Sept. 30, 2025
Chinese apps, as everyone knows, are very popular, like Wechat, Alipay and which I honestly believe are the most famous, Tik Tok. Despite that, together with fame, controversies also come, and an important subject to mention, it’s about data theft, it’s impossible to introduce polemics without saying this, and so, here I come. So, particularly I don’t recognize one case in which I had data theft. But has a lot of articles and testimonials saying bad practicals from these apps. Stealing data without asking for permission from your users, what goes against the law. Because of that, many countries like the US, India, Australia and UK banned Tik Tok in your country due to this. More examples, it's the companie don’t control the algorithms very well, which result in many contents which kids doesn't are to see, adult contents, the security is much basic and failed, which let we expose.
Aplicativos chineses, como todos sabem, são muito populares, como Wechat, Alipay e que eu sinceramente acredito ser o mais famoso, Tik Tok. Apesar disso, junto com a fama, controvérsias também vêm, e um assunto importante a ser mencionado, é sobre roubo de dados, é impossível introduzir polêmicas sem dizer isso, e então, aqui vou eu. Então, particularmente eu não reconheço um caso em que eu tive roubo de dados. Mas tem muitos artigos e depoimentos dizendo práticas ruins desses aplicativos. Roubar dados sem pedir permissão de seus usuários, o que vai contra a lei. Por causa disso, muitos países como os EUA, Índia, Austrália e Reino Unido baniram o Tik Tok em seu país devido a isso. Mais exemplos, é a empresa não controlar os algoritmos muito bem, o que resulta em muitos conteúdos que as crianças não devem ver, conteúdos adultos, a segurança é muito básica e falha, o que nos deixa expostos.
Chinese apps, as everyone knows, are very popular, like Wechat, and Alipay and of which I honestly believe areTik Tok is the most famous, Tik Tok.
It would work better if you separated it into 2 sentences.
Despite that, together with fame, controversies also come, and an important subject to mention, it’s abouts data theft, i. It’s impossible to introduce polemics without sayfirst discussing this, and so, here I come.
So, particularI actually I don’t recognize one case in which I hadhave any firsthand experience with data theft.
"particularly" doesn't fit here. The verb "recognize" also doesn't work.
But hasthere are a lot of articles and testimonials saying badreporting unethical practicales from these apps.
Stealing data without asking for permission from your users, what goes against the law.
Because of that, many countries like the US, India, Australia and UK banned Tik Tok in your country due to this.
"Because of that" is enough. You don't need "due to this" at the end - it's redundant.
It's a bit weird that you're addressing the reader's directly.
More examples, it's theFurthermore, companies don’t control their algorithms very well, which results in manyonline contents which kids doesn't are to see,aren't meant to see (or shouldn't see), namely adult contents, the. Their security is muchvery basic and failed, which let wineffective, which lets the users become exposed.
Try making shorter and clearer sentences. 2 well written short sentences are often more impressive than one very long and convoluted one.
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Very good. Your vocabulary is quite good, but I would try and keep sentences a bit shorter. You have a lot of different clauses in a single sentence, so it seems a bit convoluted at times. I would recommend giving each sentence one main information, so the text has better flow. Good job.
Because of that, many countries like the US, India, Australia and UK banned Tik Tok in your country due to this. Because of that, many countries like the US, India, Australia and UK banned Tik Tok "Because of that" is enough. You don't need "due to this" at the end - it's redundant. It's a bit weird that you're addressing the reader's directly. |
More examples, it's the companie don’t control the algorithms very well, which result in many contents which kids doesn't are to see, adult contents, the security is much basic and failed, which let we expose.
Try making shorter and clearer sentences. 2 well written short sentences are often more impressive than one very long and convoluted one. |
Chinese apps and your polemics. |
Chinese apps, as everyone knows, are very popular, like Wechat, Alipay and which I honestly believe are the most famous, Tik Tok. Chinese apps, as everyone knows, are very popular, like Wechat It would work better if you separated it into 2 sentences. |
Despite that, together with fame, controversies also come, and an important subject to mention, it’s about data theft, it’s impossible to introduce polemics without saying this, and so, here I come. Despite that, together with fame, controversies also come, and an important subject to mention |
So, particularly I don’t recognize one case in which I had data theft.
"particularly" doesn't fit here. The verb "recognize" also doesn't work. |
But has a lot of articles and testimonials saying bad practicals from these apps. But |
Stealing data without asking for permission from your users, what goes against the law. Stealing data without asking for permission from your users |
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