, eagareder to celerabrate these long-anticipated holidays.
UnlikeContrasting me, who lost track of time and only noticed this important festival from my workplace's groupchat.
Luckily, my self-torture was interreupted withby the brightness from my bus' headlight.s.
I headed to the bus and shoved all of my belonging tointo the storage at the bottom.below.
Then, I went to my window seat and slept without a single thought.
I suddenly woke up in the middle of night.
The whole lobby would be pitch black Iif not becausefor the street lamps arebeing on.
I saw the crowded yet silent bus driving throughdown the road.
I tried to go back to sleep as I don't want my relatives sawto see me in a corpse-like state.
Wow, great job! "corpse-like" state is indeed used to describe someone who lacks sleep. That's a great simile and expression.
However, my brain seemed like don'to not understand my intention.
With a few struggles, I gave up and looked aout the window to kill some time.
"kill some time" is another great expression. It's a metaphor.
I noticed the lack of stars in the sky.
My first thought iwas "Is my eyesight that bad?
I already wear thore glasses!
Shouldn't those help me see more clearerly?!".
But I pondered for a while, and eventually, I concluded that it must be the street lights that dim the sky.
I haved a similar situation when I was little.
The difference is that I could see every star beautifully hanging oin the sky.
I complained in my head about the lost beauty from countryside louder with every light poles bus pass by.
This metaphor is too convoluted. I wouldn't say it.
Unexpectedly a single thought snapped in my mind: "Aren't these light poles good for drivers?".
In the end, I accept that these roads weren't for me alone and I should sleep 'cause it'd been half hour since I woke up.
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Great work! Keep it up! Your English is excellent, just keep practicing and learning as much as possible.
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I have a similar situation when I was little. I ha |
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Unexpectedly a single thought snapped in my mind: "Aren't these light poles good for drivers?". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the end, I accept that these roads weren't for me alone and I should sleep 'cause it'd been half hour since I woke up. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Faded Star This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Bangkok in June is hot and dry. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But that Friday evening at the bus tour station, I did not noticed how air was baking me alive. But that Friday evening at the bus |
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I sat on floor and waited for bus, too tired to find an empty seat. I sat on the floor and waited for the bus, too tired to find an empty seat. |
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Since tomorrow would be the start of weekish-long national holiday, parking lots are busy with bus come and go every 15 minutes. Since tomorrow |
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Many people came here to their hometown, eagared to celerabate these long-anticipated holidays. Many people came here to their hometown, eag |
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Unlike me, who lost track of time and only noticed this important festival from workplace's groupchat.
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Luckily, my self-torture interrepted with the brightness from my bus' headlight. Luckily, my self-torture was interr |
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I headed to the bus and shoved all of my belonging to storage at the bottom. I headed to the bus and shoved all of my belonging |
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Then, I went to my window seat and slept without a single thought. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I suddenly woke up in the middle of night. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The whole lobby would be pitch black If not because the street lamps are on. The whole lobby would be pitch black |
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I saw the crowded yet silent bus driving through road. I saw the crowded yet silent bus driving |
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I tried to go back to sleep as I don't want my relatives saw me in corpse state. I tried to go back to sleep as I don't want my relatives Wow, great job! "corpse-like" state is indeed used to describe someone who lacks sleep. That's a great simile and expression. |
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However, my brain seemed like don't understand my intention. However, my brain seemed |
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With a few struggles, I gave up and looked at the window to kill some time. With a few struggles, I gave up and looked "kill some time" is another great expression. It's a metaphor. |
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I noticed the lack of star in the sky. I noticed the lack of stars in the sky. |
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My first thought is "Is my eyesight that bad? My first thought |
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I already wear the glasses! I already w |
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Shouldn't those help me see clearer?!". Shouldn't those help me see more clear |
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But I pondered for a while, I concluded that it must be the street lights that dim the sky. But I pondered for a while, and eventually, I concluded that it must be the street lights that dim the sky. |
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The difference is I could see star beautifully hanging on the sky. The difference is that I could see every star beautifully hanging |
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I complained in my head about the lost beauty from countryside louder with every light poles bus pass by. I complained in my head about the lost beauty from countryside louder with every light poles bus pass by. This metaphor is too convoluted. I wouldn't say it. |
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