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heyyawn

May 13, 2021

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Diary: The Darkest Day

Today is the 100th day of writing, and the darkest day of my life.
I was let go from one of my part-time jobs. That sucks a little, but it's not the worst. Today in that part-time Go class, a boy cried out because a Go piece was touched by a tablemate. Then he deliberately spilled the pieces on the floor. His tablemate, a girl, bent down on the floor to help pick the pieces. Then he stepped on her and kicked her. Yes, he stepped on her hands, on her arms, on her feet, on her legs. There were footprints all over her clothes and body! It was horrible! I forcefully pulled away and asked the boy to apologize to the girl, and he continued to cry out. I told the other children to go to the teacher at school, and the other children went. No teacher came over. I told the girl to go clean it up and go to the teacher together. They went, and I thought the teacher would come right away. But I was so naive that no teacher came by the end of the lesson. What really made me despair was this indifference of the people.
Then I was dismissed for managing a class that was too noisy.


I've put my trust in you
Pushed as far as I can go
For all this
There's only one thing you should know
I tried so hard
And got so far
But in the end
It doesn't even matter

diarychina
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Diary: The Darkest Day

Today is themy 100th day of writing, and the darkest day of my life.

I was let go from one of my part-time jobs.

That sucks a little, but it's not the worst.

Today in that part-time Go class, a boy scried outeamed because a Go piece was touched by a tablemate.

Then he deliberately spilled the pieces on the floor.

His tablemate, a girl, bent down on the floor to help pick up the pieces.

Then he stepped on her and kicked her.

Yes, he stepped on her hands, on her arms, on her feet, onand her legs.

There were footprints all over her clothes and body!

It was horrible!

I forcefully pulled the boy away and asked the boyhim to apologize to the girl, and he continued to cry outwhine and scream.

I told the other children to go to get another teacher at school, and the other childreny went.

NBut no teacher came over.

But I was so naive thatbecause no teacher came by the end of the lesson.

What really made me despair was this indifference of the people.e other teachers' indifference.

Then I was dismissed for managing a class that was too noisynot being able to manage a noisy class.

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That's horrible. I hope tomorrow is better for you.

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heyyawn

May 15, 2021

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Thanks :)

Diary: The Darkest Day


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Today is the 100th day of writing, and the darkest day of my life.


Today is themy 100th day of writing, and the darkest day of my life.

I was let go from one of my part-time jobs.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

That sucks a little, but it's not the worst.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Today in that part-time Go class, a boy cried out because a Go piece was touched by a tablemate.


Today in that part-time Go class, a boy scried outeamed because a Go piece was touched by a tablemate.

Then he deliberately spilled the pieces on the floor.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

His tablemate, a girl, bent down on the floor to help pick the pieces.


His tablemate, a girl, bent down on the floor to help pick up the pieces.

Then he stepped on her and kicked her.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Yes, he stepped on her hands, on her arms, on her feet, on her legs.


Yes, he stepped on her hands, on her arms, on her feet, onand her legs.

There were footprints all over her clothes and body!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It was horrible!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I forcefully pulled away and asked the boy to apologize to the girl, and he continued to cry out.


I forcefully pulled the boy away and asked the boyhim to apologize to the girl, and he continued to cry outwhine and scream.

I told the other children to go to the teacher at school, and the other children went.


I told the other children to go to get another teacher at school, and the other childreny went.

No teacher came over.


NBut no teacher came over.

I told the girl to go clean it up and go to the teacher together.


They went, and I thought the teacher would come right away.


But I was so naive that no teacher came by the end of the lesson.


But I was so naive thatbecause no teacher came by the end of the lesson.

What really made me despair was this indifference of the people.


What really made me despair was this indifference of the people.e other teachers' indifference.

Then I was dismissed for managing a class that was too noisy.


Then I was dismissed for managing a class that was too noisynot being able to manage a noisy class.

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