Jan. 31, 2023
Diary 1/23 &1/24
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Married daughters will visit their parents' home on the second day of the Lunar New Year. As a result, we always visit my grandparents’ home today. We meet some relatives who only come once a year. My grandmother prepared a big meal for us. When we were full, it was time for UNO! The most hilarious part was when the ''plus two’’ card was thrown by my sister. There were five people playing. By the way, we always say ''start a war!'' when the ''plus two'' card or ''plus four'' card is thrown. In that round, every player had a ''plus two'' card and my sister who threw the card first had two pieces of it. At the end of the war, my aunt had to add twelve cards. We all couldn’t stop laughing.
1/24
Today I went to the temple near my house with my father and twin sisters in order to pacify Tai Sui for my grandfather and pray for his health. We knew the former president would give a small gift for everyone who wanted by accident. This is the custom that famous politicians will visit some temples and give people a gift during the Lunar New Year. Therefore, my sisters got in line, and my father and I did the major thing. Fortunately, they got the gifts before his next schedule even though there were so many people.
Diary 1/23 &1/24
1/23
Married daughters will visit their parents' home on the second day of the Lunar New Year.
As a result, we always visit my grandparents’ home today.
We meetget to see some relatives who only come once a year.
My grandmother prepared a big meal for us.
When we were full, it was time for UNO!
The most hilarious part was when the ''plus two’’ card was thrown by my sister.
There were five people playing.
By the way, we always say, ''start a war!''
when the ''plus two'' card or ''plus four'' card is thrown.
In that round, every player had a ''plus two'' card and my sister who threw the card first had two pieces of itof them.
At the end of the war, my aunt had to add twelve cards.
We all couldn’t stop laughing.
1/24
Today I went to the temple near my house with my father and twin sisters in order to pacify Tai Sui for my grandfather and pray for his health.
We knew the former president would give a small gift forto everyone who wantedcame (?) by accident.
This is the custom that: famous politicians will visit some temples and give people a gift during the Lunar New Year.
Therefore, my sisters got in line, and my father and I did the major thing.
Fortunately, they got the gifts before his next scheduletop even though there were so many people.
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Good work!
MAccording to tradition, married daughters will visit their parents' home on the second day of the Lunar New Year.
Because you are speaking about a general tradition, you can use the present tense here. I added "According to tradition" to clarify the meaning.
As a result, we always visit my grandparents’ home todayon this date.
- "Today" is only for the present day, it doesn't make sense to use it for many days.
We meet some of our relatives who only come once a year.
My grandmother prepared a big meal for us.
When we were full, it was time for UNO!
The most hilarious part was when the ''plus two’’ card was thrownplayed by my sister.
There were five people playing.
By the way, we always say ''start a war!''
when the ''plus two'' card or ''plus four'' card is thrown.
In thate round I mentioned, every player had a ''plus two'' card and my sister, who threwplayed the card first, had two pieces of itof the "plus two" cards.
- It's a bit confusing to use "that" here, because you changed to subject to explain the rules of the game. It's more clear to be more explicit, so I added "In the round I mentioned".
At the end of the war, my aunt had to add twelve cards.
We all couldn’t stop laughing.
Today I went to the temple near my house with my father and twin sisters in order to pacifylease Tai Sui for my grandfather and pray for his health.
- "pacify" is probably a bit strong here. Pacify is used to mean "calm someone who is angry". I substituted "please", but that might not be exactly what you meant. If you give more some more details I can suggest an alternative.
We knew the former president would give a small gift forsurprise everyone who wanted by accidenwith a small gift.
- I think this is what you mean by "by accident". Please let me know if you meant something else!
This is theere's a custom that famous politicians will visit some temples and give people a gift during the Lunar New Year.
Therefore, my sisters got in line, and my father and I did the major thingcompleted the important prayers.
Fortunately, they got the gifts before his next scheduled appointment even though there were so many people.
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Very good grammar! I enjoyed learning about these customs, thank you for posting.
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Married daughters will visit their parents' home on the second day of the Lunar New Year.
Because you are speaking about a general tradition, you can use the present tense here. I added "According to tradition" to clarify the meaning. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As a result, we always visit my grandparents’ home today. As a result, we always visit my grandparents’ home - "Today" is only for the present day, it doesn't make sense to use it for many days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We meet some relatives who only come once a year. We meet some of our relatives who only come once a year. We |
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In that round, every player had a ''plus two'' card and my sister who threw the card first had two pieces of it. In th - It's a bit confusing to use "that" here, because you changed to subject to explain the rules of the game. It's more clear to be more explicit, so I added "In the round I mentioned". In that round, every player had a ''plus two'' card and my sister who threw the card first had two |
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Today I went to the temple near my house with my father and twin sisters in order to pacify Tai Sui for my grandfather and pray for his health. Today I went to the temple near my house with my father and twin sisters in order to p - "pacify" is probably a bit strong here. Pacify is used to mean "calm someone who is angry". I substituted "please", but that might not be exactly what you meant. If you give more some more details I can suggest an alternative. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We knew the former president would give a small gift for everyone who wanted by accident. We knew the former president would - I think this is what you mean by "by accident". Please let me know if you meant something else! We knew the former president would give a small gift |
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