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bobjohn

Sept. 13, 2025

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Daily Life: Part 17

Long time no see, guys. I have been delivering food for 5 days. Of course, I have to admit I got some money that I have prepared for my tuition studying abroad. Yesterday was a rainy day, and I drove my e-bike throughout half the city. I met a lot of my colleagues when I was riding. An interesting thing was that I got lost in the shopping mall. Since I am almost due on my delivery time, I am kind of anxious. You can imagine it as if you were stuck in a strange place, you couldn't have gotten out the right exit way. What a pity. I tried to ask someone for help, but most of them were really busy. You know, the lunch time. Finally, I remembered a signal shop, and I arrived at my destination on time. HO~, what time is it? It's delivery time! Here we go!😊

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Daily Life: Part 17

Long time no see, guys.

I have been delivering food for 5 days.

Of course, I have to admit the fact that I got some money that I have prepared for my tuition studying abroadsaved up that I can use for my tuition.

Yesterday was a rainy day, and I drove my e-bike throughout half the city.

I met a lot of my colleagues when I was riding.

work colleagues or? 同学 doesnt really have an english equivalent, u can say like classmates or associates

An interesting thing that happened was that I got lost in the shopping mall.

Since I am almost due onlate for my delivery time, I am kind of anxious.

You can imagine it asImagine if you were stuck in a strange place, you cwouldn't have gotten out the righcorrect exit right away.

What a pitySigh.

可怜 doesnt have an equivalenmt in english rlly

I tried to ask someone for help, but most of them were really busy.

You know, the lunch time.

?

Finally, I remembered a signalthat there was an electronics shop, and because of that, I arrived at my destination on time.

whats a signal shop? you mean like a shop for getting a phone?

HO~, what time is it?

It's delivery time!

Here we go!😊

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bobjohn

Sept. 16, 2025

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thanks

Of course, I have to admit I've got some money that I have[quite(?)] some money prepared for my tuition studying abroad.

I might be being picky, but I think something sounds a bit unnatural here. It sounds like you are actively getting some money when I think you mean you have it prepared.

Also, "Of course, I have to admit" sounds a bit confusing to me and I'm not sure what it means in this context. Admitting something is usually about something embarrassing, OR it sounds like you're suggesting the money that you saved here is a pretty big amount (which you might need to give more context to make it clear that this is what you mean, and it's a little strange to use "Of course" for having to admit something).

You know, the lunch time.

Alternatively, you can write "You know: lunch time."

Feedback

Your writing is very good already :) My suggestions are just trying to be helpful and trying to make it sound more natural.

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bobjohn

Sept. 14, 2025

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Wow, thanks for reviewing, and the advice you gave me really help me a lot. I hope we will meet in the next chapter 😊

Daily Life: Part 17


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Long time no see, guys.


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I have been delivering food for 5 days.


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Of course, I have to admit I got some money that I have prepared for my tuition studying abroad.


Of course, I have to admit I've got some money that I have[quite(?)] some money prepared for my tuition studying abroad.

I might be being picky, but I think something sounds a bit unnatural here. It sounds like you are actively getting some money when I think you mean you have it prepared. Also, "Of course, I have to admit" sounds a bit confusing to me and I'm not sure what it means in this context. Admitting something is usually about something embarrassing, OR it sounds like you're suggesting the money that you saved here is a pretty big amount (which you might need to give more context to make it clear that this is what you mean, and it's a little strange to use "Of course" for having to admit something).

Of course, I have to admit the fact that I got some money that I have prepared for my tuition studying abroadsaved up that I can use for my tuition.

Yesterday was a rainy day, and I drove my e-bike throughout half the city.


Yesterday was a rainy day, and I drove my e-bike throughout half the city.

I met a lot of my colleagues when I was riding.


I met a lot of my colleagues when I was riding.

work colleagues or? 同学 doesnt really have an english equivalent, u can say like classmates or associates

An interesting thing was that I got lost in the shopping mall.


An interesting thing that happened was that I got lost in the shopping mall.

Since I am almost due on my delivery time, I am kind of anxious.


Since I am almost due onlate for my delivery time, I am kind of anxious.

What a pity.


What a pitySigh.

可怜 doesnt have an equivalenmt in english rlly

You can imagine it as if you were stuck in a strange place, you couldn't have gotten out the right exit way.


You can imagine it asImagine if you were stuck in a strange place, you cwouldn't have gotten out the righcorrect exit right away.

I tried to ask someone for help, but most of them were really busy.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

You know, the lunch time.


You know, the lunch time.

Alternatively, you can write "You know: lunch time."

You know, the lunch time.

?

Finally, I remembered a signal shop, and I arrived at my destination on time.


Finally, I remembered a signalthat there was an electronics shop, and because of that, I arrived at my destination on time.

whats a signal shop? you mean like a shop for getting a phone?

HO~, what time is it?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It's delivery time!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Here we go!😊


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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