June 8, 2021
Come Back
It's been a while since the last time I posted a journal on LangCorrect. It doesn't mean that I got bored with learning English or became busy at work. I found myself fiddling with mobile phones and wasted time in social media or streaming services. However, I was fortunate to be able to join English training program in our company, which motivates me to write this journal here.
Even though learning English was one of my hobbies to kill my commute time in the beginning, I've become more curious about writing and speaking English. It would be better if I was dedicating my schooldays to improving my skills, but I'm still in my 20's and have opportunities to go abroad or get acquainted with foreign peers.
It's been a while since the last time I posted a journal on LangCorrect, which doesn't mean that I got bored with learning English or became busy at work.
It sounds stylistically better if you combine these two sentences :)
It doesn't mean that I got bored with learning English or became busy at work.
What happened was that I found myself fiddling with mobile phones and wasted time inwith social media orand streaming services.
Adding this transition at the beginning makes the text clearer because it connects this sentence with the last one. Otherwise, it feels a bit out of place.
However, I was fortunate to be able to join the English training program in our company, which has motivatesd me to write this journal here.
Even though learning English was one of my hobbies to kill my commute time in the beginning, I've become more curious about writing and speaking English.
It would be better if I was dedicating my schooldays to improving my skills, but I'm still in my 20's and have opportunities to go abroad or get acquainted with foreign peers.
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Nice journal :D
June 8, 2021
Thanks!
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It's been a while since the last time I posted a journal on LangCorrect. It's been a while since the last time I posted a journal on LangCorrect, which doesn't mean that I got bored with learning English or became busy at work. It sounds stylistically better if you combine these two sentences :) |
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It doesn't mean that I got bored with learning English or became busy at work.
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I found myself fiddling with mobile phones and wasted time in social media or streaming services. What happened was that I found myself fiddling with mobile phones and wasted time Adding this transition at the beginning makes the text clearer because it connects this sentence with the last one. Otherwise, it feels a bit out of place. |
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However, I was fortunate to be able to join English training program in our company, which motivates me to write this journal here. However, I was fortunate to be able to join the English training program in our company, which has motivate |
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Even though learning English was one of my hobbies to kill my commute time in the beginning, I've become more curious about writing and speaking English. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It would be better if I was dedicating my schooldays to improving my skills, but I'm still in my 20's and have opportunities to go abroad or get acquainted with foreign peers. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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