April 4, 2021
Brief story #1
My father had just brought a mysterious little notebook home. No one had noticed it other than me, and considering he was so immersed in literature, as a child I felt extremely intrigated about what could he have written all that time, since he would tell us stories everynight at bedtime. He had been to Ireland for the last three months, and my mom used to say that she had married a man with an imagination far greater than hers, and that was the reason why I was so attracted to this notebook. What was he able to write, to think, to create, staying so long in such a magnific place? This is the curiosity that I lost, the curiosity that I knew I would never feel again when I found out what he had actually written. I regret so badly for reading those pages. I was not ready for that back then, and neither I am now.
Brief story #1
My father had just brought a mysterious little notebook home.
No one had noticed it other than me, and considering he was so immersed in literature, as a child I felt extremely intrigatued about what could he have written all that time, since he would tell us stories every night at bedtime.
I am not sure what "intrigated" means, I assume you meant to write "intrigued" or "interested."
He had been towas in Ireland for the last three months, and my mom used to say that she had married a man with an imagination far greater than hers, and that was the reason why I was so attracted to this notebook.
"He had been to Ireland for the last three months" sounds a bit unnatural.
What was he able to write, to think, to create, staying so long in such a magnificent place?
"Magnific" is an archaic word that is not often used in modern English.
This is the curiosity that I lost, the curiosity that I knew I would never feel again when I found out what he had actually written.
I regret so badly for reading those pages so badly.
I was not ready for that back then, and neither I am I now.
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April 5, 2021
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I was not ready for that back then, and neither I am now. I was not ready for that back then, and neither |
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My father had just brought a mysterious little notebook home. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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No one had noticed it other than me, and considering he was so immersed in literature, as a child I felt extremely intrigated about what could he have written all that time, since he would tell us stories everynight at bedtime. No one had noticed it other than me, and considering he was so immersed in literature, as a child I felt extremely intrig I am not sure what "intrigated" means, I assume you meant to write "intrigued" or "interested." |
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He had been to Ireland for the last three months, and my mom used to say that she had married a man with an imagination far greater than hers, and that was the reason why I was so attracted to this notebook. He "He had been to Ireland for the last three months" sounds a bit unnatural. |
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What was he able to write, to think, to create, staying so long in such a magnific place? What was he able to write, to think, to create, staying so long in such a magnificent place? "Magnific" is an archaic word that is not often used in modern English. |
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This is the curiosity that I lost, the curiosity that I knew I would never feel again when I found out what he had actually written. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I regret so badly for reading those pages. I regret |
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