June 3, 2025
This semester, I enrolled in a PE class that focused on cheerleading and jazz dance. Having no sense of rhythm, no coordination, and no flow, I was basically the worst dancer in the class. I was often off-tempo and doing the wrong moves. Even when I managed to stay on beat and get the steps right, my movements still looked clumsy, awkward, and lifeless.
At first, I thought cheerleading was already hard enough, but once we started learning jazz, I became even more frustrated. Cheerleading is a more energetic dance that requires sharp and clean motions like high and low V-arms, high kicks, and quick footwork. Jazz, on the other hand, is a smoother dance with more fluid, graceful motions, like turns, leaps, body rolls, and gliding steps. With cheerleading, my biggest problem was always falling a beat behind, but with enough practice, I could eventually keep up. When it comes to jazz, though, staying on tempo wasn't the only issue. The real struggle was that I could never pull off clean spins or more complex moves that required higher levels of balance and core strength. Every time I tried to spin, I'd either end up facing the wrong direction or lose momentum halfway through and come to an awkward stop.
Performing in front of the class for the midterm and final was just mortifying. For the midterm, each group had to choreograph and perform a 1.5-minute routine. I felt like a dead weight in my group. When my groupmates were busy choreographing the routine, I always zoned out and got completely lost in my daydreams. When we were on stage, I was clearly out of sync with everyone else. For the final, the teacher randomly picked six students at a time to perform a jazz routine she taught us. During my spin, I couldn't keep my posture straight and didn't fully open my arms and lift them to chest level, so I ended up looking like a confused chicken flapping its wings. And when it came time for the leap, I didn't extend my legs wide enough, so instead of a smooth jump, it looked more like I tripped mid-air.
Now, when I rewatch the videos of my midterm and final performances, I cringe so hard. All my classmates dance with such precision and grace, and their movements look expressive and effortless. Watching myself next to them is just humiliating.
Dance Class
This semester, I enrolled in a PE class that focused on cheerleading and jazz dance.
Having no sense ofWith no rhythm, no coordination, and nor flow, I was basically the worst dancer in the class.
"Having no sense of..." is fine, but a bit wordier and slightly formal.
I was often off-tempobeat and doing the wrong moves.
"Off-beat" is a bit more idiomatic in dance contexts. "Off-tempo" is understandable but less commonly used by dancers or performers.
Even when I managed to stay on beat and get the steps right, my movements still looked clumsy, awkward, and lifeless.
At first, I thought cheerleading was already hard enough, but once we started learning jazz, I became even more frustrated.
Cheerleading is a more energetic dance that requires sharp and clean motions like high and low V-arms, high kicks, and quick footwork.
Jazz, on the other hand, is a smoother dance with more fluid, graceful motions, like turns, leaps, body rolls, and gliding steps.
With cheerleading, my biggest problem was always falling a beat behind, but with enough practice, I could eventually keep up.
When it comes to jazz, though, staying on tempo wasn't the only issue.
The real struggle was that I could never pulling off clean spins or more complex moves that required higher levels ofmore balance and core strength.
Using the gerund "pulling off" makes the sentence smoother and less heavy than “that I could never pull off.” It keeps the rhythm of the writing flowing.
Every time I tried to spin, I'd either end up facing the wrong direction or lose momentum halfway through and come to an awkward stop.
Performing in front of the class for the midterm and final was just mortifying.
For the midterm, each group had to choreograph and perform a 1.5-minute routine.
I felt like a dead weight in my group — just dragging the team down.
This is optional, but adding a small follow-up enhances the emotion and self-awareness, without making it too heavy.
When my groupmates were busy choreographing the routine, I always zoned out and got completely lost in my daydreams.
When we were oOn stage, I was clearly out of sync with everyone else.
“When we were on stage” is fine, but “On stage” is snappier and doesn’t lose meaning. Since this is more of a reflective, casual piece, shorter phrases like this keep the momentum.
For the final, the teacher randomly picked six students at a time to perform a jazz routine she taught us.
During my spin, I couldn't keep my posture straight and didn't fully open my arms and lift them to chest level, so I ended up looking like a confused chicken flapping its wings.
And when it came time for the leap, I didn't extend my legs wide enough, so instead of a smooth jump, it looked more like I tripped mid-air.
Now, when I rewatch the videos of my midterm and final performances, I cringe so hard.
All my classmates dance with such precision and grace, and their movements look expressive and effortless.
Watching myself next to them is just humiliating.
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Your writing was already very clear and well-written. There were no real issues—just a few small improvements suggested for smoother flow or more natural phrasing. The corrections were simply style suggestions, not fixes. Great job overall!
Dance Class
This semester, I enrolled in a PE class that focused on cheerleading and jazz dance.
Having no sense of rhythm, no coordination, and no flow, I was basically the worst dancer in the class.
I was often off-tempo and doing the wrong moves.
Even when I managed to stay on beat and get the steps right, my movements still looked clumsy, awkward, and lifeless.
At first, I thought cheerleading was already hard enough, but once we started learning jazz, I became even more frustrated.
Cheerleading is a more energetic dance that requires sharp and clean motions like high and low V-arms, high kicks, and quick footwork.
Jazz, on the other hand, is a smoother dance with more fluid, graceful motions, like turns, leaps, body rolls, and gliding steps.
With cheerleading, my biggest problem was always falling a beat behind, but with enough practice, I could eventually keep up.
When it comes to jazz, though, staying on tempo wasn't the only issue.
The real struggle was that I could never pull off clean spins or more complex moves that required higher levels of balance and core strength.
Every time I tried to spin, I'd either end up facing the wrong direction or lose momentum halfway through and come to an awkward stop.
Performing in front of the class for the midterm and final was just mortifying.
For the midterm, each group had to choreograph and perform a 1.5-minute routine.
I felt like a dead weight in my group.
When my groupmates were busy choreographing the routine, I always zoned out and got completely lost in my daydreams.
When we were on stage, I was clearly out of sync with everyone else.
For the final, the teacher randomly picked six students at a time to perform a jazz routine she taught us.
During my spin, I couldn't keep my posture straight and didn't fully open my arms and lift them to chest level, so I ended up looking like a confused chicken flapping its wings.
And when it came time for the leap, I didn't extend my legs wide enough, so instead of a smooth jump, it looked more like I tripped mid-air.
Now, when I rewatch the videos of my midterm and final performances, I cringe so hard.
All my classmates dance with such precision and grace, and their movements look expressive and effortless.
Watching myself next to them is just humiliating.
Feedback
Very good! You’re range of vocabulary is impressive.
This semester, I enrolled in a PE class that focused on cheerleading and jazz dance.
Having no sense of rhythm, no coordination, and no flow, I was basically the worst dancer in the class.
Jazz, on the other hand, is a smoother dance (form) with more fluid, graceful motions, like turns, leaps, body rolls, and gliding steps.
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Excellent work! Your English is great. You should be proud of yourself! If I were you, I'd be proud of myself for getting out of my comfort zone and doing something that is difficult.
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Performing in front of the class for the midterm and final was just mortifying. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
For the midterm, each group had to choreograph and perform a 1.5-minute routine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
I felt like a dead weight in my group. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I felt like a dead weight in my group — just dragging the team down. This is optional, but adding a small follow-up enhances the emotion and self-awareness, without making it too heavy. |
When my groupmates were busy choreographing the routine, I always zoned out and got completely lost in my daydreams. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
When we were on stage, I was clearly out of sync with everyone else. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
“When we were on stage” is fine, but “On stage” is snappier and doesn’t lose meaning. Since this is more of a reflective, casual piece, shorter phrases like this keep the momentum. |
For the final, the teacher randomly picked six students at a time to perform a jazz routine she taught us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
During my spin, I couldn't keep my posture straight and didn't fully open my arms and lift them to chest level, so I ended up looking like a confused chicken flapping its wings. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
And when it came time for the leap, I didn't extend my legs wide enough, so instead of a smooth jump, it looked more like I tripped mid-air. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Now, when I rewatch the videos of my midterm and final performances, I cringe so hard. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
All my classmates dance with such precision and grace, and their movements look expressive and effortless. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Watching myself next to them is just humiliating. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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